Yaadgaar-e-Mohabat

Aaina_Dar · March 9, 2006, 1:07am

Dil chuppane ki jisay tadbeer kare
Aankh oss raaz ki tasheer kare

Jis ki Padash mein huyi Mahtoob
Dil-e-wehshi wahi Taqseer kare

Ghaam to milte hein Ek tasalsal se
Sukh ka mosaam bari takheer kare

Woh mere dil ka sheher chore jata hai
Kon lamhoon ko ab zanjeer kare

Tuttay khawaboon ki kircheeyan hein “Aaina”
Kon chunn ker inheen Tabeer kare

Aaina_Dar · March 9, 2006, 1:09am

Re: Yaadgaar-e-Mohabat

:):):)

HeArT_HaCKeR · March 9, 2006, 8:46am

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*Ghaam to milte hein Ek tasalsal se
Sukh ka mosaam bari takheer kare

Woh mere dil ka sheher chore jata hai
Kon lamhoon ko ab zanjeer kare

Tuttay khawaboon ki kircheeyan hein “Aaina”
Kon chunn ker inheen Tabeer kare*

boht khoob… keep it up :k:

Amal · March 9, 2006, 11:38am

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Welcome to GS Aaina Dar … Your ghazal is simply beautiful. You have impressed us straight away Keep sharing your work with us…happy posting

Aaina_Dar · March 9, 2006, 12:25pm

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thnx heart hacker n Amal :).........app jesay achay zhooq n khobsurat nazar wale meri poetry partay rahy to mera hosla be barta rahy ga n mein apni poetry yahan post kerti rahoon gi..................thnx again........Aaina

Althea · March 9, 2006, 5:36pm

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Simple yet speakes volumes! … its a real talent to write like that.
lovely, will look forward to reading more of your work.

Zamil · March 10, 2006, 1:02am

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"Ghaam to milte hein Ek tasalsal se
Sukh ka mosaam bari takheer kare "
Its a gem. It exposes ur potential and also force me 2 give u a suggestion (if u don't mind), please give a little more concentration on "wazan" of ur ash'aar. It will help us 2 have alot of gems like this one and ofcourse we will b glad 2 have them.
Aap k ash'aar k mazameen bataate hai k aap aage jayen gi InshaAllah.

Aaina_Dar · March 10, 2006, 12:43pm

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Bohat Sukriya Althea n Zamil app k onn khubsorat ilfaz ka jo app donoo ne meri Shayari k liye likhay:) ................Not at all zamil meine mind nahi kia ...koi poetry ko itna deeply samjnay wala meri "Islah" kerna chahay to bhala mein mind kiyon karoon gi....Suchi baat to ye hai Zamil k abi meri poetry n mera Dard dono taza taza hein...Ab teh darr teh iss dard se shanasaiii hoti rahy gi to mere lafzoon mein be nikhaar ahta rahy ga:)..i hope app meri baat samjh gaye hoon gaay.................thnx again.......Aaina