Shahana G is newbie ,she joined gupshup Feb,2006. Nikami ne Amal ki tarha count tu nahi kia k inohoN ne kitna apna kalam GS ki nazar kia lakin jitna b nzar se guzra bohat acha tha .
Shahana g has selected agian i didn’t count ma bad, of her best pieces for our reading pleasure. All these pieces are very dear to Shahana for different reasons. I guess she will be willing to reply any question about any part of this thread. Readers are welcome to praise, criticise his work ask questions or post views. Anwaar will be more than willing to get back.
Nikami!
Baa’zubaan-e-shaer…
My name is Shahana but people call me Shan as it is my pen name. My academic acheivement is Graduation in Fine Arts with honours. I have also read Philosophy. I am a homoepathic doctor and a poetess as well. Sometimes I paint in my ample time. I have won a gold medal of Presidential scholarship in intermediet. I have been a scholarship holder through out my studies. I got the first position through out Pakistan on the portrait of Quid-e-Azam.
Basicaly I am a painter.I used to draw cartoons and sometimes made illustrations for collage magazine.But I love to read litlature of writers like Ashfaq ahmad Bano Qudsia, A Hameed, Mustansar Husain Tarar, Mushtaq Yousufi, Mumtaz Mufti ectThats all from me. Any querry in your mind regarding anything, you may ask
Here are my five favorit poems.
wrote this poem last year. I am still retouching it as it appears to be having some lapses. All types of C&C is welcome to improve.
Ik peela peela
Kalla tara
Kambda kambda
Darda darda
Raat di haneri khirdki wichon
wekhay payi ra ous chanan da
jehrda mardi jayi jeewan di lao noo
Kho laway ga hasda hasda.
Very well put Shahana Khoobsoorat andaaz-e-bayaan apnaya hey aap ney is nazm meiN.
Tumhain mantar batati hoon
Main Aaj ek raaz say pardah uthati hoon Tumhain mantar batati hoon
Woh mantar jo diloon ko phir say baham jord daita hai Kayi khoye howay lamhoon ko wapis mord deta hai Kaheen apnay hi nakhun say lagay zakhmoon ka marham hai Yeh jeewan ki musafat say thakkay haaron ka zam zam hai Umr ka koi sang-e-meel ho ya pehli manzil ho
*Yeh mantar khol deta hai diloon kay band rastoon ko*
***Traffic bandhay kay saray signal tord deta hai.* Yeh sarbasta mohabbat kay isharay khol deta hai. Uroos-e-nu ki manind yeh sajta sanwarta hai. Yeh phir khoyi mohabbat ki nayi tehreer likhta hai. Rafeeqa zindagi ki ho ya ho saathi zindagi bhar ka Kaho usko keh har zi rouh hai mohtaj mantar ka.
Woh mantar teen lafzoon ka ho ya Woh paanch lafzoon ka Sirf aik baar kehna hai Kabhi duo baar kehna hai Kabhi kehtay hi rehna hai
Mujhay tum say*Tumhi say,* Sirf tum say, aur bas tum say mohabbat hai. Mujhay tum say mohabbat hai Mujhay tum se mohabat hai**
Na janay yeh kesi zehreeli pehchan
Aankhon mein utri
Keh sab chehray
Aahista aahista
Dhundlaye ja rahay hain.
Main in kay andar ki kali raggoun ka
Kala laho
In kay chehroun peh chidhraye sayon ki manind
Bikharta howa dekhti hoon.
Na janay yeh kesi
Zehreeli pehchan.
Shan.
Now 5 ghazalain.
Tha boht taiz nasha deeda sehbayi ka
Ham ko chaska tha magr bada-o-pemayi ka
Bhar gaye zakhm to nakhun say kureda hay inhain
Lutf paya woh teray dast-e-masihayi ka
Raat din jiskay tasawur mein raha kartay hain
Mujh ko bhoola nahi alam woh pazeerayi ka
Kis tarha bhool geya jazb-o-qareen ka alam
Raaz ki baat ka naaz ka hosla afzayi ka
Jis tarha phool say khushbo ko howa karta hai
Mera tujh sai hai wohi nata shanasayi ka
Baat sada thi boht waqt laga kehnay mein
Tujh ko tha khabt boht hashiya aarayi ka.
4:
Tujh sai milnay ka keya sabab hoga
Hadsa koi woh ajab hoga
Mera chup chaap sulagtay rehna
Teri batoon ka hi sabab hoga
Yaad hai jiski faqt parchayin
Woh koi khuwab muztarib hoga
Ham nai har saans luta di jis par
Dost tera woh husn talab hoga
Meray ehsaas ki wamanda nazar
Koi bai naam sa sabab hoga
5:
Lab-e-joo tamana ka sehra bhi peyasa
Haray mosamoon ka khuda bhi peyasa
Woh ab bheek mein dai ga banjar duayen
Muqaddar ka dast-e-ata bhi peyasa
Magar ab kay kesi chaRdhi hain ghatayen
Jo bondain hain peyasi to dariya bhi peyasa
Najanay hain kis behr ki arzo main
Peyasay badan aur saya bhi peyasa
Yeh sab naqsh hasil-e-awargi hain
Nigahain hain banjar to chehra bhi peyasa
Woh ik bai namo nakhal hai zeest meri
]Likh likh chithiyan man na thar da
Hijr di ag naal kaghaz saRd da
Akh wich raRdkai yaad kisay di
Seenay wich dil hokay bharda
Atharo mounh tay leekan ban gaye.
Shoh wich jaway sab kujh ruRd da
Tan pakheha tandour teray bin
Taap ishq da shook kay chaRdhda
Yaad awan teray peyar diyan gullan
Karigar jeewain moti jaRd da.
ashak ankooN maiN haiN abhi taza
abhi taza hia teray payaR ka gham
buN k tasveeR they khaRay dono
waqat-e-rukhsat kamal zabat se hum
tuj se kahnay ko kia raha baqie
bhuj gaya dil bikahaR ga'yee shabnum
abhi bhaRpa hia dil maiN hangama
abhi aa'raz bhi haiN zara num num
zindghi maiN zara jhamailaY haiN
yaad atey ho ab zaRa kam kam Shan.
Main doungay lafzaan day anhay kho wich
Pata nayi ki hamaish labhan
Na teri soorat di chhap labhdi
Na apni halat noun keh sakaan.
Shan.
9
Title: Pata Nayi.....!
Khabar nayi mino hoya ki ae.
Main teno puchhaan
Main sab noun akhaan
Khabar nayi teno hoya ki ae
Main sab toun puchhaan?
Main teno aakhan?
Shan.
10
(Punjabi: Hide and seek)
Main tay toun
Lukkan mitti khed rahay saan
Main ik kandh dai oulay
Aiwain
Luk keh beh gayi saan
Tay toun aakhan tay hanera ban kay
Meno lubh dai
Aap ee gawacha
Shahana Saheba...... khushbash aur Mubarak... Salamat !
Mujhe Punjabi ki khoobsurti par dastaras nahi, magar iss par apka zor hai,
sab se bari khoobi apke yahan...rawaani aur Tasalsul ki hai, aik saaf shafaf
bahta chashma... yeh kaifiyat sab se nikhar kar nazm...Tumhen Mantar Batati hun...main zahir hua hai, bari original aur purasr nazm hai yeh, mujhe lagta hai, aap ki giraft nazmon par ziyada aur bahtar hai, waise sahl e mumtana main apki ghazlen bhi achhi hain, kam lafzon aur choti bahron main baat karne ka saleeqa apke yahan bara fitri hai... aap kab se sher kah rahi hain, aur
punjabi ki tarha mukhtasar nazmain urdu main kyon nahi ? just curious.
magar jo mayassar hai....khoob hai.... cheers !
wowwww shanhana g finally kisi ne ap ko mubarak de yahan tu log bus ...kher kafi acha likhti hain ap..aur derwesh ap kahan chupay huwey thay barey dino baad dekhiey deay sab theek hia na :)
Since my childhood, I’ve been accustomed to read poetry so that either I explain it [tashreeh] with the help of atleast one “Mumaasil” sher or a teacher used to ask about others’ poetry both in class and in exams.
This time, first in my life, I am at a point where I’ve got an oppertnity to question the poet, poetess in this case.
Can I ask to explain your thoughts with Mumaasil Asha’aar? D
kher yeh tau aik jumlaa-e-Mo’tarezaa thaa…
I will start with your first poem:
I’m not a speaker of Punjabi language but I understand a bit of it (if not all, that is Salees Punjaabi:D like Assi Tussi Lassi paasi OR maiN tenu “Dus” ditaa, hun tu menu “veeh” kiouN naheeN ditaa:P)
However, amazingly enough, I was able to understand most of it and woahaa it was marvellous… I mean I could’ve easily translated it into urdu and yet it would’ve satisfied all the ingridients an urdu poem can have if and only if I knew meaning of a very few words… Shahana auntie! can you please tell me the meanings of the following words?
ji shukria Derwaesh ji.ap ne mere liya waqat nikala .ap ne dekha hoga kh main lafzon ki ziada bhoolbuliyon main nahi parti.sada si bat ko sadgi se kh dia,takh pardne or sunane mein asani ho .aj kal to logon ko bat kane ki fursat nahi sunta kon hai.mantar merindagi ka wo sang-e- meel hai jis ne mujhe mur kar dekhane par majboor kar dia hai.aksar husband and wives routine ki life basar karte hain ,mohabat karte hain magar osey izhar ka khobsoorat libas nahi pehnate.bas jiay jate hain...........piyar ke chand lafaz mohabat ki ik nigah kitne dard kitni bemarian door kar deti hai....insan ki ziyda bemariyan os ki roohani miseries hoti hein.im a homoe pathic doctor ,so Iknow it well, kh human body kis trh behave karti hai....to** Derwesh bhai** meri is nazam ka raz yehi hei........baqi raha urdu mein mukhtasar nazam kiyon nhi kahi......ye to aamad hai jab jaisa ehsas hwa kh dia..koi aisa khyal aya to ap ke nam pehle hi kar dati hoon. duaaoon mein yad rakhi ga.................thanx again.
han ji koyal ji visit karne kabohat shukria.log to bas.........................................log achay hi hote hein hm ziyda accepectations bandh lete hain......wo jo kha hei kisi ne no accepectations no sorrows................thats all.
Thanks Anwaar.tum to mere swalon ka jwab gol kar gaiy na magar main hr bat ka jwab dene ki koshish karoon gi..you know panjabi soofia ki zaban hai .main aarfana kalam bare shoq se sunti hoon .ab main meanings batati hon.
1= bakal ..ye bukal hai.it means to wrap a shawl ,as in winter we covered ourselvesin a shawl.
2=ansoo
3=chanan----roshi..........light. day.
4=pat---one part of the door....opend eyes.
5=chak chak.....swalia andaz mein ankhain.. otha .otha kar dekhna.
6=ye kia likha hai ( dhaagay wich)............iska koi matlab nhi
6=roote roote so jana as children do.zid karte howay..........
wainting more feed back from all of you....................
** shan**
Koyal ji....khushbash,
Mohtarema...main 3 mahine se beemar tha, mamooli fever main antibiotic ne iss buri tarha reaction dikhaya ke marte marte bacha hun...khair ab zinda aur tawaana apki mahfil main....chalyee baat Shahana ki ho to ziyada beahtar hai...
Shahana saheba... Classical punjabi aur sufia ka kalaam kiya kahna...magar tazadam punjabi likhne wale isske saath insaaf nahi karrahe hain...aapki himmmat aur khuda ki rahmat hai ke aapka zahan tasasuf ki taraf raghib hai,
a're saheb...urdu ke darweshon ne bhi sufia kalaam kahne ki jisarat ki hai, iss par tafseel se phir kabhi.... iss waqt yeh sher apki nazr:
"KUCH AUR MAANGANA MERE MASHRAB MAIN KUFR HAI LA APNA HAATH DE MERE DAST E SAWAAL PAR !!
Aakhri sawaal...aap kab se likh rahi hain, aur kitaab kabtak aarahi hai, aur aap kisi risale main shaya hoti hain ya nahi...gar nahi to kyun nahi ?
Darwesh ji, main taqreeban 20, 25 saloun say likh rahi houn. Kitab ka irada to hai aur us ki illustration bhi karwa rahi hoon. Roznama Nawa-e-waqt mein chand saal pehlay main nay bachoun kay liye likha tha. Takhleeq magazine mein chapti rahi hain. Aaj kal koi adbi magazine meri nazar mein nahi hai. Woh keya hai keh bheji hi nahi kafi arsay say.
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