Bheegi Reit

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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sahil ki Bheegi Reit pur
Kuch deir mein yun hi chalta raha

mera rom rom teri yaad mein
kuch deir yoon hi jalta raha

sahil ki bheegi reit pur
kuch deir chalnay keh baad hi

hawaon keh teiz raftaar mein
mein larkhara kur gir sa gaya

khoi manzil ki talash mein
zameen ka bausaa liya

tugh ko maangnay ki aas mein
sajday mein Rub sey aflus hoa

apnay aanson ki bochaar sey
behti lehroon ko gehra kiya

sahil ki bheegi reit pur

lehron ka shaur jub kuch thum gaya
to rukhsaar si eik chaai thi

din bhur jalnay ki thakaan sey
soraj bhi tha ab dhul gaya

apnay mehboob keh dedaar mein
kuch bugh sa gaya tha woh bhi ab

eik tareeq si ab woh raat thi
bus mein tha aur merey gunah

eik sayah sa aasman tha
jinmein chamaktay hoey taaron ka khwaab

sahil ki bheegi reit pur
leta raha mein kuch deir tuk

shayed keh woh bhi kaheen
nazarein uthaa keh dekh ley

takta raha mein aasman ko deir tuk
isi deedar ki aas mein

Imran

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bheegi reit BHEEGIYAAD jo pasand na aaey how iz it possible
very nice:)

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wah V Nice :k:
thanks for sharing , keep it up :slight_smile:

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Paindu - What comes to your mind?
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good effort! :k:

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lehron ka shaur jub kuch thum gaya
to rukhsaar si eik chaai thi

din bhur jalnay ki thakaan sey
soraj bhi tha ab dhul gaya
acah likha hia keep it up :)

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wow.. beautiful..

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thank u

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achee hai......
nice one......

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ahaa..i was waiting for your feedback...shukriyaa

Congratzzzz IS
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:aq:
kyun???
aisa kya tha???

Congratzzzz IS
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aaiwein

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:aq:

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haha...arey u seem to be popular around here to isiliyeh..

waisay bhi in two days you have responded to most of my comments so baaki ka response diya hai to i guess iska bhi expected thaa...ziada sochiyeh ga naheen is baat mein ziada gehraai naheen

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hmm..............

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:k:

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nice poem on the whole...

it started out with very nice flow but lost its flow and balance the further down you went.

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ab aap ko chacha kahoon yah ghalib kahoon..:) thank u for the possitive feed back..

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thanks for sharing.

in poetic diction, this is one reply to the narrator.

isi sahil kee bheegi reit per,
tumhara naam bhee tha, likha giya,
leikin, tumhey, apney khedshoon mey,
wohh likha nazer na aa sakah.
tumhey nahi malloom,
key bheegee ankhoon ka sahil
kitna taveel hey,
iss per cheltey ansoonon ka gunha
kisi kee la perwahi kee daleel hey
...
key ubb akeiley chelna, aur
tumhara reit pey yoon tarapna,
apney khiyal mey,
meiree yaadoon ko thereiey rekhna,
shayid,
yahee muqader hey tumhara,
shayid,
isi sahil kee bheegi reit per
ger koshish kero tow kabhi,
tum apni 'khoodi' ko paa sako
tow, wohee kafi ho ga
wohee kafi ho ga.

Best,
Dushwari