Need a correct wording of this shair

Gadha · July 22, 2003, 4:18pm

if anyone remembers it please do post it.. Thanks ! this is one of my favorites shairs but I seem to be missing a radeef or beh’r in it:
**
Mutt seh’l hummaiN jaano, phirtaa hay falak barsouN
Tubb khaak kay parday say InsaaN nikaltay haiN!**

Gadha · July 22, 2003, 7:58pm

ANY ONE? :-/

Amarbail1 · July 22, 2003, 8:11pm

Just wondering wat wud b the prize for the winner who fulfil your request :D

Swera · July 22, 2003, 8:13pm

Re: Need a correct wording of this shair

[QUOTE]
Originally posted by Gadha: *
if anyone remembers it please do post it.. Thanks ! this is one of my favorites shairs but I seem to be missing a radeef or beh'r in it:
*
Mutt seh'l hummaiN jaano, phirtaa hay falak barsouN
Tubb khaak kay parday say InsaaN nikaltay haiN!**
[/QUOTE]

Nahin pata ji, Sorry:(

Amarbail1 · July 22, 2003, 8:15pm

Falak, ay kaash hum ko khaak hi rakhta ke us mein hum
Gubaar-e-raah hote ya kisi ki khaak-e-paa hote...

Is se kaam chal sakta hai ... ?

Gadha · July 22, 2003, 8:16pm

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by Amarbail: *
Falak, ay kaash hum ko khaak hi rakhta ke us mein hum
Gubaar-e-raah hote ya kisi ki khaak-e-paa hote...

Is se kaam chal sakta hai ... ?
[/QUOTE]
yeh tau different shair hay :-/
aap nay tau kahaa thaa kay poori naz'm mil jaye gee mujhay :(

Amarbail1 · July 22, 2003, 8:20pm

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by Gadha: *
yeh tau different shair hay :-/
aap nay tau kahaa thaa kay poori naz'm mil jaye gee mujhay :(
[/QUOTE]

Dheeraj rakheyey, abhi itni jaldi bhi kya hai ... G jee :D

Gadha · July 23, 2003, 5:39am

chodhry · July 23, 2003, 6:36am

Mutt seh'l essey jaano, phirtaa hay falak barsouN
Tubb khaak kay parday say InsaaN nikaltay haiN!

chodhry · July 23, 2003, 6:39am

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by Amarbail: *
Just wondering wat wud b the prize for the winner who fulfil your request :D
[/QUOTE]

Well said Amar Jee, so Gadha jee where's my prize??? :D

Maheen2002 · July 23, 2003, 9:40am

Re: Need a correct wording of this shair

[QUOTE]
Originally posted by Gadha: *
if anyone remembers it please do post it.. Thanks ! this is one of my favorites shairs but I seem to be missing a radeef or beh'r in it:
*
Mutt seh'l hummaiN jaano, phirtaa hay falak barsouN
Tubb khaak kay parday say InsaaN nikaltay haiN!**
[/QUOTE]

I have the correct wording but its at home.....ghar jaa ke post karoon gii :~)

maheen_sajid · July 23, 2003, 8:03pm

Re: Need a correct wording of this shair

[QUOTE]
Originally posted by Gadha: *
if anyone remembers it please do post it.. Thanks ! this is one of my favorites shairs but I seem to be missing a radeef or beh'r in it:
*
Mutt seh'l hummaiN jaano, phirtaa hay falak barsouN
Tubb khaak kay parday say InsaaN nikaltay haiN!**
[/QUOTE]

no ur not missing radeef or behr it is correct its by mirr

Gadha · July 23, 2003, 10:45pm

phew* thanks maheen:)

about 10 years ago i had read it while i was in matric and after that i never had a chance to read it but remembered this much:mudhosh: happy that i still remembered it correctly only if some one tell me i am wrong

chodhry · July 24, 2003, 5:51am

Well’ i dont think i will agree with maheen, i belive its

“esse” and not “hammein”

mat seh’l essey janoo, and not “mat sehal hamien jano”

Gadha · July 24, 2003, 6:33am

yeh tau game ho gayeee

mujhay sahih waalaa shaih say bataaao:snooty:

system · July 24, 2003, 6:56am

As far I know, your sher is right Gadha jee. It’s not “Mat sehl aise jano…” It’s right on the way you wrote it. :flower1:

See this site for the sher… http://www.urdustan.com/adeeb/shaayar/meer.htm

Gadha · July 24, 2003, 7:02am

ohh thanks iss site kay message board ka tau maiN moderator bhee hooN:rolleyes: aur maiN nay sahih say site hee nahiN dekhi :crying:

thanks

system · July 24, 2003, 9:15pm

You’re Welcome, Always