purani yaaden.... 9 lines

kiya den guzre jab yaroon ke mahfil saj-te
agar-che mahfilen saada ore piyada hot-e
magar najan- que -ba rang-o -ronaq hot-e

kabhi- bazaar ko to _kabhi _hussne yaar- ki deedar- ko chalte
kabhi -barishon- me- beegte- to- kabhi -galiyon -me- batak- te
kabhi bagh me sukoon karte ore kabhi den batoon me guzarte

waqt- ki -qadar -hi -na thi -ke kabhi guzar ja-ey ga
mahfilen -toot- jaen- gi -ore yaar- bichar- jaen- gay
zamana-e haal aik yaad ban kar del me reh ja-e ga

end.

I know this poem (which I wrote) is very immature and there is a lack of grammer and other vocabulary words. And I believe writing poetry depends on age and experiences of a person throughout his life. But this is how far I got and if you think that this poem needs corrections so please do so. I will be more than happy to see it re-posted with corrections.

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Re: purani yaaden.... 9 lines

gud effort

Re: purani yaaden… 9 lines

Keep it up man :k:

Re: purani yaaden.... 9 lines

thanks guys... I thought it was bad or somthin...