Aik Nazm Jis Ne Meri Aankhon Ko To Namm Ker Dia Tha,
Tunay Kion Apne Galon Pe Sarsoon Mali
Tunay Kion Apni Aankhon Main Choona Bhara
Teri Goya-Ee Kis Dasht Ke Bhaireay Lay Gaye
Bolta Kion Nahin
Bolta Kion Nahin, Tifl-E-Masoom Tuu Kab Se Beemar Hai
Kesa Aazaar Hai
Jis Ne Teri Shabon Se Teri Neend, Teray Dinon Se Khilonay Churaye
Tuu Soya Nahi Hai, Magar Jaagta Kion Nahi
Dekhta Kion Nahi, Teray Baba Ke Balon Main Khujli Hai Aur
Ungliaan Jharr Chuki Hain Hisaab-E-Roz-o-Shab Kertay Huay
Teri Ammaan Ke Reshay-Zada Haath
Khush-Haalian Dhoondtay Dhoodtay,
An-Dhulay Bartanon Main Paray Reh Gaye
Subh-E-Tabeer Ne Shaakh Per Sabz Honay Ki Hasrat Likhi
Aankh Ko Motia De Dia
Dekhta Kion Nahi Aaj Bazaar Main Jashn-E-Aflaas Hai
Sheher Ki Bhook Chori Hui
Aur Khabron Ne Akhbaar Gumm Ker Dia
Log Rotay Rahay
Log Hanstay Rahay<O:p
Teray Bister Pe Ashkon Ki Champa Khili
Aur Tuu Chup Raha
Teray Maathay Pe Muskaan Ka Itrr Chirka Gaya
Aur Tuu Chup Raha
Meri Handia Jali
Mera Chool-Ha Bujha
Meri Jholi Se Harf-E-Dua Girr Gaya
Meray Bachay Tuu Lab Kholta Kion Nahi
Bolta Kion Nahin
Aik Nazm Jis Ne Meri Aankhon Ko To Namm Ker Dia Tha,
I couldn't understand what the whole poem is all about? Sometime it looks funny and sometime it doesn't make sense. Sometime it looks too mature and sometime it's childish. Usage of words is of very low quality and the main character (Meray Bachay) remains mystified. There is no concept that the poet looks weaving the whole thing around. I am very, very sorry, but I did not like this poem at all :(
I couldn't understand what the whole poem is all about? Sometime it looks funny and sometime it doesn't make sense. Sometime it looks too mature and sometime it's childish. Usage of words is of very low quality and the main character (Meray Bachay) remains mystified. There is no concept that the poet looks weaving the whole thing around. I am very, very sorry, but I did not like this poem at all :(
:) Amal Jee.. I know Poetry is best arrangement of best available words.. magar sometimes when U are feeling blue, uss waqt bay-rabt alfaaz bhi dil ko bojhal kerne k leay kaafi hotay hain aur chhupa hua dukh mehsus hojata hai.. aur aankh aansoo baha deti hain.. it is totally dependent on the frame of mind jab aap inn lines ko parho.. ager U are relaxed to U wont feel anything esp.. and vice versa.. umm.. :)
i have said that much but it doesnt reflect k i didnt like ur comment.. it infact is a expression that i felt after reading this poem..
PS: wese i like most about urself is ur straightforwardness and ur sincerity in sharing of ur view point.. Thnx..
it is totally dependent on the frame of mind jab aap inn lines ko parho.. ager U are relaxed to U wont feel anything esp.. and vice versa.. umm.. :)
Ahmer merey bhai, if I write something that you read and it doesn't change your frame of mind, it means that I miserably failed as a writer. A piece must be strong engouh to alter a state of mind, whatever it may be. Poetry does have such powers. If I cannot affect your mind for a few moments, than I won't be considering myself a writer. Simple :) Anyway, pasand apni apni :)
Ahmer merey bhai, if I write something that you read and it doesn't change your frame of mind, it means that I miserably failed as a writer. A piece must be strong engouh to alter a state of mind, whatever it may be. Poetry does have such powers. If I cannot affect your mind for a few moments, than I won't be considering myself a writer. Simple :) Anyway, pasand apni apni :)
very touchy
thanks for sharing Ahmer 
