nadiya mein samandar behtay hain

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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Nadiya mein samandar behtay hain:)
hum aap he kay dil mein rehtay hain
lakin yeh pyaar ka dukh hum he kyun sehtay hain
phir bhi hum tujhe sirf apna he kehtay hain

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Re: nadiya mein samandar behtay hain

it seems a bit better in tukk bandi now... There is still room for improvement .... you will be doing wonders after all this struggle you are going through Insha Allah... I see a big potential..

however, you should always mention about things that you borrow from other places..... therefore, mention that the second line is not yours but borrowed.. it is perfectly OK to borrow and build the idea around as long as credit is given where it is due... This has been in practice by many big name of poetry as well.. :)

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Re: nadiya mein samandar behtay hain

:hugz: :hug: :bb:

welcome baQ.. :slight_smile:

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Re: nadiya mein samandar behtay hain

Anwaar qureshi u have been wondering ever since i started shairo-shayari kay kiya yeh meri apni shayari hai ya nahi. tau it is my own. aur mein ne aik bhi shair risaalay ya akhbar-e-jehan se utaar kar post nahi kiya and with that can u pleeeeeeeeease stop correcting my vocabulary.

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Re: nadiya mein samandar behtay hain

tweety jee... i never wondered before... let me clarify...

  1. I used to ask the question because you were posting your poetry in "Intikhab" which is clearly a forum for the well known poets and not the guppies..

  2. Now that you have posted it here, I am 100% sure that it was yours.... I only talked about the second line being borrowed.. and it was so because it is not your line... if it is yours then, the Indian Movie, "hum aap he kay dil mein rehtay hain" and the title song for it was written by you??

  3. If you read back again what I said, it was a total critic in positive direction, and not a taunt. We all need such words and critism to IMPROVE our ownselves.... I said all that with an intention to guide and appreciate. Rest assured, if this is how you behave, then, there is very little room to improvise in life :)

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Re: nadiya mein samandar behtay hain

i'm sorry

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Re: nadiya mein samandar behtay hain

don't be :)

It was a misunderstanding. It's good it's gone early :-)

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Re: nadiya mein samandar behtay hain

ok

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*Very original, again.

A stream of love now
carries an ocean
and I live now
in your heart.

Then why I be the
one to bear the
pangs of love and
still call you my own?*

Someone's watching....