another poem by me..

ghazal_kisi_ke · August 5, 2004, 6:53am

agar tumhare naye rah k kese mor per tumehin koe aisa bay-asra insaaan milay jo rah pay kahra kese sehra k shajar k trha kare dohp mein tap raha ho jiskay anso pohnchnay wala koi na ho jiske baaton ko koi yaqeen na kar raha ho jo ro ro kar insaaf ke behk maang raha ho jo sub kuch haar k kese k intazar kar raha ho jo mohabbat k do lafzon k liye tars raha ho to aik pal kahray ho kar itna souchna k tum bilkul aisay he aik zinda jism ko marnay chor ayay ho.. !

By: ME

koiDost · August 5, 2004, 8:15am

Bahut Khoob Ghazal Jee :k: :k:

Thanx for sharing

Pramod · August 5, 2004, 2:10pm

achhi nazm hai...apne dil kii jazbaatoN ko bahot khub lafzoN meiN sajaaya hai aapne...

aap bhale hi "Ghazal kisi ke" hoN magar ye nazm aap kii hai...dheroN daad kubul kijiye.....

Pramod

ayman · August 5, 2004, 10:14pm

pramod .. very well said .. :k:

ghazli .. simply amazing .. don`t know what else to say .. definately touches a nerve .. ..

cuteepie · August 6, 2004, 5:45am

beautiful :k:

ghazal_kisi_ke · August 6, 2004, 6:28am

koidost thankewwww

Pramod wowiee:O u replied hehe.. thankew so much for ur words.. meanz a lott a lott to me:-) .. mein kese k ghazal nahi hoonrotfl … khair thanx once agiain:flower1:

aymooo thankeww mere jaan:hug:

cutepieee thankeww sweetttyyy:kiss:

_TaNhAyAaN · August 6, 2004, 8:27am

it’s beautiful dhadhal..

blushing_vision · August 6, 2004, 9:24am

bohat khoob :k:

HeArT_HaCKeR · August 6, 2004, 4:33pm

Wow… its beautiful ghazalloo :biggthumb

ghazal_kisi_ke · August 7, 2004, 1:55am

tano tapii thankew thankewww:hug: ..

Blushing_Vision thanx a lot ..

Heartuuu thanx a lottt yaara ..

Ps: i just read it again and there was a mistake.. so i’m gona edit it.. sorry about that

agar tumhare naye rah k
kese mor per
tumehin koe aisa bay-asra insaaan milay
jo rah pay kahra
kese sehra k shajar k trha
kare dohp mein tap raha ho
jiskay anso pohnchnay wala koi na ho
jiske baaton ko koi yaqeen na kar raha ho
jo ro ro kar insaaf ke behk maang raha ho
jo sub kuch haar k kese k intazar kar raha ho
jo mohabbat k do lafzon k liye tars raha ho
to
aik pal kahray ho kar
itna souchna k tum bilkul
aisay he aik zinda jism
ko marnay chor ayay ho.. !

Shikra · August 7, 2004, 2:54pm

Beautiful.

Seedha_Saada · August 7, 2004, 5:44pm

Dard bhee hai is mein,
aur us dard ke,
na sahne kee peera bhee..
kisee kee jafakashee kee uljhan bhee…
aur kuch na kar paane ka
ik ihsaas bhee hai is mein!

acha likhtee ho :k:

ghazal_kisi_ke · August 8, 2004, 2:06am

sohail thankewww

** Seedha Saada** wowieee .. thats impressive:k: .. is it ur`s? ..very nice ..
and thanx for liking ..

Seedha_Saada · August 8, 2004, 7:28am

Yeh mein ne hee likha tha in appreciation of your poem
Thanks.

ghazal_kisi_ke · August 11, 2004, 3:31am

awww thankewwww:blush: .. and yeah wat u wrote was good… r u gona complete it or is it already?

my pleasure:D

Shaheed-e-Arzoo · August 11, 2004, 4:53am

reminds me of Himayat Ali Shair’s couplet:

iss jahaN maiN tou apna saya bhi
roshni ho tou sath chalta hai :k:

very nice ghazal, ghazal

ghazal_kisi_ke · August 11, 2004, 9:31pm

^^ thankeww jee:-) .. btw thats a poem not a ghazal:-p

Shaheed-e-Arzoo · August 12, 2004, 4:55am

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by ghazal kisi ke: *
^^ thankeww jee:-) .. btw thats a poem not a ghazal:-p
[/QUOTE]
Poem means both ghazal and nazam :p

I stand corrected; it is not a ghazal as it does not follow usool-ul-qafiya, wazan, radeef etc. but indeed it is a poem that is, Nazam :P

Pyara_sa_doost · August 12, 2004, 9:43am

gr8 stuff bohat kohb :)

ta ta

Azad · August 12, 2004, 10:37am

hummm