Amal
November 11, 2011, 1:40pm
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Siwa be’basi ke mila kuch nahi hey
magar zindagi sey gila kuch nahi hey
sabhi dostoN ney sabaq ye sikhaya
yahaN par wafa ka sila kuch nahi hey
dhuwaN to nahi par sulagta raha dil
ye kesey kahooN meiN jala kuch nahi hey
hey tey har amal ki sazaa bhi, jazaa bhi
na samjho bura ya bhala kuch nahi hey
nai jang hey ye isey jeetney ko
jigar ya faqat hosla kuch nahi hey
ye saaNsoN ki sargam sureeli to hey par
jo samjho to ye silsila kuch nahi hey
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UZ
November 11, 2011, 1:49pm
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**sabhi dostoN ney sabaq ye sikhaya
khaloos-e-niat ka sila kuch nahi hey
Nice :k:
****hey tey har amal ki sazaa bhi, jazaa bhi
na samjho bura ya bhala kuch nahi hey
is mein tey ki jaga to nahi aaye gaa kaya tey punjabi kaa lafz nahi? and waisay is sher kaa matlab kaya hai last part kaa "naa samjho bura yaa bhala khuch bhi nahi hai "Yaa "samjh lo buraa ya bhala khuch bhi nahi hai " **
Amal
November 11, 2011, 2:18pm
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Re: Siwa be’basi ke mila kuch nahi hey…
**hey tey har amal ki sazaa bhi, jazaa bhi
na samjho bura ya bhala kuch nahi hey
is mein tey ki jaga to nahi aaye gaa kaya tey punjabi kaa lafz nahi? and waisay is sher kaa matlab kaya hai last part kaa "naa samjho bura yaa bhala khuch bhi nahi hai "Yaa "samjh lo buraa ya bhala khuch bhi nahi hai " **
Tey = set or fixed. Sheir ka matlab hey ke hum jo bhi kartey hey, us ke leeye ya to saza miley gi ya jaza. Koi bhi aesa amal nahi hey jis ka hisaab, kitaab nahi ho ga. Kuch log jo hayaat baad-az maot par yaqeen nahi rakhtey, unke nazdeek aap jo chaheiN is dunya meiN karte phireiN, hisaab-kitaab kuch nahi hey kiuNke zindagi ke ikhtitaam ke saath hi sab kuch khatm ho jaata hey. I hope it makes sense
Kode
November 11, 2011, 2:20pm
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:k: Nice Amal
Re: Siwa be'basi ke mila kuch nahi hey...
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dhuwaN to nahi par sulagta raha dil
** meiN kesey kahooN ke jala kuch nahi hey
*ye saaNsoN ki sargam sureeli to hey par
* jo samjho to ye silsila kuch nahi hey
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zabardast....
beaut.....khush rahean janab...:)
sat
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jiia
November 15, 2011, 1:23pm
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AMAL !bohat acha likha aap ne
Re: Siwa be’basi ke mila kuch nahi hey…
بہت خوب، اچھے شعر پڑھنے کو ملے آپ کی اس
غزل میں، لیکن لفظ نیت کا تلفظ دیکھ لیجیے
کہ اس کی ی مشدد ہے، جس سے مصرعہ
وزن میں نہیں رہا۔
khaloos-e-niat ka sila kuch nahi hey
اسی طرح لفظ کہ کو آپ نے کے کے وزن پر
برتا ہے جبکہ یہ ایک حرف کے برابر شمار
ہوتا ہے۔
**meiN kesey kahooN ke jala kuch nahi hey
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ان دو مصرعوں کو دیکھ لیجیے گا۔
Amal
November 15, 2011, 5:29pm
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Re: Siwa be'basi ke mila kuch nahi hey...
Shukriya Faseeh bhai...taseeh kar di hey meiN ney :)
Re: Siwa be'basi ke mila kuch nahi hey...
Shukriya Faseeh bhai...taseeh kar di hey meiN ney :)
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Bohat khoob, umda hae..**
Re: Siwa be’basi ke mila kuch nahi hey…
behtareen ghazal hai Amal bhai..
aur we miss you a lot…ab aa jain wapis
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ye saaNsoN ki sargam sureeli to hey par
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i love this misra very much :) and 1-3 ashaar b
Koyal
November 20, 2011, 12:19pm
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Re: Siwa be'basi ke mila kuch nahi hey...
Amal achi hai ap ki gazal lakin maza nahi aya itna parnay ap ki bahtreen gazlain parh k ye bus theek hai umeed hai ap mind nahi karo gay:)
Amal
November 20, 2011, 2:27pm
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Re: Siwa be'basi ke mila kuch nahi hey...
Amal achi hai ap ki gazal lakin maza nahi aya itna parnay ap ki bahtreen gazlain parh k ye bus theek hai umeed hai ap mind nahi karo gay:)
Absolutely not...aap ko disappoint karne ke leeye muaazrat...agli baar kuch behtar koshish karooN ga :)
Re: Siwa be’basi ke mila kuch nahi hey…
As Always The Best Of Amal :k: !!
Love Your Writings Man !!
Sannan
November 21, 2011, 1:27pm
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cool
aap ka kalam parh kar aik sher yaad aa gia
keon udas phirtay ho sardeon key shamoon main
iss tarah to hota hay iss tarah kay kamoon main :cobra:
Sannan
November 21, 2011, 1:29pm
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Re: Siwa be’basi ke mila kuch nahi hey…
aap yah lain maza nah aaya to paisay wapus :cobra:
Koyal
November 22, 2011, 1:34am
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