Bait Bazi-II 2006

[goodnews]

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@Amal

If comment it related to a sheir, than it should be allowed. Lekin itna time hi kahaN hota hey kisi ke paas. Majaal hey koi mooN sey aek lafz phootey kisi achey sheir ke leey

Aahat thi kisi khaab ki ya dhoka tha nazar ka
ik pal meiN sakoot toot gaya dil ki qabar ka
aaNkhoN ka sehan bheeg gaya yaadoN ki nami sey
kuch bhi to sila nahi mila ashqoN pe jabar ka

“Alif”

Shukriya,Amal Phootey lutf dy giya, Phy was missing;) in my speech.:Dlorl

baqi BB 's style shows dictator ship; khud sab kh kr dosry ko kahu bas bat khtam, Bhai apni bhi dil ki dilmain rakhna sikho. Last shyr from khushkhabri,

Yeh Dastory zban bandi hy kysa teri mehfil main
Yhan tu bat krny ko trsti hy zban meri (Allama Iqbal)
:peshow: Bye

[Bholay_Bisray]

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@goodnews

baqi BB 's style shows dictator ship; khud sab kh kr dosry ko kahu bas bat khtam, Bhai apni bhi dil ki dilmain rakhna sikho. Last shyr from khushkhabri,

sorry!

[Bholay_Bisray]

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yeh sakoon-e jaan ki ghari dhale tau chiragh-e dil hi na bujh chale
wo bala se ho ghum-e ishq ya ghum-e rozgaar koi tau ho
sir-e muqtil-e shub-e aarzoo hai kuch tau ishq ki aabroo
jo nahin aadoo tau Faraz tu keh naseeb-e daar koi tau ho

"Wavo"

[Amal]

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@NikamiJano

ab keoN dhoondhooN wo chashm-e-karam honay day sitam bala-e-sitam
maiN chahta hooN a’ey jazba-e-gham mushkal pe se mushkil aa’jaaey

@darwesh

N-J, Saheba…Cheers,
Apke Sher Ki Tareef Ki Neeyat Ki…Magar, doosre Misre main:
" MUSHKAL PE SE MUSHKIL AAJAYE " samajhne se qasir hun…

Let me try. darwesh sahab asal meiN mushkal pe se mushkil to pehli satr meiN bhi maojood hey: sitam bala-e-sitam ki shakl meiN. Shaier ney doosri satr meiN bhi yehi baat kahi hey lekin alfaaz mukhtalif heiN: mushkal pe se mushkil.

Aur jahaN tak meiN samajah paaya hooN, Shaeir kehta hey ke ab kisi saath deney waaley ya mehar’baani karney waaley ko talaash kya karna, jitna bhi zulm hota hey, honey do. Aur doosri line sey lagta hey shaier bohtaat-e-gham sey tang aa kar gham ko hi mukhaatib karta hey aur kehta hey ke tamaam mushkilaat ko aek hi saath aa janey do, (jo ho ga so deikha jaey ga). According to my little knowledge

By the way, I liked your sheir very much. Concept bohat zabardast hey ke zameen ke neechey koi gud’gudaata hey isi leeye kalyaaN muskuraati hui namoodaar hoti heiN. Kya baat kahi hey darwesh bhra

[Amal]

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Wo terey naseeb ki baarisheiN kisi aur chatt pe baras gaeiN
dil-e-be-khabar meri baat sun, usey bhool ja, usey bhool ja

"Alif"
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[Bholay_Bisray]

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Nice One Amal!

ab aur kya kisi se marasim burha'ein hum
yeh bhi bohut hai, tujhe bhool ja'ein hum
sehra-e zindagi mein koyee dosra na tha
sunte rahe hein aap hi apni sada'ein hum

"MeeM"

[goodnews]

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@Bholay Bisray

sorry!

Koi bat nahi{NP}

[1Nabiha]

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Mai nay is tour say chaha tujhe aksar jaanan
Jaisay mehtaab ko bay ant samandar chahay
Jaisay sooraj ki kiran seep kay dil mai utray
Jaisay khusboo ko hawa rang say hat ker chahay

"hey"

[NikamiJano]

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**hamesha jissey miltey haiN khloos e dil se miltey haiN** **k moti hum muhabbat k sada be-mol detey haiN** **koi damaN chorey toh khushamad hum nahi kaRtey** **miley jo pyar se koi daR dil ka khol laitey haiN** **"noon"**

[darwesh]

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Bhai Amal...Nawazish,

Tashreeh aap ne khoob ki, jab dobaraa dekha to kuch kuch samajh main aagaya, darasl MUSHKAL, ki spelling ne gumraah kiya tha, agar mushkil pe "ZABAR" na laga hota to uljhan na hoti, waise N.J., moti aap dhoond kar layeen hain, aur ab tak khamoosh bhi....Kuch to Kahiye Ke Log Kahte Hain ?
Aik Baat Aur agar donon mUSHKIL PE ZABAR HOTA TO BHI MASLAA NA HOTA, khair Huzoor, hum roz kuch na kuch to seekhte hi hain GS par.

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N-J...saheba, yeh "Noon" apki nazr:

" Naamon Ka Ek Hujoom Sahi Mere Aas Paas
** Dil Sun Ke Aik Naam Dhrakta Zaroor Hai !! "**

Darwesh.

[Amal]

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@darwesh

…waise N.J., moti aap dhoond kar layeen hain, aur ab tak khamoosh bhi…Kuch to Kahiye Ke Log Kahte Hain ?**

NikamiJi ko doctors ney ziada bolney sey manaa kia hey Wo to aap ney suna hi ho ga “Barrey log, barri baateiN”

Doosri baat. Darwesh bhai ye jo aap ney ooper sheir likha hey, kya ye poori ghazal mil sakti hey parrhney ko? I will be highly obliged

**Yehi bohat hey ke dil usko dhoond laaya hey
kisi ke saath sahi wo nazar to aaya hey

“ye”
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[goodnews]

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@Amal

NikamiJi ko doctors ney ziada bolney sey manaa kia hey :D Wo to aap ney suna hi ho ga "Barrey log, barri baateiN" :)

Doosri baat. Darwesh bhai ye jo aap ney ooper sheir likha hey, kya ye poori ghazal mil sakti hey parrhney ko? I will be highly obliged :)

Yehi bohat hey ke dil usko dhoond laaya hey kisi ke saath sahi wo nazar to aaya hey

"ye"

**Nikamy tu ham bhi khub hain magar bolny main nahi,(baqol Ghalib Ishaq ny ghalib nikma kr diya Warna ham bhi admi thy kam ky)wasy* La shaka fi zalik Khubsurat ashar k sath Tashrih zbardast ki hy. Main bhi mutasir hon*.

[darwesh]

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Jigar Amal... Khushbash,

Bhai, Mandarjabala. Sher....Saqi Farooqi (London) Ka Hai, Ek nijji Mahfil main koi teen saal pahle, suna tha, yeh bhi ajeeb baat hai, ke Saqi Nazm Ke Shair Hain, haif...ke puri Ghazal Dastiyaab nahi... Aap Koshish karen shaid mil jaye. Sharminda !

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" Yuon Khayaalon Main Tere Lahje Ki Narmi Aaye
Tu ....Na Bole.... To Teri Aankh Ka... Jadu ......Bole "

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[Amal]

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Thanx for the information darwesh

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Ye nashist kya hai raah mein, terey zauq-e-ishq ko kya huwa
abhi chand kaantey chubhey nahiN ke sab iraadey badal gaye

"Ye"

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[goodnews]

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**ye kis Khalish ne phir is dil me.n aashiyaanaa kiyaa **
phir aaj kis ne suKhan ham se Gaayebaanaa kiyaa

**Ghamy jahaa.N ho, ruKhy yaar ho ke dasty uduu **
salook jis se kiyaa hamane aashiqaanaa kiyaa
(Faiz Ahmed Faiz)

:peshow: “Alif”

[darwesh]

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Good News ji.......Mubarak Ho Kiya Baat Hai.......
Sulook Jisne Kiya Humse Aashiqanaa Kiya.... Subhanallah !

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" Aage Aage Koi Masha'l Si Liye Chalta Raha
Hai Kiya Naam Tha Us Shakhs Ka Poucha Bhi Nahi "

Shaaz Tamkinat.

[goodnews]

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Darwesha Baba,
Khyr mubarik,:halo:
Shyr Shaaz ki trha Shandarhy pr Samajh nahi arha noon sy shyr ho k Ye sy donon sy likhy dyty hain wrna i I sy bra zabrdast Ghalib ka shyr yyad arha hy magar I Alif ho jay ga urdu main.
**ye merii Gazale.n ye merii nazme.n tamaam terii hikaayate.n hai.n **
**ye tazkeerin tery lutf ke hain ye sher terii shikaayate.n hain **
**mai.n sab terii nazr kar rahaa huu.N ye un zamanon kii saatin hain **

**na puuchh us kaa ki vo diivaanaa bahut dino.n kaa ujar chukaa hai **
**vo koh-kan to nahii.n thaa lekin karii chattaano.n se lar chukaa hai **
**vo thak chuka hai aur us kaa teshaa usii ke sine men gar chukaa hai **
(Ahmed Frraz)
:peshow:“Ye”

[darwesh]

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Achha Hai...G-N..ji.... Bohat Aalaa !

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Yahan Kisi Ko BHi Kuch Hasbe Aarzoo Na Milaa **
**Kisi Ko HUm Na Mile Aur Hum Ko Tu Na Mila !!

Ahmad Faraz

[goodnews]

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Zabardast Darwesh ji,
Old is always Gold, Aik purana magar hassin o shirarti shyr haziry khidmat hy
Inkar ki si lazat iqrar main khan
Brhta hy shoq Ghalib on ki nahi nahi sy
:peshow: ye

[darwesh]

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" Ye Darmiyaan Se Uthde Hijaab Ka Pardah
** Bala Se Teri Agar Hum Rahe, Rahe Na Rahe "**

Shah Naseer