Aliyish
September 14, 2007, 10:51am
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Zindagii jab waabal hotee hai
tuj ko bhool or kisi janib daikay
hountt hain band kawa’ron ke terah
Ankh karta hoN band .mein jab’be
Tujsay Bichara .tuh. dil yeh jana hai
Aysa Jag’ra kay Phir Reha na hoowa
Din tu bas Uljanon mein Kattah hai
jo kay daik’ay bina he kee ja’ay
jaysay Tarpay hai machli bin pani
Jab be hotee hai, tuj say baat mere
Suraatain rah gahein bas duniya mein
meree udasiyon mein bahar kay Rang
darj meltee hai joh in shairoon mein
(Aliyish)
AQ
September 14, 2007, 11:26am
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
Cool… another good post aliyish
Jab be hotee hai, tuj say baat mere
Very creative :k:
meree udasiyon mein bahar kay Rang
achaa khaasaa “hoti hai” kee zabardast girdaan jaa rahi thee, “khotee hai” kahaaN saY aa gayaa.. not that it loses the rythm, or qafiya but I would’ve liked to see “hotee hai” here as well …
Aliyish
September 14, 2007, 12:41pm
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
Dun worry abhee woh rkopra ata hoo ga:) woh kohta , kohtheee or Hotee sab english mein bara.bar translate karday ga:)
Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
1st shair made me laugh :D
let me read the rest :P
Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
very nice :k:
is shair mai kuch confusion hai
Aysa Jag’ra kay Phir Reha na hoowa
jagra fight?
or
jakra .. stuck? hmm ya jo bhi english hoti hai iski
Aliyish
September 14, 2007, 1:10pm
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
Its jaak'raa !
Aliyish
September 14, 2007, 1:12pm
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
1st shair made me laugh :D
let me read the rest :P
well if ya beamed on 1st verse , Tu ap ka bee haaal Ghalib wala hoga ' Mushkilaain itnii par.ee , muj pay kay asshaaan ho'gain .
SJ
September 14, 2007, 2:51pm
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
zabarduat ghazal..................... bohat achee lagee.........:)khaas tor par pehlashair is awesome:)
Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
*Zindagii jab waabal hotee hai *
*Shairi bay me'sa'al hotee hai *
hountt hain band kawa'ron ke terah
or Ankh .rus'wa'ay haaal hote hai
Ankh karta hoN band .mein jab'be
tuh muja'jism khayal hotee hai
Din tu bas Uljanon mein Kattah hai
Raat pur'saanay haal hotee hai
Jab be hotee hai, tuj say baat mere
shaab woh shab'bay Visal hote hai
Suraatain rah gahein bas duniya mein **
**Seeraat tu khaaal khaal hotee hai
meree udasiyon mein bahar kay Rang
zindagii kyon Jamal kohtee hai ?
darj meltee hai joh in shairoon mein
Kafiyaat has'bay haaal hoteee hai
(Aliyish)
wah sahib... bohat achi ghazal hai
Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
Zindagii jab waabal hotee hai
nice :k:
Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
Ankh karta hoN band .mein jab'be
nice, Aliyish.
Mahee
September 14, 2007, 7:55pm
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
jo kay daik'ay bina he kee ja'ay
nice. khobsuret ghazal :)
TLK
September 14, 2007, 9:40pm
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
Zindagii jab waabal hotee hai
Shairi bay me'sa'al hotee hai
tuj ko bhool or kisi janib daikay
dil ke kaab yeah majaal hote hai
hountt hain band kawa'ron ke terah
or Ankh .rus'wa'ay haaal hote hai
Ankh karta hoN band .mein jab'be
tuh muja'jism khayal hotee hai
Tujsay Bichara .tuh. dil yeh jana hai
Yaad bee kia janjaal hotee hai
Aysa Jag'ra kay Phir Reha na hoowa
kia Mohaabaat be Jaaal hote hai ?
Din tu bas Uljanon mein Kattah hai
Raat pur'saanay haal hotee hai
jo kay daik'ay bina he kee ja'ay
Woh mohaabat kamal hote hai
jaysay Tarpay hai machli bin pani
Hijir mein woh mesaal hote hai
Jab be hotee hai, tuj say baat mere
shaab woh shab'bay Visal hote hai
Suraatain rah gahein bas duniya mein
Seeraat tu khaaal khaal hotee hai
meree udasiyon mein bahar kay Rang
zindagii kyon Jamal kohtee hai ?
darj meltee hai joh in shairoon mein
Kafiyaat has'bay haaal hoteee hai
(Aliyish)
Mashallah Aliyish, you have quite a talent. Good post
P_G
September 15, 2007, 4:09am
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
*jo kay daik'ay bina he kee ja'ay *
***Woh mohaabat kamal hote hai * **
**sigh ...ker kay daykhee hay kabhi ya sirf misra zayhan main aya hay ?
*duniya walay bewakoof kehtay hain aysay kamal pasandoon ko :- (
Aliyish
September 15, 2007, 6:25am
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
^^ Aa'jeee ! Jii daikaa hai . mardaykha hai . hum nay sab kuch kar'daika hai ! Ghazal ka Akhri shair parlia hota tu sawal na phochtheen !
darj meltee hai joh in shairoon mein
Aaadab arz hai !
Aliyish
September 15, 2007, 6:27am
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
Mashallah Aliyish, you have quite a talent. Good post
Kia karhain , Tariq bahi . Is Aashiiqi mein tu Izaa.Tay SaadaaT bee ga'ee :)
Aliyish
September 15, 2007, 6:29am
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
wah sahib... bohat achi ghazal hai
quoted shair achay hain aur bolded ones to bohat hi achay hain
Shukriya Hazraat . Wooh seeraat wala shair . Apnay app mein ek noha hai . Aj kaal log kuch zaida hee suuraat pasand ho chalay hain ! Ushi pay Tawaju or ushi ko banaya sanwaraa jata hai !
Aliyish
September 15, 2007, 6:31am
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
Ankh karta hoN band .mein jab'be
tuh muja'jism khayal hotee hai
nice, Aliyish.
best,
Dushwari
Thanks Dush :)
Shair kissi haad taak Momin khan momin kay us Shair say mu'tasir hai kay
Tum meray pass Hotay hoo GoYa
Aliyish
September 15, 2007, 6:32am
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
zabarduat ghazal.....................
bohat achee lagee.........:)khaas tor par pehlashair is awesome:)
Shukriya . Agay bee parlain :) wooh bee guzaray laa.iq hain !
Aliyish
September 15, 2007, 6:33am
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Re: Zindagii Jab waabal !
Thanks Kid
