~Ek nakam si koshish~

Bhooli_Bisri · February 28, 2003, 12:58pm

finally removed

Amal · February 28, 2003, 1:36pm

Re: ~Ek nakam si koshish~

wao, that's amazing:k:...bohat khoobsoorat ghazal hey:k:...thanx for sharing with us. Keep it up:)

GuL-e-Tasbeeh · February 28, 2003, 4:32pm

Re: ~Ek nakam si koshish~

[QUOTE]
Originally posted by Bhooli Bisri: *
*
Pehle tu cheeni gaee aankhoon se benaee yahaan
Aur phir sare nagar mein aaenay baante gaye

Kab mujhe is pyar ka hissa mila ay chara gar
Jo bhi lamhay thay woh duniya ke leye baante gaye**
[/QUOTE]

Buhat Khoob,keep it up and Thanks for sharing apni Nakaam koshish:-)
well how you know keh yeh nakaam koshish hay... yeh tou baad meiN pata chalta hay:-p

Jharna_jhankar · February 28, 2003, 4:45pm

aap ki ye koshish nakaam nahi balkay bahot hi umda koshish hai aisay hi aap likhti rahie kamiyabi aap kay qadam chomay ge ~

ghazal_kisi_ke · March 1, 2003, 5:39am

bohtu achee likhe hai ap ne:k::k:

chand_chehra · March 1, 2003, 5:48am

Re: ~Ek nakam si koshish~

very nice :k:
keep it up

Koyal · March 1, 2003, 11:32pm

Re: ~Ek nakam si koshish~

:k: koshish thanks 4 sharing

Gadha · March 2, 2003, 12:24am

Re: ~Ek nakam si koshish~

you have all qualities of saying good asha’ar:) and your whole ghazal is balanced and rythimitically chained together with the meanings of individual verses being separated from the collective meaning and each sher thus can stand alone and can be understood in any given scenario of the life; and can be related to anyone’s life and has the ability to be understood by anyone in his/her own circumstances .. as well as that is true for the whole ghazal:)

wazan, beh’r, qafiyaa, radeef,.. everything seems on the proper position considering the fact that this is your initial efforts…

very nice:k: very touching and very deep:flower1:

I just need to understand the use of the underline word in the following quoted sher… i do understand it but it has some literal meaning and am just interested in what you think of the meaning and what do u mean exactly by this in context of the sher itself as well as the poem…

the word is interestingly used… but could there be anyother meaning or a different more better word was not available.. or do you think it is the right word that u used.. if yes, i am keen to understand it .. Please, do let us know… it is very beautiful:)

ullujii · March 2, 2003, 2:12am

bhoot achi koshish hai ap ke. very cool

Guest7777 · March 2, 2003, 3:29am

great job Bhooli :k:

ullujii · March 2, 2003, 3:45am

ap co bohoot bohoot mubarak ho bhooli jii. ap ke nazam urdupoint par be Aa gye hai
http://poetry.urdupoint.com/muqabla/view.shtml?dosraoo.gif

Gadha · March 2, 2003, 3:51am

Chara gar = Ausaaf Shaikh (Bhooli Bisri?)

Koyal · March 2, 2003, 4:00am

:rolleyes: :eek: kia baat hai GS per kitany mash-hoor shaier atey pata nahi tha ..:)…ab tu sab k autograph chaiey hum ko..:)keon uluji..

ullujii · March 2, 2003, 4:02am

chand_chehra · March 2, 2003, 6:12am

Waah ray kya baat hai gupshup ki aur aheem bhola bisra ki

Capricorn · March 2, 2003, 1:39pm

Re: ~Ek nakam si koshish~

Wah :k:
Buhat khoobsurat kawish hai aap kee

system · March 2, 2003, 3:36pm

:k:

Philanthrope · March 2, 2003, 4:33pm

hmm :k:

Bhooli_Bisri · March 2, 2003, 6:01pm

mein ne aj tak kabhi apni thread per apna reply post nahe keya per aj kar rahe hon coz its important.

At urdupoint my friend has shared my poetry and I think this is enough to clear the confusion.

sab ki pasandeedgi ka shukreya
Waslaam

Dilsay · March 2, 2003, 6:31pm

acha jee..... koyee baat nahi...