isi bahaney chaman main merey bahar rahe
k tu na aye mager tera intazaar rahe
sabab kuch our na tha sawai ghurbat k
so hum nigah main teri be aitbar rahe
jo tu nahin tera bemisaal ghum hi sahi
k meray pass koi shey yaadgaar rahey
terey hi ghum ko hum ney mutaber jana
agerchey our bhi ghum humko beishumar rahe
khuda karey k jis ney mujhey be sukoon kia
tamaam umer usey mustaqil qarar rahe
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Beautiful :k: thanks for sharing 
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khuda karey k jis ney mujhey be sukoon kia
tamaam umer usey mustaqil qarar rahe
excellent…:k:
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Very nice :k:
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nice bohat
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terey hi ghum ko hum ney mutaber jana
agerchey our bhi ghum humko beishumar rahe
Bohat umda.......... thanks you
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thx for sharing such a cool stuff tahreem
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thanks kaleem and sannan
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[quote=Muslim girl]
khuda karey k jis ney mujhey be sukoon kia
tamaam umer usey mustaqil qarar rahe
excellent…:k:
[quote=lutfullah urf Abdullateef Qadri]
Bahan Muslim Girl se meri sirf itni guzaarish hai keh “Excellent…” likh kar kisi aisi baat ki daad na dein jo baat sareehan ghalat pesh ki gayi ho! Ab dekhiye Bibi Tahreem Saeed ne kisi aur ki kahi hui umda ghazal bataur namuna o numaaish yahan pesh karti hain. Pesh karte waqt ehtiyaat naheen rakhti keh naqal sahi utar rahi hai ya nahi! Sher ki gardan maar kar uski saakht ko majrooh kar ke yun pesh karti hain:-
Misra e awaal : “khuda karey k jis ney mujhey be sukoon kia”
** ( Haai re Shaair ki mehnat!) **
Sahi Misra : “Khuda karey keh mujhey jis ney be sukoon kia”
Agar sahi misre se yeh sher utarkar aata to jaise keh iske kahne waale ki khoobi thi, yeh sher laayaq sad taareef tha.
Bibi Tahreem ko shaairi ka qawayad se abhi aashnaai naheen hui hai. Main ne khud unko kai post bheje hain.
Magar aap to Urdu ki aur shaairi ki achhi samajh rakhtein hain? Aap agar aisi
ghalatiyon ko tokney ke bajaae unpar shabaashiyaan likhengi to Bibi Tahreem jaise naumushkon ki koi adabi taraqqi naheen hogi!
Shukriya!
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*Very Nice :-) *
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[quote=lutfullah]
[quote=Muslim girl]
khuda karey k jis ney mujhey be sukoon kia
tamaam umer usey mustaqil qarar rahe
excellent…:k:
Dekhain bhai mein nae nazm pehli dafa perhi hai..aur pehli dafa jo nazm perhi jaiy toh mera khayal hai k pata nahi chalta k iis mein koi galti bhi hai k nahi…aur raha excellent ka sawal toh wo mein nae iis liay liha k nazm bohat achi hai…aur iis lafz k thorugh unhain appreciate kya k wo aur aisi hi nazmain post kerti rahain…aur waisay INTAHAAB ka matlab bhi yehi hai k aap doosray poets ki poems likhtay hain…aur jo bhi poem post kerta hai uus k choice ki daad di jati hai…
That’s all i have to say..
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[quote=Muslim girl]
[quote=lutfullah]
thanks muslim girl
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^^anytime....
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[quote=Muslim girl]
[quote=lutfullah]
[quote=Muslim girl]
khuda karey k jis ney mujhey be sukoon kia
tamaam umer usey mustaqil qarar rahe
excellent…:k:
Dekhain bhai mein nae nazm pehli dafa perhi hai..aur pehli dafa jo nazm perhi jaiy toh mera khayal hai k pata nahi chalta k iis mein koi galti bhi hai k nahi…aur raha excellent ka sawal toh wo mein nae iis liay liha k nazm bohat achi hai…aur iis lafz k thorugh unhain appreciate kya k wo aur aisi hi nazmain post kerti rahain…aur waisay INTAHAAB ka matlab bhi yehi hai k aap doosray poets ki poems likhtay hain…aur jo bhi poem post kerta hai uus k choice ki daad di jati hai…
That’s all i have to say..
[quote=lutfullah]
Dear Madam Muslim Girl!
I am actually sorry for having written that post to you on your praising the misquote of a good ghazal by Bibi Tahreem. I went through your answer very thoroughly and have drawn this conclusion. This auspicious and well known forum of Urdu poetry is nothing more than a place to post any heresay tukbandi or for that matter any good poet’s work in*** incorrect content*** just to make a show of presenting Urdu literature. It has nothing to do with serious promotion of our Urdu language in its pristine form so that the participants not only understand the taste of good poetry and connotations but are rather praised and left to be contented in their ignorance and poor grasp of the language! Indeed it is a show of literary mediocrity and a pastime for lightminded people who have no serious intention to master Urdu! I have but recently joined this forum at the behest of some uniformed people who quoted it as a place rich with display of Urdu! Some richness indeed! And there again I witness Mr.Amal calling people to contribute original Urdu rhymes in his new*** Bait Baazi** . *How many of the like that can not even post other poets lines correctly, will learn the Urdu poetry and post their own, only Allah knows.
Anyway I thank you again for your kind reply!
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Bohat hi khoob.....
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Ghazal waaqaee behtareen kahi hai shaair ne, thanx Tehreem jee for sharing it with us.
L****utfullah](http://www.paklinks.com/gs/member.php?u=43639)** Sahab, main agree karta hoon aap se lekin aap ne jis thoss sanjeedgi se samjhaaya hai us se to mujh jaise bhi bhaag kharre honge ye to phir ba-qaul aap k nau-mashq hain.
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**Zara andaaz halka phulka rakhein, bhala kis ko aaitraaz hoga aap ki correction kar dene se!!! **
Kiyun Tehreem jee?
**Waise main ne note kia hai k forumz pe ghalati nikaalne ko zyada acha nahi samjha jata so main ne to bohat kam kar dia hai ab…
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(no offence plzzz)
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sabh keh sun chukay hum kia kahain :)