Bakhuda aapki Masoomiyat par emaan le aayaa, Aaphi Bataiye.... Log Kitne Sada Hote Hain, unki bhi sadgi par marjane ko ji chahta hai. Magar kisi Darwesh se koi kaise Bezaar ho sakta hai, " MERA PAIGHAAM MOHABBAT HAI JAHAN TAK PONHCHE ", Hum Duniya ko aur kuch nahi to kam az kam, chand achhi Nazmain, do ek piyare sher to de hi sakte hain, woh hazir hai.... Magar mohtarema, aapne meri wakalat to khoob ki, magar, Nazmon par apni rai nahi di, darwesh muntazir hai.... ek nazar Udhar Bhi...Yani Nazmon Par...Kuch to kahiye ke log kahte hain ?
Naaz ho jipe musaawir ko woh tasweer ho tum…wah kya baat hey janaab ki. Darwesh bhara ye red wala “Mere” aek typo ho gaya hey. Zara dhiyaan sey type kia kareiN, ye bohat qeemti cheezeiN hey, zara ehtiyaat sey
By the way, aap ko jis pe naaz hey, wo nazm/ghazal kon si hey?
Charming Girl & Muslim Girl.... Thanks a lot..... Khushbash,
Aap donon ne yah nahi likka ke kon se Nazm Kyun Pasand Aayee.... zara critical analysis ho to dil khol kar ho, aur appreciation ho to bhi farakhdili ke saath, phir bhi nawazish karam maharbaani.
I read this thread but couldn’t get courage to put remarks on such an experienced person’s poems which is showing gr8 experience of life ….. but I thought that at least my comments can increase my capability of knowing someone thoughts and now u’ll tell me that I got ur point or not ……….
BE CHEHRA!
Showing the desperation and I want to give ref of one she’r which will best describe this poem ……………
Woh Frishta Ho Nah Frishtoon Jaisa Ho
Mujhay Talash Hay Uss Key Jo Mera Jaisa Ho
**SUBWAY GIRL **Yaar baaz-au-qaat hum kissi key zameen main kuch likhtay Hain … Nah Janay Keon Mujhay Mahsoos Howa Ka Subway Girl Title Kay Naam Say Main Koi Nazam pahlay parh Chuka hoon …. Leekan Yah Buhat Talkh Haqeeqat Hay Jo Aap Nay Iss Nazam Main Byan Key … Aur Yaqeen Karain Yahi Sawalat Meray Zahan Main Bhi Inn Ko Daikh Kar Ubhartay Rahay Leekan yaar tum Baazi Lay Gai Aur Nazam Likh Mari … buhat jazbati and bitter …… Buhat khubsurti Say Alfaz Ko Samoya hay …….
*PAIDAL/SAWAAR *
A small but having great meaning in it …… short poems always inspire me that its easy to feel the depth of every word if you’ve understood …… good work doosta
AA'O AAJ KE MAN SOONA HAI !
Mujhay Iss Nazam Main Nasira Kazmi Aur Incha G key jhalak nazar aai …… Jangle, Basti, Tanah, Paanchi, Jhar Sargoshi Kart etc. Buhat khubsurat Samaan Bandh Dia Hay Aur Main Apnay Aap Ko Udaas Jangaloon Main Mahsoos Karnay Laga Hoo …. Buhat Khoub Fasoon Tari Kai Hay Darwesh G …….
ZAKHMI ANAA
Another short poem and I’m thinking why I didn’t write this …… buhat khubsurat Aana Key Aakasi Key Hain Darwesh G aap nay ……..
**Darwesh G **aap kay Tamam kalam kay baray main To Filhaal Kuch Bhee Kahnay Say Qasir Hoon keonka meray pass itna zakheera Alfaz to naheen hay jo aap key tamam she’ri ka ahata kar sakay …. But soon I’ll send you my overall view abt ur creations
Kiya Muskurate....Mahakte...Rangeen Gulabon Jaisa Comments Kiya Jani, Tumhen To Musawwir Hona Tha, Kahan Bhatak Gaye Shairee Ki Pacheeda Galiyon Main, Comments... Jis Qadar Rangeen aur Barjasta Hain, ussiqadar dil Ki Gahraiyon Main Utar Gaye Hain.... Yaraa You Are Great.... Nawazish. Awaiting Your Overall Review.
Darwesh Bhai,
Read your poems and really liked those.These have a fragrance of their own.The creativity has its own charactor n indivduality.My congrats.
brijinder"Sagar"
Huzoor Darwesh Ne Bare Classic Andaaz Main Apna Khoon Pila Hai...Inn Nazmon Ko.... Thora Chhaniye...Kuch Phatakye.... Critical appreciation Main Baat Khul Kar Honi Chahiye... Kuch To Kahiye Kiya Pasand Aaya.... Kiya Nahi ?
Aaj he is thread per nazar perhi aur phir jub tuk tamam kalam per nahi liyee mujhay chain nahi aaya...
Kia Rawani hay.. Kia he pukhtagi hay aur Kia he umda khayyalat kasht kiye hain aap nay ...
Dil tu chah raha hay k ek ek nazam per alag alag tabsara keroon mager wakt ki kami kay ba'is sirf itna he keh paoongi k ... aaj dil khush hu gaya aapka kalam per ker..
Khudda aapko khush rakhay aur Amal ko jinhoon nay is ko hamaray sath share kia..
Tareef to Bohat Doston aur Qadardanon Ne Ki, Magar, aapke Sara'hne Main Khuloos Ki Khushboo Bhi Shamil Hai, Kaash Aap Kuch Waqt Nikalain, aur Chand Nazmon Par...Be Laag Tabsera Bhi Farmawen... Aap Jaise Jouhree Roz Kahan Milte Hain ?
