Dhoop Behna ke mashwaray ke reply "Dosti ka pul-seraat" ..(by me please comment!)

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Shaam-e-Firaq · April 22, 2002, 5:22am

mushkil tha bohot, arzo-e-dil ko maarna ..
hamany bhe dil ka qatl, sar-e-aam kiya hay ..

very nice

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Sehrao mein kaha miltey hain deewaro key saaye…

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Mahee · April 22, 2002, 5:44am

wah kia baat hi azam jee aap ki. chha gaye aap to. bohat khoob. very nice

keep it up

mohabat aesa derya hai
k baarish rooth bhi ja a
to pani kum nahi hota!

Ek_Shairah · April 22, 2002, 4:49pm

Originally posted by Azam#1:
**Meri pehli nazm “Kabhi kabhi shaam ke is pehar .. main soochta hoon” ke reply main Dhoop sis. nay eik mashwara diya tha .. jisko parh kar main eik aur nazm likhnay par majboor hogaya … hazir-e-khidmat hay .. “Dosti ka pul-seraat”.

Dhoop Sis ka mashwara kuch yoon tha :
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rah-e-wafa maiN koee aakhree muqaam nahiN
shikast-e-dil ko muhabbat ki intihaa na samajh,
palat kay aa-ay ga wo bhi gaee rutoN ki tarha
jo tujh say rooth gaya hai usay judaa na samajh
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Jawaban arz kiya hay :
** rah-e-wafa main, hamnay bara naam, kia hay .. khud ko jala ke, har subhaah, ko, shaam kia hay ..
kuch bewafaoon ki, rafaqat ka, hay qasoor ..
kuch hamnay, mohabat ko bhe, badnaam kia hay ..

kehtay rahay, ke dost hain, aur dost rahain gay ..
dosti ko kuch, is tarhaan se, sar anjaam kia hay ..

guzri rutoon main, ham tou rahay, onkay aas paas ..
aati rutoon nay, shayad hamko, baandh diya hay ..

tanhaiyoon ke darr say, agar chook jatay ham ..
na dost rehtay, na hee, mohabat ko patay ham ..

tanha hain aab tou, soochtay rehtay hain raat din ..
kiya dost keh kar, ham nay ghalat kaam kiya hay ?? ..

rootha hay agar koi, tou, mujrim hee hongay ham ..
kehta hay agar koi, tou, buzdil hee hongay ham ..

roothay howoon ko, waqt nay, samjhaya bhee bohot ..
roothay howoon nay, ham ko hee, ilzaam diya hay ..

lazim tha mohabat ko, dil main chopatay ham ..
khud ko dooba ke, dost ko he paar laatay ham ..

chahat bhee rahi, dosti bhee haath barhaaey ..
hamnay tou dosti ko kass ke thaam liya hay ..

main maanta hoon, tujhsay, mohabat rahi mujhay ..
panay ke tujhko, har ghari, chahat rahi mujhay ..

chalta raha main phir bhe, dosti ke, pul-seraat par ..
na pooch kis tarhaan, issay, tamaam kiya hay ..

khauf-e-hijr nay, har lamha, daraya hay mujhay ..
husn-e-jamal nay, terey, behkaaya hay mujhay ..

mushkil tha bohot, arzo-e-dil ko maarna ..
hamany bhe dil ka qatl, sar-e-aam kiya hay ..

khair …

mohabat na mili, dosti tou, paas hay meray ..
mohabat ko pakay, kis nay bara kaam kia hay ..
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Nice one azam

Jawab nahin aap ki shayari ka

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Thanx for sharing

Keep it up

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Depends on how you play it.

system · April 22, 2002, 5:37pm

bohat khoob Azam ji . kya baat hai aap ki. aap to poray shaeir hi lagtay hain. keep it up.

aankhon ki is narm zamee'n pay
aap hi aap ug jatay hain
jin ko Aanso kehtay hain

Capricorn · April 22, 2002, 5:45pm

Liked these the most. Nice work Azam

chand_chehra · April 22, 2002, 6:20pm

bohat khooob

keeeep up the good work

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Maheen2002 · April 22, 2002, 9:54pm

nice piece of poetry u got there azam....

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m_isabah · April 23, 2002, 2:04am

… mashallah .. your style of writing is quite intriguing .. its a pleasure to read something refreshing with a tinge of your own unique sensitivity .. thank you for sharing it with us ..

.. keep it up ..

To see a world in a grain of sand
And heaven in a wild flower
Hold affinity in the palm of your hand
And eternity in an hour

Azam_1 · April 26, 2002, 10:43pm

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well Dhoop sis thanks for liking ma poetry ..

aur sis itnay mashwaray na doo kaheen mujhay job chor kar full time shayar hee na ban na parh jai

ne ways, don’t worry I’ll reply to this adivce too … just waiting for the rite time .. jaab mujhay eik baar phir shairi ka doura paraya ga tou zaroor kuch na kuch likhoonga

thanks again … n take care

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Azam_1 · April 26, 2002, 10:45pm

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shukraan speed master jee ..

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Azam_1 · April 26, 2002, 10:47pm

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thanks Shaam-e-Firaq ..

Is daur mein ehsaas-e-wafa dhoondney walo
Sehrao mein kaha miltey hain deewaro key saaye…

bohot he acha shair hay

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Azam_1 · April 26, 2002, 10:58pm

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bohot bohot shukriyaa Mahee jee

yaar waisay hamari kismat kahan “chhanay” kee .. arz kiya hay

jou dard dil main thay Azam, wo lab pay aa he gaye .. aur mahee jee kehti hain ke, tum tou chah he gaye ..

thanks again Mahee for the comments

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Azam_1 · April 26, 2002, 11:04pm

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so nice of you Ek Shairah .. thanks for liking it again

me just trying ma self as a Shair

u guys always push a confidance into me .. and hope I’ll write something better soon .. Insha Allah

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Azam_1 · April 26, 2002, 11:07pm

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Bohot bohot shukriyaa Sagar jee

waisay yaar ahista bolo … meray boss ne sun liya tou meri chutti hojai gee

once again thanks for the commnets

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Azam_1 · April 26, 2002, 11:08pm

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thanks Capricorn … so nice of you

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Azam_1 · April 26, 2002, 11:09pm

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shukriyaa moon_face jee

I will try to do betta next time .. Insha Allah

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Azam_1 · April 26, 2002, 11:11pm

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thanks for the comments Maheen .. me just trying to pen down some of ma feeling .. thats all !!