Shaiher Bhi Tha Ajnabi Loog Bhi Baray Saiyanay Thay

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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Aslaam-o-Aliekum.

Im new here and im sending my own piece to all of you. Hope u would like. and i would realy love ur comments abt this which will help me to improve myself.Thanks
Allah Hafiz.

Check it.

Shaiher Bhi Tha Ajnabi Loog Bhi Baray Saiyanay Thay
Koch Thay Janay Pehchanay Baki Sab Unjanay Thay
Shaiher-e-Ajnabi Mein Ek Shaks Ajeeb Mila Mujay
Dil Tha Barfaf Ankoon Mein Ajab Viranay Thay

Meri Ankhein Dekhtein Thin Fakat Mehboob Ko
Uss Kay Dil Mein Nafratoon Kay Parwanay Thay

Mein Nay Maan Lia Tha Ussay Manzal-e-tala-ash Verna
Meri Dil Main Bhi Gilay Shikvay Bohat Puranay Thay

Jatay Vaqat Ek Baar Bhi Na Dekha Palat Ker
Hum Tu Abb Talak Teray Pyar Kay Divanay Thay

Chalo Iss Shaiher Sey Wapas Abb Na Thairo Fahad
Tumari Rahtoon Kay Bas Yea Hi Zamanay Thay.:slight_smile:

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Re: Shaiher Bhi Tha Ajnabi Loog Bhi Baray Saiyanay Thay

Wah… Very Beautiful… Fahad … :flower1:

Warm Welcome to GS and Offcourse to GS Poetry.. :slight_smile:

You have Posted your Poem in Wrong Forum, as its Yours so it should Be where its now.. :stuck_out_tongue:

U r Among… Shora-e-GS now…

I hope U will have Good time here.

:wave:

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Re: Shaiher Bhi Tha Ajnabi Loog Bhi Baray Saiyanay Thay

welcome

Feminist Mods- (split from the "some mods are better) thread
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Re: Shaiher Bhi Tha Ajnabi Loog Bhi Baray Saiyanay Thay

Well its nice try…as u requested i tried and make some changes…dont know whether u like it or not…but i did it bcaz u asked 4 it…

Sheher Bhi Tha Kuch Ajnabi Sa, Log Bhi Sab Be-Ganey Thay
Kuch Tu Thay Janay Pehchaney Baaqi Sab Un-Janey Thay

Iss Sheher-e-Ajnabi Mein, Ik Shakhas Milla Ajab Sa
Dil Jiska Baraf Ki Maanind, Ankhon Mein Veeraney Thay

Meri Aankhein Tu Takti Thi, Sirf Ussi Ka Chehra
Lakin Uskay Dil Mein Tu Bus, Nafrat Ke Paemaney Thay

Main Ney Usko Maan Liya Tha, Apni Manzil Varna
Dil Meray Mein Bhi Kuch Tu, Shikvay Gillay Puraaney Thay

Vaqat-e-Rukhsat Ik Baar Bhi, Na Dekha Usnay Murr Ke
Ik Hum Jo Ruston Se Uski, Aaye Sung Uthaaney Thay

Lout Bhi Aao Uss Nagar Se, Ab Na Tum Thehro Fahad
Tumhari Raahton Ke Bus Yahin Tak, Kuch Zamaaney Thay

Well i just tried as i am not a good poet…agar kuch ghalat lagay tu sorry…

Khamosh Parhnay Waalon K Naam (Silent Readers)
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:k:

Tu ...
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Re: Shaiher Bhi Tha Ajnabi Loog Bhi Baray Saiyanay Thay

:k::k:

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Re: Shaiher Bhi Tha Ajnabi Loog Bhi Baray Saiyanay Thay

Very nice and welcome... Khush rahoo

Just for you angeloftruth
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Re: Shaiher Bhi Tha Ajnabi Loog Bhi Baray Saiyanay Thay

Thanks All of you. and specially Samavia. u pointed some good things i will check it in my temp. thanks Again Samavia.