Re: My poem
waah…kia baat hai…ibtidaa e shaa’irii bhii nahiiN hai, maashaa Allah kaafii kuchh likh chukii ho…aise hii likhtii raho iA kaamiyaab rahogii! 
Allah kare zor e qalam aur ziyaada!
ek chhoTaa saa point hai:
yeh ne “maHfil-e-guftugu” likhaa hai aur jiskaa matlab tum ne “maHfil kii cheh-e-mee-goiyaaN” liyaa hai magar Faarsii kii izaafat [connectivity] kii roo se ise “guftuguu-e-meHfil” honaa chaahiye kiuN k jahaN izaafat 'alaamat “-e-”] hotii hai vahaN ek se zaayad alfaaz hoN to use ulaT kar [backwards] paRhte haiN…
maHfil-e-guftuguu = guftuguu kii maHfil
guftuguu-e-meHfil = maHfil kii guftuguu