Bait Bazi — Personal Edition II

[_IkLarki]

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voh masoom see ikladki
jise dhang se jina ka matlam maloom na tha
ek ajnaabee se mulaqat hui thi
kuch apna sa laga tha
maloum na tha
you n dil mai aa samaye ga
na uss ka nam maloom tha na pata
bas sirf use dekha tha
ar jaane kab mohabbat ka matlab samjh aaya
phir aesa hu a k
uss ajnabie ne ki chand aeseee baatein
k uss ladki ka
dosti per se aitbaar khatum ho gya
uss ajnabee k dou boul hi kam kar gye
uss ne kaha
voh kisi aur ka hai

[Zamil]

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Wo seij-e-wasl nahi, khaar ka wo bistar hai
Waqaar kho k miley wo to hijr behtar hai....

ye

[ghazal_kisi_ke]

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very nice!!

[_IkLarki]

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hmm thek acha hii

[rabia_rana]

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@Zamil

Wo seij-e-wasl nahi, khaar ka wo bistar hai Waqaar kho k miley wo to hijr behtar hai....

ye

nice Zalima,
yonhi hona tha,yonhi hota hai
koi pata hay ,koi khota hay
us nay dil say hi jab nikal dia
us ki qurbat ko ab kio rota hay

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[Amal]

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Ye nazar ki gehri jheeleiN aesey na mujh pe kholo
mujhey khaahishoN ke lehreiN ley jaeiN na baha ke
meiN fiza meiN urrta urrta terey paas pohaNch jaaoN
aey kaash la ke dey dey koi mujh ko par hawaa ke

"Ye"

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[Bholay_Bisray]

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@Amal

** Ye nazar ki gehri jheeleiN aesey na mujh pe kholo mujhey khaahishoN ke lehreiN ley jaeiN na baha ke meiN fiza meiN urrta urrta terey paas pohaNch jaaoN aey kaash la ke dey dey koi mujh ko par hawaa ke

"Ye"

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Beautiful!

i wish insaan ki life main Allah nay "Kaash" na rukha hoota :)**

[Amal]

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@Bholay Bisray

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Beautiful!

i wish insaan ki life main Allah nay “Kaash” na rukha hoota :)**

Aap ki apni baat meiN kaash aa gaya, farq sirf itna hey ke wo english meiN hey. Pas saabit huwa ke kaash is part of life :~) Thanx for liking the sheir Amjad bhai

[GuL-e-Tasbeeh]

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:halo: … ye sey mujhay koi sher nahi ata loko, mein nay ab kuch nahi likhna yahan yeh kya baat hui ‘‘noon’’ aur ‘‘Ye’’

‘‘Ye’’ yeh aakhir jaan lay kar rahay ga meri
kuch alif be ,laam meem ki bhi baatein karo:p

[Amal]

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@GuL-e-Tasbeeh

‘‘Ye’’ yeh aakhir jaan lay kar rahay ga meri
kuch alif be ,laam meem ki bhi baatein karo:p

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Wo falak ko tak ke karney lagi mojzoN ki baat
meiN sochney laga umeed ki ye soghaat aakhri hey
meiN ney kaha ab aas ka naya kheil kya kheileiN
ke khuwaahishoN ki bisaat par ye maat aakhri hey

“ye”
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[Bholay_Bisray]

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@GuL-e-Tasbeeh

:halo: … ye sey mujhay koi sher nahi ata loko, mein nay ab kuch nahi likhna yahan yeh kya baat hui ‘‘noon’’ aur ‘‘Ye’’

‘‘Ye’’ yeh aakhir jaan lay kar rahay ga meri
kuch alif be ,laam meem ki bhi baatein karo:p

lugta aaj aap ki halut khuch aysi thi →

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Beautiful Amal!

[GuL-e-Tasbeeh]

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^well what can i say

again ‘ye’

[Amal]

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HameiN hi himmat karni parrey gi :~)

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Ye wisaal hey ke kamaal hey meri khuwaahishoN ke hajoom ka
meiN jis taraf bhi nazar karooN mujhey har taraf wo dikhaai dey
meiN hisaab judaai ka maang to looN wo aaey jab par dar ye hey
jaaney kis tarha wo miley mujhey jaaney kis tarah wo safaai dey

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"Ye"

[GuL-e-Tasbeeh]

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Aap nay she’r likhna hi tha tou aesa likhtey jis kay end pe ‘Ye’’ na ataa

yeh kaho keh kaesey bataain hum
kya naqsh thay uss kay dikhain hum
ussay kaesey waapis bulaain hum
jo tah-e-khaak ab hay daba huwa

well i try 2 sec mein tou aesey hi shaairi i can:halo:

[Bholay_Bisray]

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Nice One Amal!

@GuL-e-Tasbeeh

Aap nay she’r likhna hi tha tou aesa likhtey jis kay end pe ‘Ye’’ na ataa

yeh kaho keh kaesey bataain hum
kya naqsh thay uss kay dikhain hum
ussay kaesey waapis bulaain hum
jo tah-e-khaak ab hay daba huwa

well i try 2 sec mein tou aesey hi shaairi i can:halo:

**2 sec? **

[Amal]

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@GuL-e-Tasbeeh

Aap nay she’r likhna hi tha tou aesa likhtey jis kay end pe ‘Ye’’ na ataa

Lijeeye, ye aek aur restriction aa gai Chalye, yuNhi sahi :~)

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Aahat thi kis khaab ki ya dhoka tha nazar ka
ik pal ko sakoot toot gaya dil ki qabar ka
aaNkhoN ka sehan bheeg gaya yaadoN ki nami sey
kuch bhi to sila nahi mila ashqoN pe jabar ka

“Alif” :~)

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[GuL-e-Tasbeeh]

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BB i meant 2 min now is okay for you:-)

Amal what u mean aik aur restriction kya pehley bhi thi koi:halo:

Ik Sapnaa kabhii dekhaa thaa jo aaj tak poora ho na sakaa
dharkan mein basaaya hay tum ko aur dil bhi tum pe waar aaey

Ye’’

[Amal]

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Aek restrction to ye hey na ka aek khaas harf sey hi shuru karna hey sheir. Aur doosri restriction aap ney kahi ke “Ye” pe khatm bhi na ho. Is baar aap waali restriction ki paasdaari nahi ho saki hum sey...sorry :(

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Yaas ke barrey samandar meiN ik aas ki kashti chotti si
toofaaN ki taaqat andha-dhund aur meri hasti choti si
baadal ke biphrey toloN ko koi kesey jaa ke samjhaaey
is baarish meiN kaheiN beh na jae meri basti chotti si

“Ye”
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[Bholay_Bisray]

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gg GT 2 min ... :) jetzt O.K.

@Amal

** Yaas ke barrey samandar meiN ik aas ki kashti chotti si toofaaN ki taaqat andha-dhund aur meri hasti choti si baadal ke biphrey toloN ko koi kesey jaa ke samjhaaey is baarish meiN kaheiN beh na jae meri basti chotti si

“Ye” **

Beautiful Sahir Amal!

[GuL-e-Tasbeeh]

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Amazing Verses Amal, Poori ghazal kab parhnay ko milay gi ?

Ye jantey hue bhi ke suraj ki tapish sey pighal jaey ga
mein moum kaa ik mahal banaanaey chalii hoon

Noon’’

guys dont laugh on my sher’s me just doing fil-badeeh here ‘’ live this Forum’'