koi to aisee shaam ho.......

[Pramod]

soncha apnii ye ghazal aap se share karoon..thodi puraani hai magar mere dil ke bahot kareeb hai…aap logon ke comment ka hamesha ki tarah intezaar rahega…

koi to aisee shaam ho, eik pal ko tujhe bhula sakuN
muddat ke baad khood ko, apne aap se mila sakuN

dostoN kaza ki dua karo, wo din to aaye naseeb meiN
wo baarahaa bulaayaa kare, aur maiN na aa sakuN

apne rahbaree ki chhaoN meiN, kamzarf na banaa, kahiN
kal tu jo haath chhod de, eik kadam na maiN baDaa sakuN

aasmaaN hi gar adoo hai, eik mauka tu to ataa karey
haatho meiN tere naam ki, eik lakeer maiN bana sakuN

dunia ke rasm-o-riwaaz se, mujhe door le ke chal, jahaaN
apne maazi ke har nishaaN ko, tere pyar se mitaa sakuN

naatwaanee par meri , barsoN jahaaN haNstaa rahaa
tere ishq ne yuN buland kiya, ab chaaNd ko maiN pa sakuN

tere hizra ka nahiN haif, mujhe aik karam se navaaz de
kabhee mujhe jo neeNd aaye, khwaab mein tujhe bulaa sakuN

mera yakeen kar mere humsafar, ye ishq mera guroor hai
tu jo haath de mere haath meiN, aasmaaN ko maiN jhuka sakuN

mere khaloos meiN gar iffat hai, to wo din bhi aaye ke tujhe
ho raushani ki justjoo, maiN apna ghar jalaa sakuN

ye ishq ki intehaaN nahiN , hai aur kya mere hamnasheeN
tu dua mein hai kise aur ki, main ashq bhi na bahaa sakuN

[SaaHiL_Kinaara]

NICE! :k:
tahnx for sharin!

[X_Communist]

It’s beautiful.

apne rahbaree ki chhaoN meiN, kamzarf na banaa, kahiN
kal tu jo haath chhod de, eik kadam na maiN baDaa sakuN

aasmaaN hi gar adoo hai, eik mauka tu to ataa karey
haatho meiN tere naam ki, eik lakeer maiN bana sakuN

mera yakeen kar mere humsafar, ye ishq mera guroor hai
tu jo haath de mere haath meiN, aasmaaN ko maiN jhuka sakuN

Brilliant :k:

[Amal]

Re: koi to aisee shaam ho…

*Originally posted by Pramod: *

apne rahbaree ki chhaoN meiN, kamzarf na banaa, kahiN
kal tu jo haath chhod de, eik kadam na maiN baDaa sakuN

aasmaaN hi gar adoo hai, eik mauka tu to ataa karey
haatho meiN tere naam ki, eik lakeer maiN bana sakuN

dunia ke rasm-o-riwaaz se, mujhe door le ke chal, jahaaN
apne maazi ke har nishaaN ko, tere pyar se mitaa sakuN

tere hizra ka nahiN haif, mujhe aik karam se navaaz de
kabhee mujhe jo neeNd aaye, khwaab mein tujhe bulaa sakuN

mere khaloos meiN gar iffat hai, to wo din bhi aaye ke tujhe
ho raushani ki justjoo, maiN apna ghar jalaa sakuN

ye ishq ki intehaaN nahiN , hai aur kya mere hamnasheeN
tu dua mein hai kise aur ki, main ashq bhi na bahaa sakuN

If you allow me a frank review Pramod, I will say that this is
by far the most impressive work coming from you.

I see something very peculiar in term of sensitivity
of pattern and laying-out of wordings. I wish you
continue to share with us your beautiful poetry.

[nikii]

ye ishq ki intehaaN nahiN , hai aur kya mere hamnasheeN
tu dua mein hai kise aur ki, main ashq bhi na bahaa sakuN

very nice paramod ji :k:
thxs 4 sharing

[Capricorn]

*Originally posted by Pramod: *
soncha apnii ye ghazal aap se share karoon..thodi puraani hai magar mere dil ke bahot kareeb hai…aap logon ke comment ka hamesha ki tarah intezaar rahega…

koi to aisee shaam ho, eik pal ko tujhe bhula sakuN
muddat ke baad khood ko, apne aap se mila sakuN

dostoN kaza ki dua karo, wo din to aaye naseeb meiN
wo baarahaa bulaayaa kare, aur maiN na aa sakuN

apne rahbaree ki chhaoN meiN, kamzarf na banaa, kahiN
kal tu jo haath chhod de, eik kadam na maiN baDaa sakuN

aasmaaN hi gar adoo hai, eik mauka tu to ataa karey
haatho meiN tere naam ki, eik lakeer maiN bana sakuN

dunia ke rasm-o-riwaaz se, mujhe door le ke chal, jahaaN
apne maazi ke har nishaaN ko, tere pyar se mitaa sakuN

naatwaanee par meri , barsoN jahaaN haNstaa rahaa
tere ishq ne yuN buland kiya, ab chaaNd ko maiN pa sakuN

tere hizra ka nahiN haif, mujhe aik karam se navaaz de
kabhee mujhe jo neeNd aaye, khwaab mein tujhe bulaa sakuN

mera yakeen kar mere humsafar, ye ishq mera guroor hai
tu jo haath de mere haath meiN, aasmaaN ko maiN jhuka sakuN

mere khaloos meiN gar iffat hai, to wo din bhi aaye ke tujhe
ho raushani ki justjoo, maiN apna ghar jalaa sakuN

ye ishq ki intehaaN nahiN , hai aur kya mere hamnasheeN
tu dua mein hai kise aur ki, main ashq bhi na bahaa sakuN

Excellent attempt. I loved it. You have command on expressing ur emotions :k:

[Pramod]

Shukriya SaaHiL and X_Communist.

aap logon ne sarahaa mujhe bahot achha laga.
Thanks once again.

[Pramod]

Re: Re: koi to aisee shaam ho…

*Originally posted by Amal: *

If you allow me a frank review Pramod, I will say that this is
by far the most impressive work coming from you.

http://us.i1.yimg.com/us.yimg.com/i/mesg/emoticons/35.gif

I see something very peculiar in term of sensitivity
of pattern and laying-out of wordings. I wish you
continue to share with us your beautiful poetry.

Amal,
As always your comments matter a lot for me. You cannot imagine how long these words of you will go with me in this field. It has inspired me a lot.
Thanks a lot and Please keep commenting on my work.

[Pramod]

Thanks a lot Nikii and Capricorn.

[GuL-e-Tasbeeh]

Buhat Umdah, Pramod ji :~)
Keep it up, and Thanks for sharing..

[Rameesha]

nice ghazal Pra jee :k:

[Truth_Is_Beauty]

ye ishq ki intehaaN nahiN , hai aur kya mere hamnasheeN
tu dua mein hai kise aur ki, main ashq bhi na bahaa sakuN

very nice effort:)..thanx for sharing!!

[NikamiJano]

Re: koi to aisee shaam ho.......

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by Pramod: *

koi to aisee shaam ho eik pal ko tujhe bhula sakuN
muddat ke baad khud ko apneY aap se mila sakuN

=blue]apne rahbaree ki chaoN meiN kamzarf na banaa kahiN
kal tu jo haath choR de eik kadam na maiN baDaa sakuN

aasmaaN hi ghaR adoo hai eik mauka tu to ataa karey
haatho meiN tere naam ki eik lakeeR maiN bana sakuN

tere hizra ka nahiN haif, mujhe aik karam se navaaz de
kabhi mujhe jo neeNd aaye khwaab mein tujhe bula sakuN

ye ishq ki intehaaN nahiN hai aur kya mere hamnasheeN
tu dua mein hai kise aur ki main ashq bhi na bahaa sakuN
[/QUOTE]

v nice ** Pra g ** thanks 4 sharing

[Mahee]

very nice Pramod jee :k:

[chand_chehra]

bohaaaaaaaat hi khoob pramod gi :k:

[Bismah]

Bohat hi khoob. :k:

[_Masoom_Muskaan]

boht achie :k:

[Pramod]

aap logon ka bahot bahot shukriya GuL-e-Tasbeeh,Truth_is_beauty and Rameesha.
aap logon ne meri es creation ko pasand kiya mujhe sach mein bahot achha laga.
Thanks once again.

[Pramod]

Re: Re: koi to aisee shaam ho.......

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by NikamiJano: *

v nice ** Pra g ** thanks 4 sharing
[/QUOTE]

Shukriya bahna...aap to hamesha mera honsla afzaai karti haiN..bahot achha lagta hai mujhe.
Thanks once again.

[Pramod]

Thanks a lot Mahee, Chaand ji, Masoom Muskaan and Bismah.