TERI KAMI

immu · October 23, 2007, 5:08pm

Phir Chand khila, phir Rat thami, phir Dil ne kaha, hai teri kami

Phir yad k jhonkay mehak gaey, phir pagal arman behk gaey
Phir Jannat si lagti hai Zameen, phir Dil ne kaha, hai teri kami

Phir guzre lamhoon ki batain, phir jagi jagi si raatain
Phir thaher gai palkoon pe nami, phir Dil ne kaha, hai teri kami

Phir Chand khila, phir Rat thami, phir Dil ne kaha, hai teri kami

Jaan_Lewaa · October 24, 2007, 3:15am

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:k:

redidentity · October 24, 2007, 4:43am

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WoW.. superb flow.. buhat achi hai jee..

immu · October 24, 2007, 5:31pm

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thanks for appreciation

Shab-e-Hijar · October 25, 2007, 4:03am

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wah immu very nice :k:

being_lonely · October 25, 2007, 4:03am

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Phir chand khila phir rat thami!
Phir dil ne kaha hai teri kami!

Phir yad k jhonke mehk gye!
phir pagal arman behk gye!

phir janat si lgti hai zameeen!
phir dil ne kaha hai teri kami!

phir guzre lamhon ki batain!
phir jagi jagi si ratain!

phir thehr gyi palkon pe nami!
phir dil ne kaha hai teri kami!!

Mere Bhai Bachon wale kaam chor do apni poetry share karo warna intikhaab mein jaao !
n aap log bhi aao dekha na taao bas nice gud ki line laga daitay hain bina jaanch kiye !

Mods please move this thread thanks

Azad · October 28, 2007, 3:41pm

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khoob, lines aghar chotti hotien to bohut khoob ho :k:

immu · November 3, 2007, 9:57am

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Ok for comments and criticizen also

Thanks for all

NikamiJano · November 3, 2007, 8:36pm

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^ immu ap intkhaab main post kia kaRo ye wo jaga hai jahaN log apni khud ki likhi huwie post kaRtey wesay hai bohat achi :)

Sheal · November 3, 2007, 9:12pm

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very nice immu :k:

immu · November 4, 2007, 10:39am

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thanks for all