my first ever attempt :)

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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mein rota rha

mein rota rha gum ko sharab mein dabota rha
ik dard bhari aas mein tamam umer khota rha

mein jalta rha hamesha baybasi ki aag mein
baymol merey ansoon ta daman jinmein bhigota rha

payar ka sila mila nhi, tere nafrat pa muja gila nhi,
yeh jung ageb te muja harna mein maza ata rha

yeh jo tera husan-0-jamal ha kudrat ka hasen kamal ha
kahan mere aese nain naksh tabi thokarein khata rha

ab rhe b to koi aas nahi ,han ishq ki muja ab payas nahi
tere qurbaton ka taveel dasht mein tanha hi bhatakta rha

kia pochatay ho mere yar ka, zalim ishq k khumar ka
ik saroor ha uska payar ka k bin piya mein bahekta rha

na jagraton ka hisab kia tumare qurbaton na bura hal kia
ajab dard-e-bawafai ha chot lagte rhe mein muskurata rha

mein rota rha gum ko sharab mein dabota rha
ik dard bhari aas mein tamam umer khota rha

regards
ra/en

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I must say fro First Try is Very Good :slight_smile:

Keep it Up Raven… I am sure we will see very good stuff from you … :flower1:

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a very good FIRST effort…keep writing mor… :k:

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:flower2: very nice:flower1:

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thanks a lot there is a lot of space for improvement
and will post my new master piece soon ;)
thanks for appreciation
post ur own if u gals/guyz like 2

regards
ra\/en

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:k: :k:

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yea, thats real good esp 4 ur first time... good job