Zindagi phir na kisi morr par ley aey mujhey...

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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RaaheiN chunney ke masail meiN uljhaey mujhey
zindagi phir na kisi morr par ley aey mujhey

thakan ney maar dia mujh ko kaheiN rastey meiN
gubaar-e-raah sey khe do ke bhool jaaey mujhey

meri shikast ke parcham sey sab sabaq seeikheiN
merey mazaar ki chatt par koi lehraaey mujhey

meiN ik ujrra huwa khandar hooN manaadi kar do
koi apney khuaab ka maskan nahi banaey mujhey

ashq jorr ke beittheiN heiN mera chattkha wajood
mujhey giraana hey to aa ke koi haNsaey mujhey

mujhey tajarboN ney bakhshey heiN idraak sabhi
koi daleel nai mantaq nahi samjhaaey mujhey

meiN raah-guzar meiN koi bikhri hui dhool nahi
ke badal badal ke simteiN hawaa urraey mujhey

sada-e-zeest sey keh do ke ab khamosh rahey
siwaay ajal ke ab koi nahi bulaaey mujhey! **

By: Amal

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Re: Zindagi phir na kisi morr par ley aey mujhey...

*sada-e-zeest sey keh do ke ab khamosh rahey
siwaay ajal ke ab koi nahi bulaaey mujhey! *

Aymal wesay tu sari gazla he khubsurat hia but this sher is sooo touchy and beautiful i guess aik aur nick banati aur us ka sig :(

How do you control a man?
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Re: Zindagi phir na kisi morr par ley aey mujhey...

As usual , Beautiful ! and very to touchy...., thanks for sharing Amal!

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Re: Zindagi phir na kisi morr par ley aey mujhey...

:(

take this one,

thakan ney maar dia mujh ko kaheiN rastey meiN
gubaar-e-raah sey khe do ke bhool jaaey mujhey

How do you control a man?
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Re: Zindagi phir na kisi morr par ley aey mujhey...

Thanx for the appreciation guys :~)

Get It !!
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Re: Zindagi phir na kisi morr par ley aey mujhey...

RaaheiN chunney ke masail meiN uljhaey mujhey
zindagi phir na kisi morr par ley aey mujhey
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thakan ney maar dia mujh ko kaheiN rastey meiN
gubaar-e-raah sey khe do ke bhool jaaey mujhey

**ashq jorr ke beittheiN heiN mera chattkha wajood
mujhey giraana hey to aa ke koi haNsaey mujhey

mujhey tajarboN ney bakhshey heiN idraak sabhi
koi daleel nai mantaq nahi samjhaaey mujhe**

Its Very Very Impressive.......
Bohat Umda Amal....
waisay tu tammam Ashar he Baymisaal hain..........magarmujhay ye zayada pasand ayy...
keep sharing...:)

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Re: Zindagi phir na kisi morr par ley aey mujhey…

wahhhhhhhhhhhh wahhhhhhhhhhh*** !! mazah agaya! especially the one in quote .. **BEAUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUTIFUL!!

**siwaaye aajkal kay abb koi nahee bulaaey mujhay :clap:

VERY DEEP Amal!

ps. I would like to know whats the meaning behind this .. any particular thing?

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Re: Zindagi phir na kisi morr par ley aey mujhey…

This sums up the theme of the ghazal — which is disenchantment. And that’s what, I understand, a maqta should do. It should bring an end to the whole piece with highlighting the whole concept in strongest possible manner.

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very nice, thank you for sharing.

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[quote]
ashq jorr ke beittheiN heiN mera chattkha wajood
mujhey giraana hey to aa ke koi haNsaey mujhey
[/quote]

oh mannnn! zabardast! buhut khub amal bhai :(

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Re: Zindagi phir na kisi morr par ley aey mujhey...

Agar Urdu rasmulkhat main bhi post ho jaye tu, paRhnay ka lutf dobala ho jaye.

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A wondreful use of metaphors:k:

best poem of the month in sho’ara-e-gupshup :flower1:

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Beautiful :k:

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etne sad ghazl :( leken boht ache he :(

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very well done amal. kaya baat hai :k:

just a suggestion…

the word “nahin” in misra-e-saani of the 4th couplet doesn’t seem fit. if u change it with “na”, i think it will work better.

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hmmm

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Hamasha ke taraha zabardast... Khush rahoo

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its really very nice and touchy :). bohot khoobsoorat hai. :k:

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thakan ney maar dia mujh ko kaheiN rastey meiN
gubaar-e-raah sey khe do ke bhool jaaey mujhey
:hinna: Kia bat hy:k:

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Re: Zindagi phir na kisi morr par ley aey mujhey...

I had to read it again to get into the metaphorical thought process you have used in the poem... pehlaY jaldi maiN sarsari saa paRhaa thaa.... aur reply kar diyaa thaa.... it was amazing to read it again....

LafzoN kee khushbu teraY kalaam saY aaye mujhaY :)

for me, cream of your poem is the following sher.. I know maqta is good but for some reason, I found this one more striking and beautifully sad :)

meri shikast ke parcham sey sab sabaq seeikheiN
merey mazaar ki chatt par koi lehraaey mujhey