**Suno jana!
Ye sachi baat bhe sun lo,
Mere sochoN k aangan main tumhari yaad k jugno bouhat be-jan lagty haiN
Woh tum pe nazm ka likhan, tumhay ik bazm ka likhna
Woh apni azm ka likhna,
Mujhay ab bore karty haiN..
Masail k kae Bachy mere sochoN k aangan main, bouhat he shoor karty hain
Tumhay taize se jan-e-jan bulata jar aha hooN main…
Kae barsooN se mere maaN ne jo ik khaab daikha thaa
Mujhay woh khaab lana hai.
Mere baba k kandhoN se hamary bhoojh ka thaila abhi girne he wala hai
Mujhay woh bhe uthana hai
main maaN ke khaab ke khatir, nae ik job ke khatir
Subah ghar se nikalta hooN tu sara din pigalta hooN
Na tum rehti ho sochoN main, na tera aks rehta hai
yahaN per tu masail ka hameesha raqs rehta hai
jissay hum dhoop kehty haiN yahaN woh sakhs rehta hai
mujhay woh sakhs jaan-e-jaN bouhat he tang karta hai
main tum kho yaad karta hooN, woh mujh se jang karta hai
wahi ik sakhs jaan-e-jaN mujhay sone nahi daita
tumhary hussn ke yaadoN main ab khone nahi daita
mujhay maloom thaa jana kabhi aisa tu hona thaa
tumhay ik din tu khona thaa, mujhay phir khoob rona thaa
kabhi aisa tu hona na…**
Zabbbbbardast!!!!!! Kya baat hai, kya ravaani hai, kya hi kehne aap k. Aap ne to mas-hoor kar k rakh dia, dil pe lagi hai ja k. Waise main ne bhi is topic par ek nazm likhi thi par wo itni straight forward nahi hai. Sach mein, u have done a great job.
AsSweetAs, kahaaN chupey the yaar ab tak? Bohat zabardast nazm hey. haqiqi dunya sey intehaai nazdeek…:k:…thanx a lot for sharing it with us. Hope to see more of you
Thanks … chupa nahi thaa … aap se inspire hoke jub hum ne posting shoro ke tu aap ghaib hogaye… agar time mily tu aik search mar layN in Poet 2… and give a Criticize look to my poetry…
Yes I wasn’t here for some time. Barrey barrey shehroN meiN aesa bhi hota hey Rahi baat aap ki saheri ki, I will do a search. But one thing I can say right away is that you write very good. The rhythm ( as Shahana said, rwani) you started with and more than that, maintined throughout the poem, is no mean achievement. Keep writing
SWeetoo bhai:lajawab: **
Rahi baat aap ki saheri ki, I will do a search. But one thing I can say right away is that you write very good. The rhythm ( as Shahana said, rwani) you started with and more than that, maintined throughout the poem, is no mean achievement. Keep writing