Hi folks I just need some feedback on this song I wrote based on Ghalib’s poetry,… basically has house / hiphop feel to it but in a subtle way …
Song <== to play!
Have fun… 
You mixed it? Who is the vocalist?
not sure what you mean by mixed? I wrote the score for the song and then sang it. Entire song is produced by me in my home studio here in USA.
My workstation:
ok usually i dont post much in audio, but this is excellent stuff..i just love it. Simply too good i have listened to it many times now and still am.
Keep up the good work.
thanks for ruining my favorite song 
p.s. great stuff :k:
That shaking butt has me in a trance. 
Funny you mention that I also write Euro Techno / Trance / Acid stuff...
you like that buTT! don't you LOL!
Sorry you feel that way but someone had to bring Ghalib out on the dance floor. eheh
Hey man good stuff. Looking from a professional point of view the music does seem a wee bit out of sync but nonetheless its a great effort. Keep it up! :k: Your music sounds like something Deep Forest would make.
Music is good…Voice seems good too…but load the voice without any robotic effect…
over all is good :k:
I think it sounds just fine like this.
By the way the song is growing on me now!!! 
chee...just give a try, may be you will like that!
out of sync? as in vocals? I listened to it many times I did not get that feel, humm good feedback thanks
wow.. excellent! love it.. !
Hey Thanks Guys...
I'm glad you guys liked it... this is cool!
when i first heard it ..thaught it was alright…now i keep listening to it :D…it has such an awesome beat..good work :k:
Becharay Ghalib…
hazaaron khwahishain 'eisee ke har khwahish pe dam nikle
bohot nikle mere armaan lekin fir bhee kam nikle
dare kyoon mera qaatil kya rahega uskee gardan par
wo khoon, jo chashm-e-tar se 'umr bhar yoon dam_ba_dam nikle
khoon = blood, chashm = eye, tar = wet, dam_ba_dam = continously ]
nikalna khuld se aadam ka sunte aayain hain lekin
bohot be_aabru hokar tere kooche se ham nikle
khuld = heaven, be_aabaru = disgrace, koocha = street ]
bharam khul jaaye zaalim tere qaamat ki daraazee ka
agar is turra-e-pur_pech-o-kham ka pech-o-kham nikle
daraazee = length/delay, qaamat = stature, turra = an ornamental tassel worn in the turban, pech-o-kham = curls in the hair/complexity ]
magar likhwaaye koee usko khat, to hamse likhawaaye
huee subah aur ghar se kaan par rakhkar qalam nikle
huee is daur mein mansoob mujhse baada_aashaamee
fir aaya wo zamaana, jo jahaan se jaam-e-jam nikle
mansoob = association, baada_aashaamee = association with drinking ]
huee jinse tavaqqo khastagee kee daad paane kee
wo hamse bhee ziyaada khasta-e-tegh-e-sitam nikle
tavaqqo = expectation, khastagee = weakness, daad = justice, khasta = broken/sick/injured, tegh = sword, sitam = cruelity ]
mohabbat mein naheen hai farq jeene aur marne kaa
usee ko dekh kar jeete hain jis kaafir pe dam nikle
zara kar jor seene par ki teer-e-pursitam nikle
jo wo nikle to dil nikle, jo dil nikle to dam nikle
khuda ke waaste parda na kaabe se uthaa zaalim
kaheen 'eisa na ho yaan bhee wohee kaafir sanam nikle
kahaan maikhaane ka darwaaza ‘ghalib’ aur kahaan waaiz
par itana jaante hain kal wo jaata tha ke ham nikle
waaiz = preacher/advisor ]
First of all the the selection of shaairi is very good…Not a big fan of Ghalib, but this is one of his works which I like…That shaking butt is really taking the feel out of your arrangement…It’s a nice mellow, melancholic tune and the shaking butt…Well, you get the picture…
As for your arrangement, it’s very good…If success of a song depends upon its rememberability, you have hit the mark…Once again, you are MashAllah very talented in arranging music…You have done a really nice job…:k:
Second, tell me what stuff you have there on your workstation there? I hear a vocalizer, a synthesizer and a sequencer…What are you using?
Yeah it does not open up at 1st but...., you'll get the real feel after few listens. Thanks guys for your feedback BTW I write music just for fun, you guys are most welcome to make copies distribute or whatever with this song…
again THANKS!
Thanks...
Lajawab: This song was done using....
ALESIS QS Keyboard
YS200 Yamaha Keyboard (Data entry only)
EMU Sampler PCI Card (SF2 format) / 4 in 4 out digi Audio recorder.
Roland MDC1 Sound module
P4 Computer with Sonar 1.1 (digital Recording system)
Vocalist Workstation
Audio PCI card by Ensoniq 2 in 2 out
DigiLine II Amp
Pioneer monitors
My home studio has gone through a major change since then and in a bit of a limbo at the moment...
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*Originally posted by Zeus Zen: *
Thanks...
Lajawab: This song was done using....
ALESIS QS Keyboard
YS200 Yamaha Keyboard (Data entry only)
EMU Sampler PCI Card (SF2 format) / 4 in 4 out digi Audio recorder.
Roland MDC1 Sound module
P4 Computer with Sonar 1.1 (digital Recording system)
Vocalist Workstation
Audio PCI card by Ensoniq 2 in 2 out
DigiLine II Amp
Pioneer monitors
My home studio has gone through a major change since then and in a bit of a limbo at the moment...
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Thanks for the info Zeus...:)
Couple of more things...What make is your Vocalist workstation and is that Cakewalk you have running on your computer?