Eik dost ki farmaish pe apni nazm pehli baar post karney ki jasarat kar rahi hoon(dartey dartey ) Ab pata naheen gandey tamater parhtey hain ya… waisey gandhey andey our tamatroon ki sorat mein kam-az-kam aadha hissadar ban’ney ka wada ley liya he :)…
meri yeh nazm mery dostooN key naam
bardasht kijiye …
**~Hum khud sey bichhrehy howey loog haiN
kissi guzrey samey ki dhool mein khud ko gunwa baithey haiN
sadiyooN sey apney muntazir haiN
khud sey milney ki khwahish
waqt ki taiz nabzooN ney madham kar di
khud ko paney ki tag-o-dao mein
zindgi ka naqsha our apna zaad-e-rah
sab kissi ehd-e-guzishta meiN hamarey hath sey chhot geya
aankhoon ki nami, gism ki girti hoyi dewaar
zindgi ki kam hoti hoyi laoo
ehsaas delatey haiN keh ab waqt-e-rukhsat he
hamarey injaam pe mat rona
our ab rona bhi kaisa…
khud sey bichhrhey howey to hameen sadiyaan hoeeN
ab to sirf raakh matti mein milna chahti he
our suno
hamari khaak mein apney qeemti aansoon ko mat rolna… **
bahut acchii nazm hai Rameesha :) excellent! lekin aap se itni ranjeeda o sanjeeda nazm ki tawwaqu' nahin thi...aap tau hamesha zindagi ko nazr-e-khair se dekhtii hain...!
aur aik aur baat: yeh nazm kaafii falsafana hai--goya aap ne aql ko ishq pe tarjee' dee hai...:)
excellent, meaningful and thought-provoking--yet delicate :)
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*Originally posted by Rameesha: *
Eik dost ki farmaish pe apni nazm pehli baar post karney ki jasarat kar rahi hoon(dartey dartey ) Ab pata naheen gandey tamater parhtey hain ya... waisey gandhey andey our tamatroon ki sorat mein kam-az-kam aadha hissadar ban'ney ka wada ley liya he :)...
meri yeh nazm mery dostooN key naam
bardasht kijiye ....
**~Hum khud sey bichhrehy howey loog haiN
kissi guzrey samey ki dhool mein khud ko gunwa baithey haiN
sadiyooN sey apney muntazir haiN
khud sey milney ki khwahish
waqt ki taiz nabzooN ney madham kar di
khud ko paney ki tag-o-dao mein
zindgi ka naqsha our apna zaad-e-rah
sab kissi ehd-e-guzishta meiN hamarey hath sey chhot geya
aankhoon ki nami, gism ki girti hoyi dewaar
zindgi ki kam hoti hoyi laoo
ehsaas delatey haiN keh ab waqt-e-rukhsat he
hamarey injaam pe mat rona
our ab rona bhi kaisa....
khud sey bichhrhey howey to hameen sadiyaan hoeeN
ab to sirf raakh matti mein milna chahti he
our suno
hamari khaak mein apney qeemti aansoon ko mat rolna... **
Rameesh
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bohat khoob rameesha g sad one.......ab ap k leay bardasht karna he parey ghi hum dost tu nahi hia ap k phir be bardasht kartey hai aur tammater aj kal bohat mahngay hia....is se behter hai ap ki nazam bardasht..:)
mazak k part really nice and sad.......thanks 4 sharin..haan aur dosri nazam kab a rehi hia.....
NJ Shuker he aap key shehar mein tammater mehngey ho gaye
hamari liye aap ney bardasht kar li, ab is sey barhi baat keya ho sakti he, bardsht our housla-afzai ka behad shukria
jahan tak baat dosri ki he to jab koyi phir dhakka lagaye ga
Amal jee aap key ilfaaz hamarey liye sanad rahey … buhat mehrbani … kahan chhupi hoyi thi … kochh raaz rahey to achha he na
Gul itni tareef pe kaheen jaan hi nah hawa ho jaye, kuriye hath hola rakh … buhat nawazish (our itna pyara phool hamarey liye ..awww thanko )
**SunnyBoy, *** Vivacious *, HeArT HaCKeR, CC, Nezlo & nikki siso buhat buhat nawazish apkey qeemti waqt our ilfaaz ka
… hufff logoo i’m speechless…
aap bhi Dil Thaam kay baethiyay 