trying to verify if the following poetry that i took off a voice file is correctly written or not.. tape wasn’t clear so i couldn’t get some pieces, PLUS i think i wrote some wrong..
to jisko bhee ye poori ghazal/nazam aati ho, please post karain with corrections highlighted.. thanks…
mairay shairon ke haqeeat main na maani samjha,
waada-e-haqq ko tu angoor ka pani samjha,
tu nahi janta arbaab-e-tareeqat ke usool,
tairay behooda sawaalat saraasarr hain fuzool,
tu nahi janta paymana kisay kehtay hain,
tu nahi janta maykhana kisay kehtay hain,
istilhaahat-e-tassuff ki nahi tujh ko khabar,
fakhar ki raah main milta hay jahaan jaisay nazar,
koh-e-chasmi say tujhay khoti, khari lagti hay,
aur meri dua bhee tujhay laanat-bhari lagti hay,
ahl-e-danish nay tairay zehain ko qeda samjha,
waada-e-shair ko bhee samaj main tharra samjha,
main toheed ki mainay to wazaahat ki thee,
tu na samjhay aray naadaan ye qismat teri,
roomi-o-hafiz-o-khaiyaam ka dekha hay kalaam,
jaan meena ke libaaday main tareeqat thee kamaan,
naaseh, tujhko naseehat ke siwa kaam nahi,
jaam main khatam na kar doon to mera naam nahi,
hi kambakht tu nay pi hi nahi,
allah ki inaayat dekh ke main saif-zabaan hoon,
aur naaseh main tairay waastay koh-e-garaan hoon,
tanqeed main, tareef thee, iss waastay chup tha,
warna ye samajh lay ke main main abhi ______ hoon,
three monkeys escaped from zoo & the security started searching for them.after n hr the 1 was found drinking pepsi the second was found eating burger & the third one was found READING THIS SIGNATURE!
Game is neither created, nor destroyed, and surprizingly, it doesn't get over. It only changes forms. Being over is ONLYthe starting.
. . . . . L Ï F £ _ M Ä Ï N _ T £ N § Ï Ö N §! . . . . .
working.. thanks..
[This message has been edited by confused (edited April 25, 2002).]
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**SERIOUS attempts only.. no “good/bad” “aisa hay, waisa hay” messages please..
trying to verify if the following poetry that i took off a voice file is correctly written or not.. tape wasn’t clear so i couldn’t get some pieces, PLUS i think i wrote some wrong..
to jisko bhee ye poori ghazal/nazam aati ho, please post karain with corrections highlighted.. thanks…
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mairay shairon ke haqeeat main na maani samjha,
waada-e-haqq ko tu angoor ka pani samjha,
fakhar ki raah main milta hay jahaan jaisay nazar,
is ko samjhao zara…tafseelun…
koh-e-chasmi say tujhay khoti, khari lagti hay,
how do u differentiate b/w a khotee and a khota from a distance?
I know …from the way they jhaaR there do lattee?
waisay I think we’ll need a chashma to c correctly…chashmi laga ker tu khotee hi dikhay gi
allah ki inaayat dekh ke main saif-zabaan hoon,
aur naaseh main tairay waastay koh-e-garaan hoon,
Allah ki shaan hai…
tanqeed main, tareef thee, iss waastay chup tha,
warna ye samajh lay ke main main abhi ______ hoon,
agar aap main main ho ga-ay tu agli baqar eid per…khirich mutlab khalaas…
“tanqeed main, tareef thee, iss waastay chup tha,
tanqeed main, tareef thee, iss waastay chup tha,”
wah wah yay bohat hi patay ki baakamal baat ki hai shair nay…mukarrar irshaad ho
:jhoomnay wala icon:
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Kay hum tu Dhoop main baarishh kay woh qatray hain jo gir ker, dar-o-deevar per hi sookh jaatay hain…
iss forum ki ek saakh thee, ek izzat thee, .. aur sath sath, ek acha maahol tha..
carry on folks.. cafe bhee ziyada door nahi.. hamm to bechaaray iss umeed main aaye thay idhar ke poetry poori kar sakay ga koee..
khair, jaisay moderators ki marzi .. shair hain idhar ke, anda dain ya bacha ..
aur rahi baat reading ya writing wali, to sorry sirjee, that time to reading hi tha.. apnay read karkay write main change kerna chaaha, monkeypanna sabit ho giya ..
I am like an Open Book Except for the few pages of my past, My life is an empty book. It takes the shape of a mystery, To me it does at least. For I cannot tell what happens next, Too many cliffhangers and too much suspense. But its clues all lead eventually to the same place, Unfortunately it does not say where. It only says get the next book, For in this one you’ ve ran out of room.
