Meri pehli Punjabi ghazal

[SindSagar]

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@goodnews

** Urdu aik Guldasta hy Baqi sab Zbanin is ky Phool hain:) **
or
han Saraiki sy yad aya aik saraiki poem hy agar kis ko yad ho tu irsal(post )krin
Dil Tang Tang hy Allah jor sang hy
Sajna da milna MUshkil Muhang hy

Another Siraiki:

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"Jayn Dil Which Pyar de Deray Hain

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Bus Oonh Dil Koon Irfan Samujh"

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Bulle Shah, He summed it up pretty nicely

[Amal]

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@Sannan

nice work Amal … but i wanna tell one thing that our preferences should be Urdu as after this someone will send poetry in Pushtu then sindhi , saraiki … we should develope urdu culture as almost every one can speak & understand Urdu here … No offense Amal but this is my view … sorry if anyone hurt …

I agree with you Sannan, Urdu is right at the top of all priorities. Lekin baqi bhi to hamaari apni hi zubaaneiN heiN na, hamaare apney log hi to boltey heiN But even than, I prefer Urdu over all. Isi leeye to aaj tak sirf aek baar hi Punjabi meiN ghazal likhi. I appreciate your comments

[Sannan]

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well said Amal …

[goodnews]

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@SindSagar

Another Siraiki:

"Jayn Dil Which Pyar de Deray Hain

Bus Oonh Dil Koon Irfan Samujh"

Bulle Shah, He summed it up pretty nicely

Lajwab

[SindSagar]

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@goodnews

Lajwab

**Shukria! Goodnews Ji ..:) **

[GuL-e-Tasbeeh]

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@Amal

Aey safar hayaati da weykho hun kitthey jaa kar mukda ey meiN jinna khich kar saaN leyNwa mera onna-e-dam hun kutthda ey

har raat to pehley haoli jai meri neendar mey'toN puchdi ey akkhaN di wanjar tharti wich haorey khoaab kehrra huN ugda ey

hun ban, banaa kar ki khatna hun saj, saNwar kar ki karna o'weiN rooh di galyaN koochaN wich dardaaN da kattha urrda ey

haorey kehrri apni kit'ti aey jerri murr murr aggoN aaondi ey aey khorr naseebaN da loko aeweiN naal kad'di nai turda ey

aey dukh hi paveiN sangi ho meiN pul pullah kar beittha waaN koi yaari aey'toN hey apni koi rishta aey'toN jurrda ey

aey aas nemaani nai murrdi so waar meiN aennoN dasya ey jo dil wich merey rehnda si kisey hor shehar hun wasda ey!

By: Amal

Amazing Stuff Amal, well as u said aap nay first and last punjabi poem likhi hay, but i hope , well i wish keh somthing punjabi mein aap aur bhi likhein, :-) Thanks for sharing this one

[jhansi_ki_rani]

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**bohat khoob amal bohat khoobsurat ghazal hai, lekin aik bat ki main nishandahi karna chahun gi k aap k last sher ki last line **
jo dil wich merey.................
ye aisey nahi ho ga yahan per " jo" ki bajaye

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jera dil wich merey wasda.........
umeed hai aap ainda b hamen kuch acha parney ko dein gey panjabi mein

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[P_G]

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bohat khoobsoorat ..

[goodnews]

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Aj bhi prh kr pehly din jysa lutf aya

[tanzansenzaki]

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Friends, I tried to write a Punjabi ghazal very first time in my life. I had never done so ever. So just let me know how successful I was in my try :)

Aey safar hayaati da weykho hun kitthey jaa kar mukda ey meiN jinna khich kar saaN leyNwa mera onna-e-dam hun kutthda ey

har raat to pehley haoli jai meri neendar mey'toN puchdi ey akkhaN di wanjar tharti wich haorey khoaab kehrra huN ugda ey

hun ban, banaa kar ki khatna hun saj, saNwar kar ki karna o'weiN rooh di galyaN koochaN wich dardaaN da kattha urrda ey

haorey kehrri apni kit'ti aey jerri murr murr aggoN aaondi ey aey khorr naseebaN da loko aeweiN naal kad'di nai turda ey

aey dukh hi paveiN sangi ho meiN pul pullah kar beittha waaN koi yaari aey'toN hey apni koi rishta aey'toN jurrda ey

aey aas nemaani nai murrdi so waar meiN aennoN dasya ey jo dil wich merey rehnda si kisey hor shehar hun wasda ey!

By: Amal

badi sohni ghazl hai...amal, tuhanu wadhaaean howan tussin punjabi wich kavita vi kar sakday ho...tay baray gifted ho......hor vi kadhi likhna....

[Syeda_Nazia_Jahangir]

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Assalam-u-alaikum Wa Rehmatullahi Wa Barkatuhu ,

                       I am new to this forum, but i would like to know about Amal. Are you a poet ....i am sorry i must inborn poet.. ?

Waiting for your answer.

Nazia

[SJ]

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[quote="Amal, post:12, topic:129280"]

Friends, I tried to write a Punjabi ghazal very first time in my life. I had never done so ever. So just let me know how successful I was in my try :)

Aey safar hayaati da weykho hun kitthey jaa kar mukda ey
meiN jinna khich kar saaN leyNwa mera onna-e-dam hun kutthda ey

Amal Mujhay tu Mushkil say ye he samajh aaya hai...punjabi ko parhna bohat mushkil laga ..............punjabi sunnay ki hud tak tu samajh aatee hai...agar ye ghazal app parh kar sunaatay tu acha hota...kyun k parhnay mein shayad mujh jaisay aur logon ko bhi diqqat ho.........:)
waisay aik shair jo samajh aayaa is Awesome...:)

[deep_ocean]

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@Amal

Friends, I tried to write a Punjabi ghazal very first time in my life. I had never done so ever. So just let me know how successful I was in my try

Aey safar hayaati da weykho hun kitthey jaa kar mukda ey
meiN jinna khich kar saaN leyNwa mera onna-e-dam hun kutthda ey

har raat to pehley haoli jai meri neendar mey’toN puchdi ey
akkhaN di wanjar tharti wich haorey khoaab kehrra huN ugda ey

hun ban, banaa kar ki khatna hun saj, saNwar kar ki karna
o’weiN rooh di galyaN koochaN wich dardaaN da kattha urrda ey

haorey kehrri apni kit’ti aey jerri murr murr aggoN aaondi ey
aey khorr naseebaN da loko aeweiN naal kad’di nai turda ey

aey dukh hi paveiN sangi ho meiN pul pullah kar beittha waaN
koi yaari aey’toN hey apni koi rishta aey’toN jurrda ey

aey aas nemaani nai murrdi so waar meiN aennoN dasya ey
jo dil wich merey rehnda si kisey hor shehar hun wasda ey!

By: Amal

ae te baun changi haigi hai
aes noon hun chadna nain saanon haur vi punjabi ghazlan parhn da mauqa dayo.

ik Mian Muhammad Bakhsh da shair suno

neechan di ashnai koloon faiz kisay na paaya
keekar te angoor charhaya har guchha zakhmaya

[WiseGuy]

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bhalay Urdu ho ya Punjabi, aap kee takhleeq hai achi hee hogee. :k:

[Amal]

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Pasandeedgi ke leeye aap sab dostoN ka be’had shukriya :~)