Meri pehli Punjabi ghazal

Amal · February 25, 2006, 6:14pm

Friends, I tried to write a Punjabi ghazal very first time in my life. I had never done so ever. So just let me know how successful I was in my try

Aey safar hayaati da weykho hun kitthey jaa kar mukda ey
meiN jinna khich kar saaN leyNwa mera onna-e-dam hun kutthda ey

har raat to pehley haoli jai meri neendar mey’toN puchdi ey
akkhaN di wanjar tharti wich haorey khoaab kehrra huN ugda ey

hun ban, banaa kar ki khatna hun saj, saNwar kar ki karna
o’weiN rooh di galyaN koochaN wich dardaaN da kattha urrda ey

haorey kehrri apni kit’ti aey jerri murr murr aggoN aaondi ey
aey khorr naseebaN da loko aeweiN naal kad’di nai turda ey

aey dukh hi paveiN sangi ho meiN pul pullah kar beittha waaN
koi yaari aey’toN hey apni koi rishta aey’toN jurrda ey

aey aas nemaani nai murrdi so waar meiN aennoN dasya ey
jo dil wich merey rehnda si kisey hor shehar hun wasda ey!

By: Amal

Pakeeza · February 25, 2006, 8:54pm

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Buhat changi ey:~)

HeArT_HaCKeR · February 27, 2006, 9:29am

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itni mushkil punjabi

Amal · February 27, 2006, 11:52am

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Pakeeza thanx :)

HeArT HaCKeR, Punjabi is easy to speak, but it's very, very difficult to read. By the way, it's hardly 50% of what actually should be called real Punjabi :)

Dilsay · February 27, 2006, 2:03pm

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Bohat achay as usual.... aur kitni zabanoon main likh saktay hain aap

Nickless · February 27, 2006, 4:34pm

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sadiyooN baad i got the chance to visit this place n the frst post i see is urz … and well i say to myself .. time not wasted.. there i read somethin beautiful..

keep writing in punjabi.. itz sounds nice to ears.. :- )

HeArT_HaCKeR · February 27, 2006, 5:23pm

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baja farmaya.. mujhse nahi parhii ja rahi

Amal · February 27, 2006, 6:18pm

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Very bad It means I do not write good enough to keep my readers

Dilsay, Likhta to aek meiN hooN, ye Punjabi waali to bas wesey hi koshish ki, for a change

HeArT HaCKeR, aap hi nahi, am sure bohat sey logoN sey nahi parrhi ja rahi ho gi that’s why I won’t be writing in punjabi anymore

ghazal_kisi_ke · February 27, 2006, 7:51pm

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Amal if possible translate this ghazal in urdu pls

Koyal · February 28, 2006, 1:25am

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v nice Amal :)

Bholay_Bisray · February 28, 2006, 1:46pm

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Amal koi chunga kaam nahi kurna?
hun chad devo aye sub khuch tu better :) but i know u cant :(

Shab-e-Hijar · March 2, 2006, 1:45am

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aey aas nemaani nai murrdi so waar meiN aennoN dasya ey
jo dil wich merey rehnda si kisey hor shehar hun wasda ey!

simply beautifulllllllllllllllllll :k:

Shab-e-Hijar · March 2, 2006, 1:46am

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kera kum

NikamiJano · March 2, 2006, 2:50am

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tusi aethy ki kar ray akhan ghuma ghuma k

Amal Beautiful:k: punjabi vich v jawab nahi tuhada:)

Shahana · March 2, 2006, 6:10am

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O meray raba .Its a bay panah poem.What a strong grip you have inpanjabi though writting it first time.A very nice briefing of your commitment.keep on writting.

Amal · March 2, 2006, 8:12am

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Koyal, Shab-e-Hijar, NikamiJi, thanx a lot for liking the ghazal :)

ghazal kisi ke, that's a very difficult task :( Aap ko kuch bhi samajh nahi aaya? :D

Bholay Bisray, if I am not wrong, you are Eastern Thoughts, boley to - Amjad Chohan urf Amjad Bhai. Right? "Chan kitthaaN guzaari ai, raat veeeyyyy?" :(

Shahana, pasandeedgi aur hosla-afzai ke leeye be'had shukriya :)

Bholay_Bisray · March 2, 2006, 10:22pm

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haan ji sahi pachaniyea hay tusi

kiya haal sunavaan dill da
koi mahram raz na milda

system · March 16, 2006, 3:08pm

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"hun ban, banaa kar ki khatna hun saj, saNwar kar ki karna
o'weiN rooh di galyaN koochaN wich dardaaN da kattha urrda ey
*
*aey dukh hi paveiN sangi ho meiN pul pullah kar beittha waaN
koi yaari aey'toN hey apni koi rishta aey'toN jurrda ey"

Just marvellous... every sher is a compliment to the previous one.. I would say, keep writing in punjabi... :-)

Amal · March 16, 2006, 7:17pm

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Bohat deir ki meharbaaN aatey aatey … lab geya jey tame???

KhamoshNigahein, thanx for liking it … Actually not many people understand Punjabi here, so they will feel left out

goodnews · September 3, 2006, 2:48am

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Amal:

Friends, I tried to write a Punjabi ghazal very first time in my life. I had never done so ever. So just let me know how successful I was in my try

Aey safar hayaati da weykho hun kitthey jaa kar mukda ey
meiN jinna khich kar saaN leyNwa mera onna-e-dam hun kutthda ey

har raat to pehley haoli jai meri neendar mey’toN puchdi ey
akkhaN di wanjar tharti wich haorey khoaab kehrra huN ugda ey

hun ban, banaa kar ki khatna hun saj, saNwar kar ki karna
o’weiN rooh di galyaN koochaN wich dardaaN da kattha urrda ey

haorey kehrri apni kit’ti aey jerri murr murr aggoN aaondi ey
aey khorr naseebaN da loko aeweiN naal kad’di nai turda ey

aey dukh hi paveiN sangi ho meiN pul pullah kar beittha waaN
koi yaari aey’toN hey apni koi rishta aey’toN jurrda ey

aey aas nemaani nai murrdi so waar meiN aennoN dasya ey
jo dil wich merey rehnda si kisey hor shehar hun wasda ey!

By: Amal

Marrrrrrrr oy Amal Tusi ty Punjabi wich aini sohni Ghazal likhi ty sanon hajy tak pta ai nai:)main ty sada Samjhi “Ahly Zuban”(Urdu Speaking") ho pr aj pta lagiya Punjabi wich ty kmal kitai ky.Buhat wadiya ky:lajawab: Ki khndy ny Angrezi wich WOW!