Yaad kee dar gha<O =“”>
Pani num in chulmun ankhoon mey<O =“”>
Kae saloon kee talash<O =“”>
Ehsas ka lumha<O =“”>
chokath per kahee meiree<O =“”>
iss keye naam ke qibah<O =“”>
asr aisa<O =“”>
nazar kee junmbish<O =“”>
jam ho jaisey<O =“”>
bar ha ka showk<O =“”>
bar ha ka saroor<O =“”>
intiha<O =“”>
taweel<O =“”>
taluk <O =“”>
girift<O =“”>
kaho<O =“”>
silsila wohee hey, phir sey<O =“”>
kurbat ka
tumharye “han sunnay ka”
zindagi,
ubb nahee,
ubb nahee…
aur meirey
“Nahee kheney ka”!
Dushwari
Re: Yaad kee dar gha
I wish you would have seen it once after posting. 
Re: Yaad kee dar gha
i did, Amal .
is ka METER AISA HEE HEY
LAFZ BA LAFZ
LINE BY LINE
Re: Yaad kee dar gha
Yaad kee dar gha
Pani num in chulmun ankhoon mey
Kae saloon kee talash
Ehsas ka lumha
chokath per kahee meiree
iss keye naam ke qibah
asr aisa
nazar kee junmbish
jam ho jaisey
bar ha ka showk
bar ha ka saroor
intiha
taweel
taluk **
**girift
kaho
silsila wohee hey, phir sey
kurbat ka
tumharye "han sunnay ka"
zindagi, **
*ubb nahee, *
**ubb nahee...
*aur meirey *
"Nahee kheney ka"!
Dushwari.
I think now it's better.......:D
Re: Yaad kee dar gha
I see, tabhi kuch ghalat-fehmi hui thi…very strange format. Isn’t it?
Muslim girl, good job 
k:
Re: Yaad kee dar gha
buhat pyari nazam dushwari
Re: Yaad kee dar gha
[quote=Dushwari]
Yaad kee dar gha
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Pani num in chulmun ankhoon mey
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Kae saloon kee talash
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Ehsas ka lumha
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chokath per kahee meiree
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iss keye naam ke qibah
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asr aisa
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nazar kee junmbish
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jam ho jaisey
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bar ha ka showk
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bar ha ka saroor
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intiha
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taweel
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taluk
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girift
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kaho
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silsila wohee hey, phir sey
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kurbat ka
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tumharye "han sunnay ka"
zindagi,
ubb nahee,
ubb nahee...
aur meirey
"Nahee kheney ka"!
Dushwari
[quote=lutfullah urf Abdullateef Qadri]
Wallah! Dushwari ji ne dushwari ka sahih namoona pesh kiya hai! Kya Unwaan hai! Yaad ki dargha! Yeh lafz 'dargha' Urdu ka hai? Saare farhang aur lughaat palat li kaheen is ko chhapa naheen paya! Kya Dushwari ji ko is lafz se 'dargaah' murad thi?
Aur aaiye baaqi nazm ko dekhein! Janab mujhe to yeh koi 'Basic' ya kuchh isi tarah ki Computer Programming Language par likhi hui koi programmed command sequence nazar aaya! Urdu mein kahi hui koi nazm naheen! Allah humaare Urdu zubaan ka nigehbaan rahey! Aameen! Summa Aameen! Yahi silsila aage chala to Urdu gum ho jaayegi duniya sey aur yeh GupShup Forum Paagalon ki majlis ban jaaey gi! Naauzu Billahi Min Zaalik!
Re: Yaad kee dar gha
Baqaul Naakhuda e Sukhan Hazarat Meer Taqi Meer:-
(Dushwari ki is bheji hui nazm? ko dekhne ke baad )
Dil ki baat kahi naheen jaati, chupke rahna jaana hai!
*Haal agar hai aisaa hi to, jee sey jaanaa jaana hai! *
Re: Yaad kee dar gha
thanks, folks
Re: Yaad kee dar gha
no, in fact you did imprve it
and it sets the tone a lot better, as well.
thanks!
Yaad kee dar gha Pani num in chulmun ankhoon mey Kae saloon kee talash Ehsas ka lumha chokath per kahee meiree iss keye naam ke qibah asr aisa nazar kee junmbish jam ho jaisey bar ha ka showk bar ha ka saroor intiha taweel taluk ** **girift kaho silsila wohee hey, phir sey kurbat ka tumharye "han sunnay ka" zindagi, ** *ubb nahee, * **ubb nahee... *aur meirey *
"Nahee kheney ka"!
Dushwari.
I think now it's better.......:D