Best of darwesh

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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P-G....KHUSHBASH,

APKE HUSN E INTIKHAAB KI TAREEF HAI, NAWAZISH...KARAM,

GHANEEMAT HAI, MERI BHI PASENDEEDA NAZM HAI, APKA NAAM P.G. KI JAGHA **
**PRACTICAL GIRL HONA CHAHIYE.
WAISE MOHTARMA, MAIN AAPKI TAHREER SHAUQ SE PARHTA HUN, **
**APKA APNA EK ANDAAZ HAI, JO...TAMAAM ULJHANON KE BAWAJOOD, ALAG AUR MUNFARID HAI.
AAP LIKKHA KAREN.
DARWESH.

*mukka maring sab ko*
*mukka maring sab ko*
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This is exceptionally good. Right put on top by darwesh. I call it practical poetry — portrait of reality and true picture of ourselves thesedays. Well done darwesh :k:

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Jigar Bhai Amal...khushbash,

Darweshnawazi Ka Shukriya, you are right, "Be Chehra" is a practical
and top of my choice,Poem.... dosri Nazmon Ke comments ka intizaar hai,
abtak sabhi doston ne qadardani ki hai, aur mera housla barhaya hai,
maharbani.

darwesh.

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bohat picturesque poems hein tumhari.

good work. awesome. inspiring :>
best,

dushwari

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Dushwari ji.....

Bohat encouraging comments hain aapke. Thanks.
Aapke jaise qadardaan milte rahe, to aur bhi achhi poems
likhne ka wadaa karta hun, aur share bhi karonga.

darwesh.

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waah gee waah

thanx for shair......

aap un poets mey se hain jin key bary mey kaha gaya hey

HAzzaroon saal nargis apni be noori pe roti hey
bari mushkil se hota chaman mein (ap jesa masterpiece) deedawer peda

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Fazeelat Saheba..... Aadaab,

Sher ki Pasandeedgi ka shukriya. ajab ittifaq hai, yeh "Nargis.... "
wala sher, kal hi hum ne "AHmed Nadim Qaasmi" ke liye likkha tha, **
**aaj apne liye parh kar, hairat ho rahi hai, Huzoor, main itna bara Shair
*Nahi...Yeh Sher bohat bhari hai, kisi darwesh ke liye. *

Karam...
darwesh.

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Poetry to aapki saari hi zabardast hai lekin ye “items” barre suche hain.
Ye poetry sab se zabardast lagi.
_______________________________________________

Ab kuch reconsiderables…

Jahan tak mere ilm mein hai, “Ba” ba-zaat-e-khud kuch nahi, ye sirf tab m’ani deta hai jab kisi lafz k shuru mein lag jaaye.

Mere khayal mein ye misra yoon kar lein to zyada behtar hai;
“Ab na Mansoor hai na Eesa hai”

Above nazmon mein “astericks” waale misre, doosre misron k ham-wazan nahi hain.Consider again, those with “astericks”(*).
**Thats all, according to my mental approach…:slight_smile: **

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Jigar Zamil....Khushbash,

Nawazish, ke apko Nazmain pasand aayeen.
Jis Sher KI taraf Aap ishaaraa kar rahe hain, wo typing error hai, mujhe bhi ab andazah hua....shukria. Sahih Misra Yeh Hai :

" Hum Tumhare They 'Bas' Tumhare They
Tum Ko Lekin Yaqeen Dilaye Kaun "

Nazmon Main Jin Misron Ke Taraf Aap Nishaandahi Kar rahe Hain,
Inka Hum Wazan Hona Zaroori Nahi, Kyunke Yah Sari Aazad Nazmain Hain, Magar Inmain Aahang zaroor hai, phir bhi main Inko
check zaroor karonga, wasalaam.

darwesh.

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Salab arz hai Darwesh jee,
Nazmon k misron mein wazan se meri muraad thi k wo misre nazm k qaaim karda flow se hatte huey hain, un misron pe pohonch kar parrhne huey nazm ka flow ruk jata hai ya keh lein k change ho jata hai.
Shayad ab main wazeh kar paya hoon apni baat !

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Ab Na Mansoor Na Eesa Koi
Ab Saleebon Pe Sar Sajaye Kaun

Wah… Outstanding… :slight_smile:

Darwesh Gi… ur poetry is outclass… I have seen very few poets here who are technicaly so sound, your selection of words specialy the amulgamation of Urdu and Hindi words, its beautiful… to me Idea is always important… and in all of the above there is very sweet and neat thought that touches the souls…

You have very good vacabulary, your verses are fluent nothing blocks you when you go through it… jissay Rawani kaha jaata hay… :slight_smile:

Darwesh Gi… although its my purani Ghazal and I have posted it here too… .. but… reading your poetry… I think this will resemble you… :slight_smile:

Ye Kia ke Dil ko Sare Aam Bechnay Aye
YahaaN bikay ga Tera Pyar kooRiooN ke daam

Issi Dagar pe chalo gay tou hosh kho do gay
Magar milay ga na saqi ke haath ka ikk jaam

Tera junoon hay, wo tujh ko bhi pukaray kabhi
Na rakh umeed kabhi wo bhi lega tera naam.

Wo jiss ka pyar sare daar tum ko Le Aya
Kahay hay Ishq ka maada hay tera ab bhi khaam

JakaR chuki hay tujhay iltifaat ki wo yaas
Wagarna wus’ate dunya hay Ishq ka ikk gaam.
(Golden Scorpion)

AMAL Dear… Thanks for Bringing up such a beauty… :flower1:

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Jigar Zamil.....khushbash,

Behtar Huzoor, pahli fursat main ispar kaam karonga.

darwesh.

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G.Scorpion, Jigar...

Nawazish...Karam...Maharbaani.

"Der Lagi Aane Main Tum Ko...... Shukr Hai Lekin Aaye To "

Aapki Mohabbat... Darweshnawazi.... aur Khuloos, Yaad Rahega.
Thanks for sharing your ghazal, aap to chupe Rustam Nikle.

apka..
.Darwesh.

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Very nice.:k:

I can vision what you are wacthing and what you want to tell. You portrait her picture very well.:k:

Rest of your enchanting poems are also beautiful. Keep up the good work.:k:

I will be back to comment on other poems as well.

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nice to see u here Shan:)

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ap kidher ko hotey g :slight_smile:

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Shahana Saheba...Tasleemat.... Mizaaj E Giraami !

Apki pasand aur Nazm ke intakhaab ka Shukriya, housla afzai ke liye bhi Mashkoor Hun, Main Apke Beshqeemat Mashwaron Ki Qadar Karta Hun, Aur Mazeed Aara Ka Muntazar Hun.

NJ...Aapki tashreef awari ka bhi shukriya, smile.

Darwesh !

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Nikami Dear…!

MaiN ne kahaN jana hay.. bas… Awara Badal ki Tarha Nagar nagar Phirta hooN.. JahaN Pyasi Zameen Nazar Ati hay Apni Auqaat ke Mutabiq Barasnay ki Koshish karta hooN… :slight_smile: HaN ye alag baat hay ke Basa auqaat mukhalif hawa itni tez ho jaati hay ke… iss choTay se badal ke tukRay ko apnay saath bin barsay hi uRa le jaati hay… :stuck_out_tongue:

Tum Sunaoo… How is life… :flower1:

Darwesh Gi… Zarra Nawazi hay aap ki Warna tou Mann Anam ke Mann Danam… :slight_smile:

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Wo NOOR DERWAISH ji kay dil ka Noor hain jano ji aap kioon us noor ko Noor Jahan e post bananay ko tul gaeen hain.

Darwaish ji kay dil kay Noor kay unkay dil main hi rehnay dain.

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Jahan DARWESH JI KI GUNGHOR BARSAAT KI ZAROORAT HOTI HAI PAGALI HAWA INHAIN UR’A KAR LAY JATI HAI. Phir wahan kay basi ya to is ghunghor sawan say ya to bezaar hotay hain ya Khushi say jhoom jhoom Jatain hain.