One of my Poems.

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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tere baghair zindagee yun bhatak gayee hai jaise
sahraon ko badal ya baadlon ko sahra milta na ho

jaise meree khushiyaan aasmaanon se utree to hon magar
zameen par unko mera thikana kaheen milta na ho

jaise muddaton se koi panee talashta ho magar
itne bare sahra mein sarab tak milta na ho

jaise kisee ko darya bahane kee tamanna ho magar
uskee aankhon ko kaheen se ik aansoo bhee milta na ho

jaise koi shama raat bhar jalee ho magar
sahar hone par bhee ujaalon ka nishaan milta na ho

jaise koi nadee buhat door tak bahtee chalee gaee ho magar
khatam hone par bhee darya usay milta na ho

jaise kisee ke intizaar mein barson jeena ho magar
ek saans ka doosree saans se sira milta na ho

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Nice Perfectionist, Keep it up,
Thanks for sharing :~)

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keep it up :)

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itni dard se bharpoor ghazal :-(

i feel you have a strong potential for writing, it just needs more practice....keep up your efforts :)

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Very nice wording :k:

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jaise kisee ko darya bahane kee tamanna ho magar
uskee aankhon ko kaheen se ik aansoo bhee milta na ho

oye perfect :)....
bohut achay

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nice very nice ..thanx for sharing:)

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very nice n touchy :)

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Thanks Gul-e-tasbeeh and chand chehra

Thanks kashish for the compliment that I have potential to write:) Ghazlein dardnaak bhee hotee hain kabhee kabhee!

Thanks Sehar; I understand I lack rhythm and rhyme aur sentences chote bare ho jaate hain:)

Thanks saby, I am flatterred...ab agar koi attempt is walee se thoree standards se kam huee to kaise post kar sakoon ga? :)

Thanks truth and nikii.

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hmmmm… goood yaaaara

KEEP IT UP :k: :k: :k:

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Re: One of my Poems.

Excellent poem. Very well worded and full of emotions. I recall u have posted a few of your poems in the past as well. Keep writing and keep sharing with us :k:
I admire your expressionism :slight_smile:

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BRAVO PER

WAHH Bohat khub,bus isee terha koshish kertay rahayin tou aik din zarror achay poets mai ap ka naam aye ga.mayri duawain app kai saat hain..bohat khub ghazal hai///

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Re: Re: One of my Poems.

Thank You sooo much for your appreciation Capri :slight_smile:

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Re: BRAVO PER

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*Originally posted by MARRIED NY: *
WAHH Bohat khub,bus isee terha koshish kertay rahayin tou aik din zarror achay poets mai ap ka naam aye ga.mayri duawain app kai saat hain..bohat khub ghazal hai///
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shukria MARRIED NY ....aap ki tareef aur hosla afzaee ka :)

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Re: Re: Re: One of my Poems.

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*Originally posted by Perfectionist: *

Thank You sooo much for your appreciation Capri :)
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You are welcome. I will wait for your next one :)