you were the smile on my lips

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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Along the road, you were my companion
Seeking the path, you were my guide

No matter to whom I spoke, it was you who answered
When Sun called Moon to Sky, it was you who shined

In the Night of aloneness, you
were my comforter

When I laughed, you were the smile on my lips
When I cried, you were the tears on my face

When I wrote, you were the verse
When I sang, you were the song

Rarely did my heart desire another lover
Then when it did, you came to me in the other.

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Re: you were the smile on my lips

I can replace "WERE" with "ARE" And its good :@:

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Re: you were the smile on my lips

Go ahead :k:

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Re: you were the smile on my lips

Naah I will not do that it will kill the beauty of poem :p

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Re: you were the smile on my lips

dhookaa :emmy:

Removing the last 2 lines if you replace ‘were’ with ‘are’ the poem is a lot more beautiful :blush:

Waise bhi poem ki last 2 lines nai pasand mujhe:snooty:

Baaqi poem is :lajawab:

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Re: you were the smile on my lips

Angraizi :bummer: