*UmEeD*

[Shazia_Arif]

meri zeest ka ye safar abhi tamam hua nhi
**ikk diya hai akhri saans pe,**jo larrkhrraya per bujha nhi

main wo raste ki dhool hoon jise tum ne paon main rol dia
mera safr bohat taveel hai,beeta bhi or kata b nhi

abhi chahaar su andher hai
abhi din nikalne main der hai

mera sooraj bhi chamke ga
wo sooraj hai,dia nhi

meri khilwatain b ajeeb hain
**kabhi bazm main b akela,**kabhi tanha b tanha nhi

kabhi karb main doobe din mere
kabhi ratain dard se choor hain

kabhi dil ka daman chaak sa
jise aj tak sia nhi

wo sang khar hai to kya hua,kabhi gulaab sa narm b hoga
wo torr kar hara mujhe,main jurr k bhi thaka nhi…

[IS]

Re: UmEeD

nice :-)

[Amal]

Re: UmEeD

Good one Shazia ji k: … mashq jaari rakhye

[GuL-e-Tasbeeh]

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hmmm Alfaaz ka Chunao bohat khoob kiya hai lekin kuch na kuch kami hai.. na nazm ka ta'sur hai na Ghazal ka :-p new cheez ejaad kar rahi haiN ?
koshish jaari rakhiye
khush rahiye

[Shazia_Arif]

Re: UmEeD

nice :-)

thanx paen.

[Shazia_Arif]

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@Amal

Good one Shazia ji k: … mashq jaari rakhye

i think iss bar mashq k baghar he post ker di hai well 'll b waitin for your correction.

[Shazia_Arif]

Re: UmEeD

hmmm Alfaaz ka Chunao bohat khoob kiya hai lekin kuch na kuch kami hai.. na nazm ka ta'sur hai na Ghazal ka :-p new cheez ejaad kar rahi haiN ? koshish jaari rakhiye khush rahiye

g bilkul theek kaha Gul..mujhe b ye koi or he cheez lag rhi hai or jis kami ki taraf ap ka ishara hai,main b wazan main bohat kami mehsoos ker rhi hun..thanx for the good wishes:)

[UZ]

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Nice Shazia :k:

[NihalK]

Re: UmEeD

wo sang khar hai to kya hua,kabhi gulaab sa narm b hoga wo torr kar hara mujhe,main jurr k bhi thaka nhi...

Beautiful!!!

[fara]

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wo sang khar hai to kya hua,kabhi gulaab sa narm b hoga wo torr kar hara mujhe,main jurr k bhi thaka nhi...

Nice one Shazia

[_Masoom_Muskaan]

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@Shazia_Arif

i think iss bar mashq k baghar he post ker di hai well 'll b waitin for your correction.

mujhe phir b samjh nai ae dont worrie

[Shazia_Arif]

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thanx all of you.

[Shazia_Arif]

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@_Masoom_Muskaan

mujhe phir b samjh nai ae dont worrie

han to isi liye post ki na

[_Masoom_Muskaan]

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@Shazia_Arif

han to isi liye post ki na

phir kia faeda

[GuL-e-Tasbeeh]

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@Shazia_Arif

meri zeest ka ye safar abhi tamam hua nhi
**ik diya hai akhri saans pe,**jo larrkhrraya per bujha nhi

main wo raste ki dhool hoon jise tum ne paon main rol dia
mera safr bohat taveel hai,beeta bhi or kata b nhi

abhi chahaar su andher hai,abhi din nikalne main der hai
mera sooraj bhi chamke ga,wo sooraj hai,dia nhi

meri khilwatain b ajeeb hain kabhi bazm main b akela,kabhi tanha b tanha nhi

kabhi karb main doobe din mere** kabhi ratain dard se choor hain**
kabhi dil ka daman chaak sa,** jise aj tak sia nhi**

wo sang khar hai to kya hua,kabhi gulaab sa narm b hoga
wo torr kar hara mujhe,main jurr k bhi thaka nhi…

Red wali line ka bhi kuch bana laiN

[Amal]

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@Shazia_Arif

…well 'll b waitin for your correction.

mera to apna qibla durust hone waala hey

[Shazia_Arif]

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@_Masoom_Muskaan

phir kia faeda

har kaam faiday ya nuqsaan k liye nhi kia jata pakistani leaders wali soch badlo

[Shazia_Arif]

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@GuL-e-Tasbeeh

Red wali line ka bhi kuch bana laiN

sorry haven’t get you???

[Shazia_Arif]

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@Amal

mera to apna qibla durust hone waala hey

toh abhi tak kiss taraf munh ker k namaz parrhte rhe

[KKF]

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achchhii kaavish hai magar jaisa k Gul-e-TasbeeH Ji ne farmaayaa aapko zaraa sii tavajjo denii chaahiye auzaan pe, bahr pe aur sinf-e-suKhan kii haiyat pe :) iA, palak jhapakte hii aap ek kaamiiyaab shaa'irah kahlaayeNgii iA :)