Can I have your honest opinion

Can I have your honest opinion about the following wording to put on mehndi invites.. and also can you let me know if i’ve spelt the urdu incorrectly..

                                                             Aay hai mehndi ki raat...

Sajaneh hai dulhan ke haat…
Lekin chahiye aap sub ka saat…

Neice 1, Neice 2 and Neice 3
invite you to the Rasm-e-Hina of

Dulhan_to_be

Inshallah on
a date in August
at
a place in Wales

Awaiting,
Sis-in-law 1, Sister, Sis-in-law 2

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if you're putting in your nieces' name, it would be cute to say, 'their beloved khala/phoopi' or something like that.

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wow. that's really different and sweet !!!

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problem is for two i am phuppo and for one khala... would it look ok if i wrote "their beloved khala/phuppo" with the / between it...

sorry its really late and i can't think what correct term for "/" is!!! and i am a teacher... shame on me!!!!!

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aaaah i know... its called a slash! or did i just make that up...

oh thanks... my brother started with mehndi ki raat, aap sab ke saat... with is cute coming from a punjabi/english speaking man who speaks urdu worse than a gora would!

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no its a slash...ur right. i love the wording...keep it.

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don't put the slash in, it ruins it.

how about...

"Neice 1, Neice 2 and Neice 3
invite you to the Rasm-e-Hina (shouldn't this be Henna, as in mehendi, and not hina, as in a girl's name?) of

their beloved khala and phuppo

Dulhan_to_be etc."

i'm sure your family will know your relation to each girl.

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Thanks SGC... Tried that and I think it looks good.. so another change! My poor bro is gonna regret ever asking for my input!

Lovely :)

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how about putting 'beloved aunt' ?

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Love it.

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i like it

Changed it now to:

Aay hai mehndi ki raat...
Sajaneh hai dulhan ke haat...
Aur chahiye aap sub ka saat...

Neice 1, Neice 2 and Neice 3
invite you to the Rasm-e-Henna of their beloved Phuppo and Khala

Dulhan_to_be

Inshallah on
a date in August
at
a place in Wales

Awaiting,

Sis-in-law 1, Sister, Sis-in-law 2

Final change now and being sent to the card wale.. Yahay, another job ticked off the list!

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It's a 'forward slash' Even Ant and Dec know that much! :p

Ant and Dec reference: Saturday Night Takeaway, 'www.saturdaynighttakeaway forwaad salaash Ant and Dec .com' or something to that effect.

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^ Sounds great!

I'm very ashamed.. but in my defence it was very late at night and brain wasn't working very well... as you can see!

It's ok, Ant and Dec forgive you pet! To make it up though, you must say 'salaash' in a Geordie accent everytime you say it. For atleast a week. Ooo make it 'word of the day' in your classroom. What year group do you teach?

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I teach Year 5 (9-10 year olds) who would absolutely love to hear me say "salaash" for a day. And I bet they wouldn't forget it, no matter how late it was!

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It should be

Saj'ni hai dulhan ke haath