Hum Hain ,X_Communist . Maheen2002
bohat shukria :)
jitnee tahreef ki jaaye kam hai.
be_had passand aayi
shukriya
nice one pEr........thansk 4 sharing
poora shair hone ki koshish jari hai 
some day!!!
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*Originally posted by NikamiJano: *
nice one pEr........thansk 4 sharing
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Shukar hai aap kee bhee nazar bil-aakhir par hee gayee meree poem par:) Thank you.
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*Originally posted by MAREEZ_E_ISHQ: *
jitnee tahreef ki jaaye kam hai.
be_had passand aayi
shukriya
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Buhat shukriya.
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*Originally posted by Completely Incomplete: *
wow..beautiful!!
waise...why is it important?? like in the topic place...
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Ask moderator who has placed this flag on my post. waise this flag assures the topic remains on the top. Thanks for appreciation my dear.
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bohat ki achi kawish hai kaki-P…
keep it up
Rab Rakha
DerVaisH
Thank you Dervasih.
aa mein tujhe bataoon
ke dil kee lakeerein
haathon kee lakeeron se
ulajhne lagein
to kia hota hai
Good one :k: nice add for failed lovers
wah
bohat khub perf....jawab naheee app bohat uumda likhtey hain wahhhh
Thanks for appreciation. I need to correct you here. Its not for failed lovers but failed seekers in love. Love already is there in abundance causing such pain to swallow you!
Re: wah
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*Originally posted by MARRIED NY: *
bohat khub perf....jawab naheee app bohat uumda likhtey hain wahhhh
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Buhat shukriya Married NY :)
For those who like to read a poem in prose!
Beloved, who is the beginning and an end for a lover, is the one whose being together is a source of bliss. World seems to be so much beautiful only when your beloved is around and so much meaningless otherwise! The tone of this poem is set in the tragedy of separation. This tragedy turns to be still more anguishing when one is pressed to shift the emotional attachments of accepting some one else. The house of hope is then set on fire, mindlessly burning and churning all the manifestations of love one has otherwise held so dear! The heart gets suffocated!
Its next to impossible to explain the agonizing cries of soul and some times Milton may fail to express the pain of Shelley’s love."Aa mein tujhe dikhaoon" is that pain of not expressing yet saying it subtely! It’s the loving heart that can feel this pain.
Here is an addition of a new verse to the original above:-
Aa mein tujhe dikhaoon
Yeh hijr kee raat jesee aankhein
Chand jis ke aasmaan mein ubhre
Chandinee kaheen dikhaee na de
To kia hota hai!
Beautiful poem,ty for sharing.i look forward to more like that.
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*Originally posted by Perfectionist: *
For those who like to read a poem in prose!
Beloved, who is the beginning and an end for a lover, is the one whose being together is a source of bliss. World seems to be so much beautiful only when your beloved is around and so much meaningless otherwise! The tone of this poem is set in the tragedy of separation. This tragedy turns to be still more anguishing when one is pressed to shift the emotional attachments of accepting some one else. The house of hope is then set on fire, mindlessly burning and churning all the manifestations of love one has otherwise held so dear! The heart gets suffocated!
Its next to impossible to explain the agonizing cries of soul and some times Milton may fail to express the pain of Shelley’s love."Aa mein tujhe dikhaoon" is that pain of not expressing yet saying it subtely! It’s the loving heart that can feel this pain.
Here is an addition of a new verse to the original above:-
Aa mein tujhe dikhaoon
Yeh hijr kee raat jesee aankhein
Chand jis ke aasmaan mein ubhre
Chandinee kaheen dikhaee na de
To kia hota hai!
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im simply speechless at the depth of feelings you expressed .....
great addition!!!
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*Originally posted by Empress: *
Beautiful poem,ty for sharing.i look forward to more like that.
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Thank you Empress :)
Thank you so much kashish for your strong words of appreciation 
bhaTyaarkhaana
Folks, unthinking praise is cheap and worthless. Praise sparingly so it's worth something. I read this piece of work, which is supposedly poetry. It is trite where it is not bay-tuka.
For example: aankhoN say khwaab nonchnay ka kya baytuka isti'aara hai bhai? Aur ye rooh, jism aur woh teesri cheez ki zanjeer...is meiN kya baat hui?
na zabaan ki lataafat hai, na khayaal ki gehraai hai. FilmoN meiN bhi nahiN chalay ga kyooNke behr vaghairah ki bandish say aazaad hai.
I'd have quitely ignored this sub-standard piece of work. But two pages of unthinking praise is what makes my blood boil.
-R
*Resurrected : * there is something called constructive criticism, if you have heard of it??.....
These two pages of praises are done by people who are well read in poetry and they are trying to encourage someone who is trying to improve his poetry .... everything needs a lille bit practice!
criticism is good if its healthy and if it helps out someone to improve his work!!