*UmEeD*

[Shazia_Arif]

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@Khalil KhaaN FaaKhta

achchhii kaavish hai magar jaisa k Gul-e-TasbeeH Ji ne farmaayaa aapko zaraa sii tavajjo denii chaahiye auzaan pe, bahr pe aur sinf-e-suKhan kii haiyat pe iA, palak jhapakte hii aap ek kaamiiyaab shaa’irah kahlaayeNgii iA

thanx g:) i also felt that n said to Amal for correction but un ka to apna qibla darust nhi agar ap kuch tasih ker dain to most welcome:)

[ehsan]

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mashallah. :k:

[Shazia_Arif]

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@ehsan

mashallah. :k:

thanx:)

[Sannan]

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@Shazia_Arif

meri zeest ka ye safar abhi tamam hua nhi
kk diya hai akhri saans pe,jo larrkhrraya per bujha nhi

Buhat Khoub Shazia g buhat achi nazam … Alfaaz ka acha taal male :cobra: keep it up ..
Waisay mashaAllah title mein sitarain ** achay sajay hain Waisay yah aap ka kaam lag naheen raha hay aur khas toor par Bold bhi kar diye words

[waleedhbk]

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@Shazia_Arif

meri zeest ka ye safar abhi tamam hua nhi
**ikk diya hai akhri saans pe,**jo larrkhrraya per bujha nhi

main wo raste ki dhool hoon jise tum ne paon main rol dia
mera safr bohat taveel hai,beeta bhi or kata b nhi

abhi chahaar su andher hai
abhi din nikalne main der hai

mera sooraj bhi chamke ga
wo sooraj hai,dia nhi

meri khilwatain b ajeeb hain
**kabhi bazm main b akela,**kabhi tanha b tanha nhi

kabhi karb main doobe din mere
kabhi ratain dard se choor hain

kabhi dil ka daman chaak sa
jise aj tak sia nhi

wo sang khar hai to kya hua,kabhi gulaab sa narm b hoga
wo torr kar hara mujhe,main jurr k bhi thaka nhi…

Very Nice

[Shazia_Arif]

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@Sannan

Buhat Khoub Shazia g buhat achi nazam … Alfaaz ka acha taal male :cobra: keep it up ..
Waisay mashaAllah title mein sitarain ** achay sajay hain Waisay yah aap ka kaam lag naheen raha hay aur khas toor par Bold bhi kar diye words

maan jain ye mera he kam hai bas ap k teer or dil dekh k impress ho gai or aik key board usi kabarriye se le lia jis se ap ne adhi qeemat pe lia tha or bold kerna pehle se he ata tha

[Shazia_Arif]

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@waleedhbk

Very Nice

thanx waleedu baba:)

[Sannan]

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@Shazia_Arif

maan jain ye mera he kam hai bas ap k teer or dil dekh k impress ho gai or aik key board usi kabarriye se le lia jis se ap ne adhi qeemat pe lia tha or** bold kerna pehle se** he ata tha

Aur Center bhi kar dia

[Shazia_Arif]

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@Sannan

Aur Center bhi kar dia

don’t b jealous from my talent

[Faris_Udeen]

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Wow very nice poem. :k:

[Shazia_Arif]

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@Faris_Udeen

Wow very nice poem. :k:

thanx chachu:)

[Koyal]

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wesay tu saro nazma achi but ye sheR is Beautiful
wo sang khar hai to kya hua,kabhi gulaab sa narm b hoga
wo torr kar hara mujhe,main jurr k bhi thaka nhi...

[Shazia_Arif]

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@Koyal

wesay tu saro nazma achi but ye sheR is Beautiful wo sang khar hai to kya hua,kabhi gulaab sa narm b hoga wo torr kar hara mujhe,main jurr k bhi thaka nhi...

thanx for liking koyal:)

[rajey]

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mera sooraj bhi chamke ga
wo sooraj hai,dia nhi

wo torr kar hara mujhe,main jurr k bhi thaka nhi...

in lines me dum hai...

[Shazia_Arif]

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mera sooraj bhi chamke ga wo sooraj hai,dia nhi

wo torr kar hara mujhe,main jurr k bhi thaka nhi...

in lines me dum hai...

thanx for liking...kahan hain ap aj kal???

[Sannan]

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Yah nazam mujhay dobarah par kar bhi achi lagi :) shabaash

[Shazia_Arif]

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@Sannan

Yah nazam mujhay dobarah par kar bhi achi lagi :) shabaash

thansh :@: