my first effort..hope u will atleast see it..thanx!!

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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well most of my friends used to say that i must write something.they think that i can write..today i was just attending my class of advance database systems,and it was 6 hours long..suddenly while attending it,i start writing it..and within 20 minutes i was having this…

aab to eik saal honey ko aaya hai
aaj wo shaks phir sey yaad aaya hai

afakatonn key ghaney pair taley
aab to fakat bewafayi ka saya hai

ye janta hai dil key aab na laut kar wo aye ga
phir bhi ye dil kiyoon na maan paya hai

tanhai ki tareki mein uski hi roshni hai
yadon neinn uski eik aur diya jalaya hai

aaj phir sey kisi nein kaha “tum merey ho”
mujh ko phir sey uska sitam yaad aaya hai

bhula doon ga usko to kehlaoon ga bewafa
isi khayal sey dil usko na bhool paya hai

tumhari yadoon key bhanwar mein phans gaya hai “my name here”
janey kab sey wo is sey nikal na paya hai

tell how is it?.thanx:)

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Nice ,Keep IT uP :~) and Thanks for sharing

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very nice :_0
keep it up :K:

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Re: my first effort..hope u will atleast see it..thanx!!

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*Originally posted by Truth_Is_Beauty: *
well most of my friends used to say that i must write something.they think that i can write..today i was just attending my class of advance database systems,and it was 6 hours long..suddenly while attending it,i start writing it..and within 20 minutes i was having this...

aab to eik saal honey ko aaya hai
aaj wo shaks phir sey yaad aaya hai

afakatonn key ghaney pair taley
aab to fakat bewafayi ka saya hai

ye janta hai dil key aab na laut kar wo aye ga
phir bhi ye dil kiyoon na maan paya hai

tanhai ki tareki mein uski hi roshni hai
yadon neinn uski eik aur diya jalaya hai

aaj phir sey kisi nein kaha "tum merey ho"
mujh ko phir sey uska sitam yaad aaya hai

bhula doon ga usko to kehlaoon ga bewafa
isi khayal sey dil usko na bhool paya hai

tumhari yadoon key bhanwar mein phans gaya hai "my name here"
janey kab sey wo is sey nikal na paya hai

tell how is it?.thanx:)
[/QUOTE]

nicely express . Thanks for sharing .

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nice :slight_smile: keep it up :k:

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hmm not bad
balkay bohut acha....

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Re: my first effort..hope u will atleast see it..thanx!!

That_Is_Beauty:):k:…bohat khoobsoorat:)…keep it up.

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Truth is Beauty

That's nicely descripted, keep up the good work.

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very beautiful…seems like my story:crying:

keep it up:k: