Need Guidance about the 'wazan' of a verse...in urdu that is........ kafia and radeef

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Re: Need Guidance about the ‘wazan’ of a verse…in urdu that is… kafia and ra

@khan126

Thanks a lot Khalil and Amal Bhai…!!! it was indeed very prompt and nice reply

I wrote some ghazals but my friends told me that it was out of meter .. and has issued with Qafia and radeef…

here is one

Ajab hai ishq o muhabath ki bathein
kab se hai buuth ikk banni woh

Kis ko khayal hai soodo zian ka
Ker jaye koi shararath sahee woh

Azal se karah hoon ikk do rahe per
maan jaon haar ke maath daidegi woh

khamoshi mein he hai subkuch pinhaan
hai iss mein qiamath wohiker gayee woh

nigah mein masthi ajab hai woh hasthi
kabhi hai woh shirk kabhi bandagee woh

Bus itni rafaqat chahiye Tanweer
Maan jaye humko ikk ajnabi woh

my freind told me it should be like this

ho na ho ithni rafaqath ho muyassar humko
ajnabi ker lain bhalai app thasawe humko

Thanks

Regards

Some of your last sentences qafiyaaas are not matching when you read them it doesn’t sound like qafias at all I don’t have much knowledge of shairi but something doesn’t seem balance in this ghazal. I am sorry if I hurt your ghazal.