Junoon he meri aarzu, he ishq mera be-panahh .. (by me plese comment!)

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Dosto, eik baar phir kuch feelings likhne ke koshish ki he .. jisko shairi to nahi kaha ja sakta .. magar islaah (correction) ki umeed ke saath aap sab se share zaroor kia jaa sakta he ..

Junoon he meri aarzu, he ishq mera be-panahh .. chahoonga jisko ospe main, hasti ko kardonga fanahh ..

lazim howa jo chahanaa, chahoonga main to umar bhar ..
yea baat to bass mann ki he, doonga isay na main zubaan ..

khamooshiyon se wo meri, anjaan na hote agar ..
to jaan lete dil ke raaz, aata na yea waqt-e-giraan ..

milna he mushkil aab mujhe, daur-e-junoon ka hamsafar ..
tarsa tha main, tarsoonga main, hojaonga jal ke dhooanh ..

aay kaash mere dost too, mehsoos mera dard kar ..
khud jaan le ga kia hoon main, yea raaz jab hoga ayaan ..

main khaak ka putla to hoon, dil bhi main rakhta hoon magar ..
iss khaak main himat kahan, jo sehh sake dil ki tarhaan ..

lagta nahi bilkool mujhe, aanhon main apni kuch asar ..
na dasht mere saath he, sunta he na yea aasmaan ..

jalta rahega kab talak, “Azam” too apni bhool par ..
na sooch ke wo bhool thi, wo ishq ka tha imtehaan ..

by me

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I am like an Open Book Except for the few pages of my past, My life is an empty book. It takes the shape of a mystery, To me it does at least. For I cannot tell what happens next, Too many cliffhangers and too much suspense. But its clues all lead eventually to the same place, Unfortunately it does not say where. It only says get the next book, For in this one you’ ve ran out of room.

[This message has been edited by Azam#1 (edited May 16, 2002).]

hmmmm…azam jee..aap tu kafi achay shair bantay jaa rahay hain

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boht achaa likha hai aap ne.


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~Kiya haaq wo jeena hai jo apnay hi liyay ho
Khud mit kar kisi aur ko mitnay se bacha lay~

wowwwww very Nice

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keeeeep it up

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MÙhb@t kÀ ÃnÒkhå SîÌSîÎã Hãï
KÆhî ý@$®Úb Káhï kîBàÎå H@ï

nice one keep it up

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~Advice is like caster oil, easy to give hard to swallow!~

may Allah kare aapkaa zor e qalam aur zeyada.

wah bhahi **azam bhaahi sahib, apko apnay aap ko un khushqimat insaano mein ginna'n chaaiye jo apni feelings **phool* lafoz'n ke guldasto'n mein sajaa ke daad bhi paa le lete hain aur, saath saath dil_e_veera'n_haal kaa bhouj bhi utaar lete hain....*

hai na ajab latafat bhari khush_kismati ka iehsaas jab aapka aaina_e_ahsasaat aane waali **khizaa'n* ke naqash_e_paa paRh letaa hai..aur jab shaam_e_gham ke dhaltay saaye holay se sehan_e_dil_e_veera'n mein dabbe paao'N guss aate hain tau dar_o_deevar pe tanhaayee ki bhelein mehv_e_ruqs ho jaati hain*

haaye yeh nazaare bas wo hi jaanay jinki ungaliyaan apnay khoon mein dubbi manzir_kashi ko teyaar rehti hain.


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[This message has been edited by MAREEZ_E_ISHQ (edited May 18, 2002).]

[This message has been edited by MAREEZ_E_ISHQ (edited May 18, 2002).]

… mashallah … you are very good … it appears you have quite a gift … thank you ..

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.. keep it up ..


:flower2:Make yourself a better person and know who you are before you try and know someone else and expect them to know you.:flower2:

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Bohot bohot shukriya maheen jee .. wese mujhe khud nahi pata ke main kia kar raha hoon .. pehle likhta nahi tha .. cuz koi parhta nahi tha .. since I found gupshup .. I found u guys to read me .. n the story started !! ..

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aab tou aap logon ko meri tooti phooti shairi bhugatna he pare ge

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Thanks again ..

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Shukraan moon face jee ..

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Thanks Kinara jee

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ufffffffffff Mareez-e-Ishq jee bohot bohot bohot shukriya .. aise tou kabhi meray aammi abbu ne bhe muje appriciate nahi kia

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kis zubaan se aap ka shuriya ada karon ???
chalo english use karte hain

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So nice of you Mareez-e-Ishq jee .. thanks a million for the reply

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Bohot bohot shukriya m_isabah jee .. so nice of you .. let see aab mujhe agla daura kab parhta he .. wese abhi abhi eik chota sa gul aur khilaya he .. go n check dhoop’s thread “wo khush khayal ghalat fehmiyoN maiN rehta hai” wahan kuch likha tou he

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ne ways thanks again for the reply ..

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very nice

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mai nahi manti ke ye aap ne likha hai

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bohat khoob.

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**Nikamma kya is dil nay
Is dil nay kya hay Nikamma **

Buhat Khoob.

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I’m Gonna Be The Champ
The Way I Wanna Be
( Muhammad ALI )

lol… wese bhahi jaan ami abu kam hi aise shouq ko apriciate karte hain

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mere waalay abhi tak bolte hain “pagal na ho kahein kaa, bongiyaan maartaa rehataa”

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aur I am one of those kick start individuals when ever get a hint of inspiration they just say it.
no problem mere bhahi.
is se bi achaa likh aur sunnaa.


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thanks princess of hearts jee ..
hi aab aap ko kaise manaya jai ???
hmmm wese apas ki baat he mujhe bhi yaqeen nahi hota

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theek kaha mareez-e-ishaq jee .. apni tou ghar main woo halat he ke “ghar ki murghi daal baraber” …

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ne ways u got a very unique style in your replies .. dil kush hojata he .. apki replies dekh kar … kia salees urdu use karte hoo yaar .. charoon tabak roshan hojate hain

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and yes jab bhi mujhe agla shairi ka dora pare ga .. I’ll definetly share it with you guys ..
thanks once again ..
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Junoon he meri aarzu, he ishq mera be-panahh ..
chahoonga jisko ospe main, hasti ko kardonga fanahh
WAH keya bat hai.. very nice

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Originally posted by Azam#1:

Dosto, eik baar phir kuch feelings likhne ke koshish ki he .. jisko shairi to nahi kaha ja sakta .. magar islaah (correction) ki umeed ke saath aap sab se share zaroor kia jaa sakta he ..


Junoon he meri aarzu, he ishq mera be-panahh ..
chahoonga jisko ospe main, hasti ko kardonga fanahh ..

lazim howa jo chahanaa, chahoonga main to umar bhar ..
yea baat to bass mann ki he, doonga isay na main zubaan ..

khamooshiyon se wo meri, anjaan na hote agar ..
to jaan lete dil ke raaz, aata na yea waqt-e-giraan ..

milna he mushkil aab mujhe, daur-e-junoon ka hamsafar ..
tarsa tha main, tarsoonga main, hojaonga jal ke dhooanh ..

aay kaash mere dost too, mehsoos mera dard kar ..
khud jaan le ga kia hoon main, yea raaz jab hoga ayaan ..

main khaak ka putla to hoon, dil bhi main rakhta hoon magar ..
iss khaak main himat kahan, jo sehh sake dil ki tarhaan ..

lagta nahi bilkool mujhe, aanhon main apni kuch asar ..
na dasht mere saath he, sunta he na yea aasmaan ..

jalta rahega kab talak, "Azam" too apni bhool par ..
na sooch ke wo bhool thi, wo ishq ka tha imtehaan ..

by me

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Azam#1 bhaee:
tamam izzat o ehtaraam ke saath main arz karna chahuuNga k :
Alfaaz o ehsaasat bohat khoob hain

lekin bunyaadi shayeri ki kuchh khamiyan hain jin ki taraf tawajjuh ki zaroorat hai.

shayeri mazmoon,alfaz,wazan,radeef o qafiya se ibaarat hai.

yeahi shayeri ka husn hai k uss main inn tamam ajzaa ka imtezaaj ho.

App ne panaah ke saath fanaa ka qafiyah bandha hai . uss ke baad zubaaN, bayaaN aur giraaN bhi qafiye k taur par bandhay hain
jo funni etbaar se saheeh nahee hain.

Waisay aap main shayeri ki behtareen salahiyat maujood hai ussay zaya na honay den aur kissi Achchay ustaaad se Ruju' karen jo islaah k saath aap ko bunyaadi UROOZ se bhi ruu shanas kara-eN.
Ummeed hai aap ko meri yeah guzarishat GiraaN na guzren-gee.
shukriya


huwe mar k ham jo Ruswa
huwe kiyuN na gharq e darya

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bohot bohot shukriya love_dada jee

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