Meri pehli Punjabi ghazal

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@Bholay Bisray

Amal koi chunga kaam nahi kurna? hun chad devo aye sub khuch tu better :) but i know u cant :(

u 2 b :D

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Originally Posted by Bholay Bisray haan ji sahi pachaniyea hay tusi :(

[quote=Amal]

Bohat deir ki meharbaaN aatey aatey :( ... lab geya jey tame??? :(

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Originally Posted by Bholay Bisray haan ji sahi pachaniyea hay tusi :(

Apni pehchan pr itna dukhi pehli bar kisi ko dykha hy:(

[SindSagar]

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@Amal

Friends, I tried to write a Punjabi ghazal very first time in my life. I had never done so ever. So just let me know how successful I was in my try :)

Aey safar hayaati da weykho hun kitthey jaa kar mukda ey Yeh safar zindagi ka dekho ab kither jaa kar khatum ho ga meiN jinna khich kar saa*H* leyNwa mera onna-e-dam hun kutthda ey main jitna kheanch kar sans laiywoun mera utna hi dum ab ghuta hai

har raat to pehley haoli jai meri neendar mey'toN puchdi ey har raat say pehlay aahista say meri neend meray say poochti hai akkhaN di wanjar tharti wich haorey khoaab kehrra huN ugda ey aankoun ki banjar dharti main aur kounsa khuwaab ab ugtaa hai

hun ban, banaa kar ki khatna hun saj, saNwar kar ki karna ab ban banaa kar kya kamaana ab saj sanwaar kar kia karna o'weiN rooh di galyaN koochaN wich dardaaN da kattha urrda ey waaysay ruh ki galyion kuchay main dardoun ka gurda urrta hai

**Close enough Amal Sahib?..:) **

By: Amal

That is what I felt this meant..

[SindSagar]

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@HeArT HaCKeR

itni mushkil punjabi

Ab samuj gain Aap!

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***Urdu main kar dia ***

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@SindSagar

Ab samuj gain Aap!

**Urdu main kar dia :D **

Sind Sagar Wallah!Kmal kia hy :D

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Baqi manda ka beera ham uthaty hain(Nazam nahi Nasri Nazam ho gai ab yeh In Urdu):D
haorey kehrri apni kit'ti aey jerri murr murr aggoN aaondi ey
aey khorr naseebaN da loko aeweiN naal kad'di nai turda ey
Yeh apny kiy karmon ka phal hy ju bar bar hmary agy ata hy
Duniya walo (Logo) yeh qismat ka likha yinhi nahi hmary sath jata hy
aey dukh hi paveiN sangi ho meiN pul pullah kar beittha waaN
koi yaari aey'toN hey apni koi rishta aey'toN jurrda ey
**Yeh dukh hi shaid mera sathi{Friend}* ho main isy bhol bhal kr bytha tha***
Shaid koi purani ashnai hy is sy yah koi Taaluq jura hy is sy tha

aey aas nemaani nai murrdi so waar meiN aennoN dasya ey
jo dil wich merey rehnda si kisey hor shehar hun wasda ey!
**Yeh namurrad umeed khtam nahi hoti soo dfa is ko btya hy **
Ju mery dil main rhta hy woh ab kisi or shehr main rehta(rehaish pazeer) hy:(

[Monk]

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amal how come its printed??

[SindSagar]

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@goodnews

Sind Sagar Wallah!Kmal kia hy :D

Shukria, assi hindko we sammujday haan, par aye kafi mushkil see.

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haorey kehrri; khorr; aas nemaani; are not in my vocabulary..

[Amal]

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**goodnews **and SindSagar, aap donoN ney translation bilkul sahi, sahi ki hey. Great work k: And thanx a lot for liking this ghazal

@knockout_artist

amal how come its printed??

Kya matlab? Have you seen it in print? I will be more than interested in knowing it

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@SindSagar

Shukria, assi hindko we sammujday haan, par aye kafi mushkil see.

haorey kehrri; khorr; aas nemaani; are not in my vocabulary..

Wah fyr ty tusi ty multilangual hoy, Haq ay Okha (Mushkil) ty si pr tusi bymsal kita. Sachi gal ay hy ky Nmani I think Bychari namurrad, Aas Umeed hope ka matlab atat hy* Baqi meri vocabulary wich nai main Bamuhawara trjam kita lafzi nai (** halat wykh ky lafaz la dita**) pta nahi Amal ny ty honsla afzai kity ay Amal ji daso main thik a ky gha;at {try to**** translate other words}***
Haorey:- oy hoy, hay Allah, Uff
Kehrri:ziadti, Qahar, Zulam{Andaza Guess Hy}
***Khorr: Mionon wi nai pta *** )

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@Amal

**goodnews **and SindSagar, aap donoN ney translation bilkul sahi, sahi ki hey. Great work k: And thanx a lot for liking this ghazal

Kya matlab? Have you seen it in print? I will be more than interested in knowing it

Shukriya Amal Tarjuma pasand krny ka {go ky main ny shaid trjmy k haq ada na kiy Hosla afzai hy ap ki}

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@knockout_artist

amal how come its printed??

R u new here

[Amal]

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@goodnews

Haorey:- oy hoy, hay Allah, Uff
Kehrri:ziadti, Qahar, Zulam{Andaza Guess Hy}
Khorr: Mionon wi nai pta )

OK, now let me set it right :~)

Haorey: Shaed = Perhaps • Also used in the sense of ‘na’jaaney’
Kehrri: Kon si = Which one • From the family of ‘Kon’
Khorr: Bad’qismati = Bad luck • Also contains many other meanings

Now read the sheir again and see what it says :~)

@Amal

haorey kehrri apni kit’ti aey jerri murr murr aggoN aaondi ey
aey khorr naseebaN da loko aeweiN naal kad’di nai turda ey

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@Amal

OK, now let me set it right :~)

Haorey: Shaed = Perhaps • Also used in the sense of ‘na’jaaney’
Kehrri: Kon si = Which one • From the family of ‘Kon’ Main ny Qahar bna diya:d{jhalat meri;)}
Khorr: Bad’qismati = Bad luck • Also contains many other meanings

Now read the sheir again and see what it says :~)

Buhat buhat Shukriya, Thury buhat gunjal thy woh bhi khul gay:)
haorey kehrri apni kit’ti aey jerri murr murr aggoN aaondi ey
aey khorr naseebaN da loko aeweiN naal kad’di nai turda ey
Is bar is shyr ko prhny ka ik nya lutf aya hy Thanx again Amal.
{wasy tuky mery bhi thik hi byth gay thy;)}

[SindSagar]

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@Amal

OK, now let me set it right :~)

Haorey: Shaed = Perhaps • Also used in the sense of 'na'jaaney' Kehrri: Kon si = Which one • From the family of 'Kon' Khorr: Bad'qismati = Bad luck • Also contains many other meanings

Now read the sheir again and see what it says :~)

Haorey: this word I had heard but was not reading it right
Kehrri: Also I knew the word but the "arday" is not easy to recognize.
Khorr: I now as jealousy or bitterness

Woh Konsa apna karna hai jo ulta saamnay ata hai
yeh budnaseebi hay logo jo sath kabhi nan chalta hai

Right.

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@SindSagar

**Haorey: this word I had heard but was not reading it right( Mera talafuz Khawry ya khory hy is ky liy shaid yeh wajah thi na samjahny ki) Kehrri: Also I knew the word but the "arday" is not easy to recognize. Khorr: I now as jealousy or bitterness

Woh Konsa apna karna hai jo ulta saamnay ata hai yeh budnaseebi hay logo jo sath kabhi nan chalta hai

Right.

**Buhat khub Sagar ji:D **

[I_am_in_Love]

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Wah fyr ty tusi ty multilangual hoy, Haq ay Okha (Mushkil) ty si pr tusi bymsal kita. Sachi gal ay hy ky Nmani I think Bychari namurrad, Aas Umeed hope ka matlab atat hy* Baqi meri vocabulary wich nai main Bamuhawara trjam kita lafzi nai (** halat wykh ky lafaz la dita**) pta nahi Amal ny ty honsla afzai kity ay Amal ji daso main thik a ky gha;at {try to**** translate other words}***
Haorey:- oy hoy, hay Allah, Uff
Kehrri:ziadti, Qahar, Zulam{Andaza Guess Hy}
***Khorr: Mionon wi nai pta *** )

amal bao ghazal changi he
gn de:CareBear:alfaz mane

[Sannan]

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nice work Amal ........ but i wanna tell one thing that our preferences should be Urdu as after this someone will send poetry in Pushtu then sindhi , saraiki ..... we should develope urdu culture as almost every one can speak & understand Urdu here ....... No offense Amal but this is my view .... sorry if anyone hurt ....

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** ^^Amman SAN Ji tu kia problem hy sab zabani sikh jain gy ham.Sind Sagar ny kia khub Punjabi:rose: sy Urdutarjma kia, koi Pashto:flower2: koi Sindhi:flower1: ka koi Saraikika tarjam kry ga tu kia khub hi sman bandhy ga take it positively,Urdu aik Guldasta hy Baqi sab Zbanin is ky Phool hain:) **
or
han Saraiki sy yad aya aik saraiki poem hy agar kis ko yad ho tu irsal(post )krin
Dil Tang Tang hy Allah jor sang hy
Sajna da milna MUshkil Muhang hy

[Sannan]

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yup i'm agree with you but overall we should seen one community .... my birth place is in Saraiki Region and i spent my life in lahore and most of my friends/reltaives speak punjabi and sariki but i always speak urdu even its not my mother tounge ......