Nazaarey dhoop nikalnay sey toottey hein yaa Muhabbat ki shidat sey:confused: ya kuch aur bayaaN hay
In third verse
Sitaarey tootney sey yahaan aapki kyaa muraad hay?
Wesey tou buhat achaa khayaal hay phir bhi why u use this time ‘‘Toot jaatey hein’’
last sheir tou merey pe sahi fit hota hay:D
Shiddat ka to meiN ney zikr hi nahi kia, mera khayaal hey baat dhoop ki hi ho rahi hey
‘‘Toot jaatey hein’’ is radeef. So isey to aana hi hey. Aur sitaaroN ka tootna aek istilaah hey jo hamaarey haaN aam tor par istimaal hoti hey. Raat ki taareeki meiN shaab-e-saqib ki waja sey baaz aoqaat hum roshni ki aek lakeer si zameen ki simt meiN bhaagtey huwey deikhtey heiN, isi amal ko sitaaroN ke tootney sey mansoob kar dia gaya hey. Dar-haqeeqat na to koi sitaara toot’ta hey aur na hi subha koi malba milta hey. The basic idea behind the sheir is that some people emotionally collapse siltently from inside but they look perfect from outside.
subha deikho kaheiN malba nahi milta magar sach hey
“…they look perfect from outside”
Match colors in each line: kai chup chaap andhrey meiN sitaarey toot jaatey heiN
“…some people emotionally collapse silently from inside.”
Makes sense? By the way, did you mention if you liked the ghazal or not
Changa ji assi kuch hor ey samjhey si:bummer: sheir da matlab,
Toot jaatey hein’’ i know its Radeef:halo: i meant keh why u did’t use …hmmm for example kinarey doob jaatey hein …or sahaarey chooht jaatey hein…iss style ki baat kar rahii thi na keh kuch aur… but its looks like more elegent:~)
well thank you samjhaanay ka baaz oqaat halki phulki cheez deir say palay paarti hay:-d
Mein bhooli nahi thii Tareef karna lekin samjhnay kay baad ki tareef zeyada maaneh rakhti hay naa? i like this piece:-) Thanks for sharing, you are the best Poet makhan nahin laga rahi, you know me:-d
subha dekho to mulba hi nahi milta.........................kiya khyal hai.beautiful.heart touching,poori gazal feelings se barpoor hai.nice very nice. im going to read it again n again............beautiful.:)
suno har rut meiN saahil par ttheharna theek nahi hota kabhi toofaaN ke aaney par kinaarey toot jaatey heiN
bohat sey log aesey heiN jo khud apney pe bhaari heiN yehi ik bojh utthaaney meiN bechaarey toot jaatey heiN
By: Amal
Bohat khoob Amal jee....ap bhi bohat khubsorat likhtay hein....ap ki poetry main jahan kisi dukh ki jhalak hai wahan wahan kuch masoomiyat bhi nazar ahti hai jo k parhtay time bohat bhali lagti hai........again zaberdast Amal jee...........................................................................................Aaina
aap ki tau har gazal hi bahot achchi hoti hai.......jab bhi paroo.....woh aur bhi achchi lagti hai.......hamesha ki trahn aapki yeh ghazal bhi bahot khoobsurat hai......and i like most........
suno har rut meiN saahil par ttheharna theek nahi hota
kabhi toofaaN ke aaney par kinaarey toot jaatey heiN
bohat sey log aesey heiN jo khud apney pe bhaari heiN
yehi ik bojh utthaaney meiN bechaarey toot jaatey heiN
