Re: SMS Shaeri
Anwaar Qureshi Saahab ji,
Hum nay bahut seriousness se SMS shaaeri ki pehli verse likhi thee. Koee mazaak-waak ki baat nahin ki thee. Lakin aap ko ye mazzaq kyon lagga?
SMS neyi kism ki shaaer hai. ghazal va nzam nahin hai. Japanese Haiku, Renga, Senryu jaisi hai. kya aap ko un k baaray main kuch patta hai?
aap nay PPP aur green dupattay ki baat ki hai. kya yeh mazaak nahin hai? agar aap kahen to is ko bhi kisi stanza main daal saktay hain. Jaisay:
tera laal kurta
safed shalwar
haraa dupatta
haath main PPP ka jhunda
tu kya aurat hai
sherni hai
azaad ruu ki hai
mard to bhaithay-bhaithay
hukka peetay rehtay hain
aur tu azaad huee
aasmaan main
urti phirti ho
meray dil ki koyal ho
bulbul ho
(kabhi faaKHtah bhi ho).
faaKHtah/qumri–>dove?
Note: Amal Sahaab Ji, agar aap ko yeh thread achcha nahin lag raha , to mehrbaani kar k is ko delete kar dain. main yahaan kisi ka mazaak nahin karna chahta, lakin neyi kism ki urdu ki poetry zaroor likhna chahta hoon. Shukriya.