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[rajey]

@Hashmat Usmani

**ek achchhi kaavish par DheroN mubaarakbaadeN. hamesha waah ke saath aah bhi hotii hai is liye chand ek baateN jo zehn e zaeef men aayiiN vo raqam kar rahaa huN…buraa na maaniyegaa k yeh maHez ek dostaana sujhaao hai.

-aapke qit’a kaa taKhaiyul achchhaa hai…kalaam meN chusti kii kamii maHsoos huii.

-zabaan aasaan aur salees hai magar adaayegii/tarteeb meN jhol nazar aayaa

-jo aapne likhaa use qit’a kahte haiN aur iskii ek haiyat [format] hotii hai soo usse roo-shinaasii kar len to aapkii she’r goyii meN nikhaar paidaa hogaa, iA.

-aapko bahr [meter] aur cazan [weight] agar seekh leN to bahtar hogaa kiuN k yeh shaa’irii kii buniyaad hai jaise raag gaayekii kii buniyaad hai.**

aapke dostana sujhaav sir aankhon par. aapka comment hi izzat afzai hai.