“Devi” jee
Kahbi kisi shubh samey key karan
aap ki madhur se awaaz
kannon mein ras tu ghool deiti hey
kabhi kissi bhooli bhatki naiki key ewaz
Dershan ki khairat tu mil hi jati hey
per parathna hey
apney es Pujaari ku
apna naam bata dein
dil key mandar mein
kahien dour koi choota sa kouna
anayat ker dein
jhan yeh jougi aalti maar key beith jaye
aur aap key naam ki mala jupta rhey
jupta rahey…
aur phir kissi din amer ho ker
“Dewta” ban jaye.
chodhry
Nice 
Dont mind.. aap ki Poem ke saath Ungal Baazi kar raha HuN 
agar ye. aisay hota …
kabhi kissi bhooli bhatki naiki key ewaz
kabhi kissi bhooli bhatki Punye key ewaz
kahien dour koi choota sa kouna
anayat ker dein
kahien dour koi choota sa kouna
Prapt ker dein
Thank You G_S for the editing,
i dont know much abt hindi language, bas kuch books perh perh key aur kuch movies deikh key thoorey bohat lafz aagye hein. aur yeh saari poem bas utri thee merey pey. tu jesiey uter rhi they waisey likh dee...hehehe
Hmmm
bahut hi pyari koshish hai ! zabardast
Golden scorpion ye inki koshish hai aur koshish hamesha kamiyaab hoti hai inkay alfaaz main koi ungali baazi ki zaroorat nahin dikhti baki ap ki marzi per mera nazariya ye hai k koshish bahut hi piyari hai!
Thanks 4 sharing Chodhry ji!
Thanx Chodhry Gi... U dont mind My Ungal Baazi :D actually.. I like Hindi a bit more. .. :)
And,,, it really is.. Outstanding Koshish... No doubt about that :) :biggthumb
And... Lamhay Gi... Aaap ke comment ka Shukria... Ungal baazi karnay se mera maqsaad.. Sirf Tanqeed naheeN tha.... Tanqeed bara-e-Behtari tha...
Zabrdast Idea
not bad :)
niceee:k:
keep it up:)
Buhat aallaa !!
shukria jinaab shukrya shukria...:)
Nice One :k: keep it up
Thankyou Black Mamba.