wo khush khayal ghalat fehmiyoN maiN rehta hai

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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“Wo bai-irada sahi, titliyooN maiN rehtaa
hai
kay maira dil tu mairee muthiyooN maiN rehta hai
alao bun kay desumber ki sard raatooN main
tairaa khayal mairay taaqchoN maiN rehta hai
bacha kay khud ko guzarna muhaal lagtaa hai
tamaam sheher mairay raastoN maiN rehta hai
mairee kitaab-e-muhabbat maiN uska zikr
nahiN
wo khush khayal ghalat fehmiyoN maiN rehta hai…”

Kay hum tu Dhoop main baarishh kay woh qatray hain jo gir ker, dar-o-deevar per hi sookh jaatay hain…

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  • balaa ke ash_haar hain dhoop baaji, har eik misre pe dam nikal nikal jaata hai aur puR souz andaaz wAllah, jese koi dhaRhkano’N ki sargoshiyon ko raqam kar ke le aaeyaa ho.*
    shukriya for sharing.

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Very nice Dhoop.

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I’m Gonna Be The Champ
The Way I Wanna Be
( Muhammad ALI )

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bohot achii nazam hai dhoop…very nice

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—~—Maria—~—
~Kiya haaq wo jeena hai jo apnay hi liyay ho
Khud mit kar kisi aur ko mitnay se bacha lay~

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buhat khuob

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nice !!

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wah wah…nasr maiN bhi sha-ayree…
kiya baat hai

Kay hum tu Dhoop main baarishh kay woh qatray hain jo gir ker, dar-o-deevar per hi sookh jaatay hain…

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tx speedy,maheen and 2629 for liking…
waisay 2629 iss # maiN kiya raaz hai…
lagta hai koee roll # hai ya tha…reminds me of my roll call # in FSc. 2769

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Kay hum tu Dhoop main baarishh kay woh qatray hain jo gir ker, dar-o-deevar per hi sookh jaatay hain…

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tamaam shehar mairay raaston main rehta hay..

wah. that was beautiful

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Its beautiful Dhoop but didnt you observe it isnt consistent in thought. It misses the music!!!

[quote]
Originally posted by Dhoop:
**"Wo bai-irada sahi, titliyooN maiN rehtaa
hai
kay maira dil tu mairee muthiyooN maiN rehta hai
alao bun kay desumber ki sard raatooN main
tairaa khayal mairay taaqchoN maiN rehta hai

(Yahan tak Piyar ka iqraar hai aur yaad rehnay ka zikr aur khwahishon ka bhandaar!)

bacha kay khud ko guzarna muhaal lagtaa hai
tamaam sheher mairay raastoN maiN rehta hai

(Yeh mushkilaat se dar jaana hai ya to say ke dara dena hai!)

mairee kitaab-e-muhabbat maiN uska zikr
nahiN
wo khush khayal ghalat fehmiyoN maiN rehta hai......"

(Aur yeh............!!!!!)
**
[/quote]

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bohat khobsuret dhoop jee. very nice

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mohabat aesa derya hai
k baarish rooth bhi ja a
to pani kum nahi hota!

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:)

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**
Dhoop .. main jab bhe tumhari koi post parhta hoon .. mujhe shairi ka daura zaroor parhta he

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..
ab bhe is behtareen nazm ka satya naas karne laga hoon ..

arz kia he .

muthiyaan khool de, na kaid kar too aab is ko .. dil tou azaad ik panchi he, hawaoon main rehta he ..

too badle raaste, yaan sheher badal le apne ..
tera khayal tou aab meri jaan main rehta he ..

kitaboon main likhte nahi hain, naam onke ..
wajood jinka har waqt, wehm-o-guman main rehta he ..

mere khayal ko gar rakh dia he, taaqchoon main ..
kiyon phir zikar mera, teri zubaan pe rehta he ..??

by me

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**

I am like an Open Book Except for the few pages of my past, My life is an empty book. It takes the shape of a mystery, To me it does at least. For I cannot tell what happens next, Too many cliffhangers and too much suspense. But its clues all lead eventually to the same place, Unfortunately it does not say where. It only says get the next book, For in this one you’ ve ran out of room.

[This message has been edited by Azam#1 (edited May 18, 2002).]

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[quote]
Originally posted by Perfectionist:
Its beautiful Dhoop but didnt you observe it isnt consistent in thought. It misses the music!!!

[/quote]

**bhaee from what I learnt in the definition of a ghazal was kay ghazal ka
hur sher aik ikaee hota hai...hur aik maiN
aik munfarid khayal paish kiya jaa sakta hai...ho sakta hai kay all the shers r not directed towards the same person honh?

Kay hum tu Dhoop main baarishh kay woh qatray hain jo gir ker, dar-o-deevar per hi sookh jaatay hain.....

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very nice Azam bro!

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You are right but remember that the central idea always remains the same

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muthiyaan khool de, na kaid kar too aab is ko ..
dil tou azaad ik panchi he, hawaoon main rehta he ..

hmmm…azam…very nice…kiya baat hai.aap tu pakkay shair bantay jaa rahay ho.chalo kisi din pakoray banana bhi seekh hi jao gay

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—~—Maria—~—
~Kiya haaq wo jeena hai jo apnay hi liyay ho
Khud mit kar kisi aur ko mitnay se bacha lay~

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**
pakka tou abhi tak main musalman bhi nahi ban paya maheen ji

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shair kahan se hojaonga .. phir bhi sher pasand karne ka bohot bohot shukriya … wese dhoop ki is post ki behar (tone) mujhe bohot achi lagi he .. aur dil karta he isi tone par aur bohot kuch likha jai .. khair jab bhi waqt mila I’ll post a complete nazm on this behar ..

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yar shairi asaan kaam he as compare to pakoras ..

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so I betta be doin shairi n say no to pakoras

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I am like an Open Book Except for the few pages of my past, My life is an empty book. It takes the shape of a mystery, To me it does at least. For I cannot tell what happens next, Too many cliffhangers and too much suspense. But its clues all lead eventually to the same place, Unfortunately it does not say where. It only says get the next book, For in this one you’ ve ran out of room.

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**
thanks Dhoop sis…

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I am like an Open Book Except for the few pages of my past, My life is an empty book. It takes the shape of a mystery, To me it does at least. For I cannot tell what happens next, Too many cliffhangers and too much suspense. But its clues all lead eventually to the same place, Unfortunately it does not say where. It only says get the next book, For in this one you’ ve ran out of room.

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yeah to meray hasb e haal hai

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Bohat behtaren hai saheb luf aagaya.
thanx for sharing.

huwe mar k ham jo Ruswa
huwe kiyuN na gharq e darya

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[quote]
Originally posted by Dhoop:
**"Wo bai-irada sahi, titliyooN maiN rehtaa
hai
kay maira dil tu mairee muthiyooN maiN rehta hai
alao bun kay desumber ki sard raatooN main
tairaa khayal mairay taaqchoN maiN rehta hai
bacha kay khud ko guzarna muhaal lagtaa hai
tamaam sheher mairay raastoN maiN rehta hai
mairee kitaab-e-muhabbat maiN uska zikr
nahiN
wo khush khayal ghalat fehmiyoN maiN rehta hai......"

**
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Bohot khooob excellent !!!!

dil darya, samandaron donge .. kaun dillan de yan jane ..
jane na jane gul he na jane .. bagh tou sara jane .. ;~)