some sufi humor-----pehli koshish

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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Azizon aur azizion this is my first koshish-------daikhain kahan tak kamyab hoa hoon..

ALLAH say jub say mira contact ho gaya
main har nazar main qabil e respect ho gaya

mera kamal kuch nahi ye lutf e shaikh hay
jo un ki baragh main select ho gaya

aaoon ga un ki bazam main night ho ya ho day
pakk-ka ye un kay sath mera pact ho gaya

patient tha main ishq e majazi ka doostoon
sad shukar hay juld hi detect ho gaya

judo karate main thee haseena black belt
yuon ishq ka flop project ho gaya

suhbat main aa kay shaikh ki aanay laga hay yaad
ahd e alustt hum say tha neglect ho gaya

wo hot favourate nahi haq ki nigah main
husan e butan jo daikh kay attract ho gaya

accept God teri karay ga hur aik dua
uss per trust jub tera perfect ho gaya

ALLAH aur nabi say jissay love ho --you belive
jannat main uss ka dakhla direct ho gaya

mansoor e haq ki tarz pay main nay kahain hain shair
actor nahin khud hi magar act ho gaya

ungraze aur urdu ka aapas main contract
jis jis nay bhi suna kaha correct ho gaya

ALLAH khair karay

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Re: some sufi humor-----pehli koshish

Ager aap Sirf Urdu mein hi likhtay tou zeyada achii hotii, tab sahii sufii kalaam ban jaata, i mean more decent ...anyway thanks for sharing:-)

Behkta Howa Insaan!!
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Re: some sufi humor-----pehli koshish

^^ decent? ...ye tau meri shairi ki paidaish kay sath hi maut waqiya ho gae.....
khair shukran for tashee......aainda koshish ka khayal nahin hay...it is my first ever visit to GS poets forum i think...socha kuch post ker doon.......tuk bandi ker kay post ker diya...

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Re: some sufi humor-----pehli koshish

Good Job, ibtadaei koshish hai not bad, practice makes a man perfect. Try for another piece.

8th Match, Group B - India v Bangladesh - Saturday March 17th
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Re: some sufi humor-----pehli koshish

Hi Bihari Uncle :D Very Nice to see U here...

I am really Impressed with it... its very good effort specialy as U said.. Its First Try... Word Selection is Very good... IT has a very good theme..

BUT.. U know wat the Prob is... as mentioned.. ke.. As its in both languages tou... wo MAHOOL naheeN ban raha :)

Is it possible?
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Re: some sufi humor-----pehli koshish

^^ bichoo bhateejay.....wasalam

i tried to deliver a message and at the same time tried to give this thing humourous touch---khair koi baat nahi ..sub chalta hay ..meri ghaliti itni namaqool type kay samieen per taba azmai ki---

App ki hunsla afzai ka shukria----log karachi aa ker chalay jatay hai naur lift hi nahin karatay

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Re: some sufi humor-----pehli koshish

Uncle Gi... Loag Karachi Aaky Chalay Jaatay haiN kiunkay.. Karachi Walay Lift naheeN karatay..... ;)

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Re: some sufi humor-----pehli koshish

mujhay tou jo mehsoos huwaa mein nay kah diyaa thaa… but most important thing is ager aap khud apnay kaam say happy hain tou theekh hay ,lekin insan ko khhoob say khoob-tar ki koshish kartay rehna chhaaiye aur insan yonhi seekhtaa hay:-)

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Re: some sufi humor-----pehli koshish

Wah wah Bao Ji…:lajawab:

Mukkamal tha main yeh aap ki shaairi sai pehlay,
Ab parh kay is ko lagta hai subtract ho gaya…:smiley:

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Re: some sufi humor-----pehli koshish

Lajawab ho gaya balti saairi sun ke
Jana tha Lahore Karachi pohonch gaya