WILCO

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Re: WILCO

@deejah

okay im back guys!
lets talk abt the MISTAKE Ahsan n Humayun made THROUGHOUT the drama,or which i felt so strongly that i think Hummayun needs to know that this is probably the reason ppl r not liking WILCO as much as they liked Alpha Bravo Charlie…
Do u guys remember Alpha Bravo Charlie or ABC?what was the strongest part of the drama? The Pak Army,of course..throughout the drama they showed Army and its wonderful jobs…in Wilco,they r showing Army and its wonderul jobs too but then,where the hell lies the BIG difference?
let me tell u,my dear GS fellows…i,being a novelist,have been told by all gr8 writers and i have read this sentence over n over in so many Creative-Writing-Manuals that i can neva forget this ONE BASIC POINT…i have been always told that if im writing a story abt a moral value,then neither in the end nor mid nor start,means NOT ONCE in the story i have to write the moral lesson..u get it,guys?..if im writing a moral-lesson-based story then i shud never write the moral lesson in the manuscript…yes,u neva have to “write” moral lesson,u have to “give” it..and there’s a big goddamned difference b/w “writing” n “giving”…
i have to show a situation in the novel,and in the end i only have to tell that this thing happened wd this character..i shud neva give reason of the bad or good that happened wd the character..like i show that this young boy abused n beat his classmate and later that day,this boy himself gets hit by a car…shall i write"jaisa karo gay,waisa bharo gay"in the end?if this story has to be written in an Urdu B exam,then i’ll write the moral lesson with thick marker in the end,but in a novel,u NEVER write it,u leave this all to the reader to DEDUCE the moral lesson,u leave this to reader to understand wt is the lesson ur giving…that is the difference b/w Alpha Bravo Charlie and WILCO…Shoaib Mansoor had given the moral lesson,Ahsan Talish has written the line with thick marker,but this is no Urdu B exam…so that is the reason WILCO is not going THAT popular..
u remember,in ABC…tell me if there was a SINGLE SCENE in which any character had said,“Army is very disciplined”…i dnt recall any…now tell me if there’s a single scene in WILCO where the characters r NOT saying this sentence?For God’s sake,u DONT NEED TO TELLTHIS,JUST SHOW THIS…if u want ppl to believe that Army is disciplined,then SHOW it like shoaib mansoor in ABC did..he showed the Army’s system,their culture,n the way of Army Life..and ppl made an opinion theirselves…in WILCO,they r NOT showing it,like when Aiman goes to CMH,they just showed her in this room n then in Brig Dr’s office,they NEVA showed the DISCIPLINE of Army hospital..still,in the next scene,Aiman is praising the hospital,so wt is the opinion a viewer makes? something like"they’re here to flatter army" or else…
But in the Raju uncle’s scenes,he is always getting annoyed cos he cant get hz pension,that was the ryt thing Ahsan talish did..he showed the old man struggling,but when Raju uncle starts PRAISING sarkaari naukri TOO MUCH,thats where it looks like they r WRITING the moral lesson and with a thick marker…
Number 2,they r not showing much of army,they might in the next episodes bt i’ll call this Ahsan’s bad luck that this drama was made at the time when the Honour of Pak Army has been destroyed..and when ppl no more love Army,so if they KEEP WRITING moral lesson,it’ll look like they r trying to make army popular… they shud show it,which they r not…and the army guys shud have been the real army officers,not the actors…instead,they made the army gal as civillian…lolz…
well…if they had showed it,it was far better but still…lets wait and see…

Very good analysis, although I m not watching this drama (as its not on air in UK) but I understand wht u r tryna say

Bravo :k: