Hello and salam to all the readers… I am sharing my latest poem after my last entry here in MAY… I have not shared a lot of my poems here in last couple of years and there have been only few times that I posted anything… Consider this one of those as well
The first sher (with ammendments) was written long time ago … it’s only now that I have written a whole poem on the idea of the first sher
**Shaam-e-Mohabbat dhal gaYee yooN Tanhaai maiN ** JaisaY Doob gayaa Sooraj samander kee gehraai maiN
naa jaanaY, tum saY naataa jub saY chooTaa hai Sadaa dil TooTnaY kee aati hai Shehnaai maiN
jub kabhi khiyaaL kee waadi saY guzartaa hooN DikhtaY haiN chehraY Ajnabi, Rung-e-shanaasaai maiN
sochtaa hooN, dil kee baat zubaaN par laY hee aaouN mazaa kuch tau rakhaa hogaa Qudrat naY ruswaai maiN
woh naa samjhaa kuch bhee meri baatoN kaa mafhoom maiN naY joRaY thaY haroof raat kee siyaahi maiN
huaY abb aur kissi dil kaY woh aseer Anwaar ajab asraar chupaY haiN aye Khudaa teri Sanna’ii maiN
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Outstanding opening Anwar :k:
Ye bhi umda aashaar heiN :k:
This is again a top shot. No doubt the sheir has been put together nicely. But I am more impressed with the depth of thinking working behind the sheir. Remarkable Anwaar :k: And thanx for sharing it with us
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Shaam-e-Mohabbat dhal gaYee yooN Tanhaai maiN **
**JaisaY Doob gayaa Sooraj samander kee gehraai maiN
woh naa samjhaa kuch bhee meri baatoN kaa mafhoommaiN naY joRaY thaY haroof raat kee siyaahi maiN
Anwaar** Q*ureshi
**July 10, 2007*
Wah, buhat hi khoobsurat ghazal likhi hey Anwaar,wesey tou poori ghazal hi buhat achi hey lekin quoted part behad zabardast hey...kya meiN aapki ye ghazal design kar sakti hooN?:~) thanks alot for sharing this beauty:-)
here you go Anwaar, i hopeu like this one, aapko jo pehley bheja tha wuh mujhey koi khaas acha nahi laga tha, this one is also not super but phir bhi kuch behtar hey:-)
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Thanks a lot guys. I will thank each one of you individually soon.
For now, many many thanks to Gul-e-Tasbeeh for the marvellous job that she has done. I am out of words for the effort she has put it.
As for Samad, it is very heart-aching for a poet or writer to be wrongfully acussed of plagiarising; it's not a joke. My poems and my writtings are part of me and if you accuse me of something that you do not have anything to substantiate, then I request you to please, be careful. you are my friend and I expect better from you. You can bring the proof from Akhbar-e-Jahan if you think I cheated. agar Allah kaa naam liya he hai tau jhoot say khud bhee bachnaa chaahiye naa :)
Amal can confirm that the first sher was written by me long time ago in a picture competition and it was slightly different and that I have changed it for the rythm of the poem.
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Here I am
Thank you Amal.
You have been very nice to me on these forums and your words have always inspired me. I wish I could have been of the same caliber but then, woh kiyaa kehtaY haiN “AIk miyaan maiN dau talwaaraiN naheeN rehteeN”
Thanks GUL and as I said you have done a beautiful job.
Yeah yeah i know what you wanted to say
Thanks:D
meri kiyaa auqaat kay kissi ko lift karataa phirooN :-)
thanks Chorni
thankooo :)
aisay karnay kay liye insaan ko jiss marhallay say guzarna paRtaa hai, woh kissi kay liye naheeN maangnaa chaahiye.. Raat amaawas kee aur safar kee tawaalat aisee jo laa mutanaahi mehsoos ho :-)
Thanks. It's an honour to get such remarks from you.
Thank you.
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I think those who would have read, read it. Couple of people I sent the link as well and they were able to read it. Hence, the reasons but as I said, If you want, you can delete it. Sometimes, I feel like my poems do not deserve to be part of Poetry forums anymore, but that’s just my feelings and perhaps my sensitive nature; nothing more.
Anything else? 