My Own Ghazal(Aik Khiyal AIk Haqeeqat)

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)

Gondal_007 April 12, 2007, 7:36am 1

thori bohat likhne ki koshish is na cheaz ne ki hay , inshallah ap ko meri ye koshish pasand na bhi aye to buri bhi nahi lage gi…

Koi to aysa ho , Jo tujhe bhi chahta ho
Apne piyar bhare Aangan mein, Tere gun gata ho

Akser neand se bojhal hoti hoi Aankhon mein
Tere sapnoun k Deep jalata ho

Kahin toan Udas na ho jaie, Is dar se
Apne ghamon ko chupa ker, Muskurata ho

Jab bhi perhne bethe wo or nazar pare kitabon per
Wahan sirf us ko, Tera hi Akss Nazar ata ho

Koi to aysa ho , Jo tujhe bhi chahta ho
Apne piyar bhare Aangan mein, Tere gun gata ho

Lekin ye sab tab ho Wahid, Jab Koi
Tujhe Bhi Chahta Ho, Tujhe Bhi Chahta Ho

aabla_pa April 12, 2007, 7:41am 2

Re: My Own Ghazal(Aik Khiyal AIk Haqeeqat)

Wah Gondal
Chaa gia hai :k:

Gondal_007 April 12, 2007, 7:45am 3

Re: My Own Ghazal(Aik Khiyal AIk Haqeeqat)

bohat bohat shukriya janab…
ap ko achi lagi is ka matlab hamari koshish theek thi

pk786 April 12, 2007, 10:47am 4

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it is really nice Gondal g aur apne talent ko underestimate nahin karte
keep trying yeh jo bade bade shair hain yeh start se hi aise nahin the likh likh k hue hain

NikamiJano April 12, 2007, 3:16pm 5

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nice koshish is ko shora-e-GS main hona chaiey :)

Aaj Kiss Baat Par Gussa Aaya ??????

Gondal_007 April 13, 2007, 7:21am 6

Re: My Own Ghazal(Aik Khiyal AIk Haqeeqat)

thanks pk786 hmmmm is ka matlab hay mein poet ban k apni book likh sakta hon:D

Gondal_007 April 13, 2007, 7:28am 7

Re: My Own Ghazal(Aik Khiyal AIk Haqeeqat)

thanku lekin kabhi kabhi rules mein narmi bhi kerleni chahyeay:hoonh:

Asma_Farhan April 13, 2007, 8:22am 8

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Boaht achi koshish hai. aap yaqeenaun achay shair bun saktay hain. Keep on trying.:)
p.s. Laykin aap ko sub say pehla autograph mujhe dena ho ga! :D

Gondal_007 April 14, 2007, 7:09am 9

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thanks Asma Farhan ... ab ye bataien autograph mein denay aoun ya ap lenay arahi ho:D

Darde_Dil April 14, 2007, 8:29pm 10

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wel done

Gondal_007 April 16, 2007, 4:21am 11

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Darde_Dil Thanks

chacha_Ghalib April 23, 2007, 4:32pm 12

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Kahin toan Udas na ho jaie, Is dar se
Apne ghamon ko chupa ker, Muskurata ho

:k:

Gondal_007 April 24, 2007, 4:51am 13

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Thanks chacha_Ghalib