Many moons ago, I used to write poetry (good or bad is another matter all together :D). Recently a Facebook person on my wife’s account, who is also a pianist, was looking to compose a song and needed some lyrics. He had a verse (misra) in his mind (second verse of the second shair of the recording). My wife asked me if I could come up with a full ghazal. I used his ‘zameen’ and came up with this. Dont know if its good or bad, but waiting for the final composition (will post it here when happens). In the meanwhile, please feel free to do your ‘Tanqeed’. I admit that some of the content does not have enough depth, but honestly, I am totally out of any poetry writing phase. so please be easy on me.
Oh yaar, there is nothing explicit in this ghazal. Last shair did not mean what Muqa and you are assuming. Azra Abbas kee shaeree parh parh ke aap dono ka zehen gandaa ho gayaa hai
Lol, actually I have married a Punjabi girl, and she did ask that question
Jazakallah
Thanks Laiha.
So no one liked the 'Zehen dareechay" wala shair. I thought that is the only somewhat decent shair (but glad to know that other shairs are also noteworthy)
Funny thing is this that the guy who asked me for this ghazal is a non muslim Indian. When he gave me his 'zameen' to complete a ghazal (Itna toota hoon ke choone se bikhar ja'oon gaa), I thought that I should send him Qasmi Sahab's "Main tou darya hoon, samandar main utar jaa'oon gaa' with my name and he would know a jack. Then I realized that it would be a very cruel joke :(
